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Review of Journal Of Mine  
Review by bigewalksalone
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Miss R.Kingly I have read your item and was very impressed!! Also let me
Thank You for having your Bio. filled out..It makes it so I can see how you
are thinking and why..I see your in Conn. to cold for me,but winter would
give plenty of time for writing..
It's your time alright!! You have a good thought process in your writing..
At first I was thinking you we're pointing out a Gossip!! My favorite line
was (Do you whisper my secrets to the other books?) by the way..
But now I feel you are looking for reassurance in your life..Do you like
going back and reading stuff you've written from years past? I have a lot to
read...
My only suggestion would be,Maybe break it down in a few verses..seems people
like to have a break in an item..I love free form poetry and all in all you
have a nice item either way...Keep it up..and I will read anything else I see
of yours..

Thanks for allowing me to read your stuff...E.

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Review by bigewalksalone
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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#1300305 by Maryann


Hello I am BIG E. And will be reviewing this as Member of WDC
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All my suggestions are just that suggestions...I believe any item
a person has written,is a tool to help others see...Your feelings
and thoughts. Therefore unique and can never be wrong!!

Hello Kimberly Danielle...I see your from Alabama....Roll Tide!! OR War Eagle ?
Thanks for having your Bio. filled out..It helps me a lot in a review..

Yes you have a song,I was able to sing it the second time I read it..And I agree
most songs are poems..Bob Dylan has amazed me for years!! But being able to write a poem that you can Sing..Is what sets them apart..
I feel you have done that...
My favorite verse is the first..nice opening lines..I would remove the word..very..It's not really needed and the words roll of your tongue better..
Can't help it i'm a lyricist more than a poet..
Also you only have 1 . in the whole item.. I like to put something like ...
-- at places where I want people to pause.. But as a poem it's fine..
I wish you could add a couple more verses in there..I think it's that good..
Hey all in all it's a great item..Enjoyed reading and reviewing it as well..
Keep it up!!!





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Review of Simply Rain  
Review by bigewalksalone
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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#1300305 by Maryann


Hello I am BIG E. And will be reviewing this as Member of WDC
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All my suggestions are just that suggestions...I believe any item
a person has written,is a tool to help others see...Your feelings
and thoughts. Therefore unique and can never be wrong!!

Hello Boss Lady..First I would like to say,what an amazing job you do!! Don't know how you can
keep up with everything!
Ok we will call this a review..But actually I wanted to see how a pro does it..Hoping to learn
something.. And I did! I love the rain also , And enjoyed your poem as well..It all comes together
from the before and after of a rain! Gray clouds and wind starting out..and a colorful rainbow to
let us know it's over..
The last verse is also my favorite..Sky tame Simply rain..
I've looked hard for a suggestion I could offer...Only thing I can say is: I don't like Baby Blue color!
Maybe forest green..lol..

I'll be back really just wanted to say Hi!






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Review of The Promise  
Review by bigewalksalone
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Simple Dykie..I have read The Promise and will review it..First thing I do is read people's Bio and ck. out their Port. Your Bio was perfect and I was able to draw some of it,into your item..See you we're born in 1957..Me 1960..
Well I can tell this is an item you seem proud of!!! And you should..It was great
and enjoyed reading it.. You slipped that Dad in on me at the end! I liked that..
Therefore the last verse is my fav.. I'm sorry that it took so long,
I was afraid and couldn't sleep.
I wish I could've been more strong,
A promise made, I need to keep.
No more tears, please don't be sad,
It's time to come home now, Dad.

I will offer no suggestions as I would hate to mess up a nice item like that..
You call Pennsylvania the East..lol..I'm down here in Georgia and will be looking for more of your stuff..

Thanks for allowing me to read your stuff...E.

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Review by bigewalksalone
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Anything with as much depth and detail as WDC has to be great....I'm still finding stuff that is new to me,and i've been here over a year..........If I could have had this when I was a teenager...No
telling where I would be.. SUPER PEOPLE that run all the stuff!! Really Impresses Me!
I'll be right here till ??...E..
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Review of ODE TO WDC  
Review by bigewalksalone
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello my FRIEND!! Really just checking in on you,seeing what all you have
written lately..Went right to this item..Super Job!! And I agree this site
is head and shoulders above the rest..Heck it took me a year to figure out
how to get around...Oh yea your item
The last line is my fav..I shall cut the bonds and move my dreams and bring them back with me,
From other sites and distant shores, to my home at WDC.e last line is my fav..

Yea this is home for me also..You need no suggestions on putting your thoughts
and feelings into words...Keep it up!! Holler at me i'm always around..E..


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Review by bigewalksalone
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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FlipthePaige from a town in the middle of nowhere...I like your song..I was able to
get the beat of it.. Your words flow well,thats something a lot of people are unable to do...I,m guessing Indiana?? Just graduated I see..Wish you well..Not one sole I graduated with do I keep in contact with..And time does seem to slip through your fingers..I really like the end of the song..Even if your losing,Don't lose yourself..
Like that.. I always said to myself ..Don't fool yourself..
My only suggestion is get familiar with this site and all the tools..I,m still learning myself.. But lay out means a lot..Keep Writing and good luck..E.

Thanks for allowing me to read your stuff...E.

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Review of Passion  
Review by bigewalksalone
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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#1300305 by Maryann


Hello I am BIG E. And will be reviewing this as member of WDC
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All my suggestions are just that suggestions...I believe any item
a person has written,is a tool to help others see...Your feelings
and thoughts. Therefore unique and can never be wrong!!

H.C. Paye that was a wonderful poem for me to read..Searching for one last review
to make before the deadline...And I found yours..The only 5.0 of the day..
It was straight and to the point ...Good rhyme,grammar and spelling..
Obvious that you are a skilled writer at a young age..All I say is keep it up and
I'll read more of your stuff later...




Thanks for allowing me to read your TEENAGE STUFF...E.
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Review of The Longest Stage  
Review by bigewalksalone
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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#1300305 by Maryann


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All my suggestions are just that suggestions...I believe any item
a person has written,is a tool to help others see...Your feelings
and thoughts. Therefore unique and can never be wrong!!

Lucia Cloud you have a very touching item..There we're many sparks of sadness I felt
while reading it. It may feel like your always getting hurt or the raw deal now!!
But people like you rise,above it..You express your thoughts well..and do wear them
on your sleeve..
I liked Take your hourglass and wrap it around your neck..Go Girl..
Maybe put it in some 4 line verse..some people get tired reading something with
no breaks in it..Just keep writing it down while it is flowing from you like it does now.. Great Job..And Taylor Swift is a great artist to listen to..





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Review by bigewalksalone
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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#1300305 by Maryann


Hello I am BIG E. And will be reviewing this as member of WDC
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All my suggestions are just that suggestions...I believe any item
a person has written,is a tool to help others see...Your feelings
and thoughts. Therefore unique and can never be wrong!!

Bianca This RY. must be a wonderful person,that no doubt has changed
your life. You almost make him sound fictitious ,for all the kind and - just being
there for you.. I will assume they are a real person,and keep them insight..
All in all you have a wonderful poem. Your creative and show your emotions well..

My favorite verse is the second one. Nicely done and shows someone how much they mean to
you... Only suggestion is you are a little sporadic with 4 lines then 3 then 4 maybe
give it a little more form..Or don't and it will be just fine..Keep Writing you do
have a talent for IT...Fill out your BIO it is helpful for reviewers..I just like tofictitious
know a little about the writer..




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Review of No Blue To My Sky  
Review by bigewalksalone
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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#1300305 by Maryann


Hello I am BIG E. And will be reviewing this as member of WDC
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All my suggestions are just that suggestions...I believe any item
a person has written,is a tool to help others see...Your feelings
and thoughts. Therefore unique and can never be wrong!!

Shaasay not sure of your age. Did not see it on your page..Assuming your a teen,found your stuff on a teen page..
I like how daring and confident you write...Seems your putting out what is on your mind
and just letting it flow..Nothing wrong with that. I,m not a form writer myself,I
like people to see who I am. You have also done that well..Only thing I can suggest
is maybe some of the lines are a little long and tongued tied me a little.But just keep writing stuff and it will all work out for you I'm sure...





Thanks for allowing me to read your TEENAGE STUFF...E.
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Review by bigewalksalone
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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#1300305 by Maryann


Hello I am BIG E. And will be reviewing this as member of WDC
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All my suggestions are just that suggestions...I believe any item
a person has written,is a tool to help others see...Your feelings
and thoughts. Therefore unique and can never be wrong!!

Secondsight21 I found this searching for teen stuff...Not sure of your age..
But here we go..A lyricist your are and enjoy being one. I read from your stuff...
Well I feel I'm more of a lyricist than anything..Been writing songs for about 35 years
on paper ..Wish I had the internet back then.. Your song is fine I see nothing wrong!!
With the lyrics or message..I have found it a challenge sometimes to put your song in a format that can be sung (feel the beat) by whoever is reading it..
I would try making your lines shorter..It can be read faster and I can get the rhythm
quicker... a lot of these... ..Seem to make me realize the song...??? may just be me..
See how verse 2 the lines get longer.. Look at verse 3 it's perfect I think..
Enjoyed reading keep WRITING.......

Also I would use a-hole..Not that i'm a saint it just shows strength..(READ DOUBLE TROUBLE by Lynynd Skynyrd) and see what I mean...




Thanks for allowing me to read your TEENAGE STUFF...E.
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Review of I Use To Be  
Review by bigewalksalone
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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#1300305 by Maryann


Hello I am BIG E. And will be reviewing this as member of WDC
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All my suggestions are just that suggestions...I believe any item
a person has written,is a tool to help others see...Your feelings
and thoughts. Therefore unique and can never be wrong!!

Erika You have accomplished the task of writing a sad item..You make it very easy to
feel for this person.I hope is not you.. I myself don't prefer sad stuff..But it is
a topic easily related to.
My favorite line :This girl you see who cries tears of blood, use to be a gilr who hardly ever cried.
Even if girl is misspelled.. The girl is opposite of what once she was..
I don't like all the spacing between lines...And a couple of lines to long..You made your point about half way through..

Your very good at bringing emotions into your stuff...A great effort for your age!!




Thanks for allowing me to read your TEENAGE STUFF...E.
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Review of Have You Ever?  
Review by bigewalksalone
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Have you ever written...Something so good.....
That everybody understood ??
Hello strlcuckoo your writing the kind of stuff that I love..
Your title was great. It was the first thing to catch my eye..
I like the right align.. Favorite line to me : comforted
a broken heart in pain?
You make it look as if we can go on forever and forever..
Really don't see a need for change...Maybe a brook run fast...nah
Great Job....Keep it up



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Review of The Black Beast  
Review by bigewalksalone
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Farnaz (I like your name) Your poem..It did grow on me after I read it a few
times..It seems to be timely with the troubles going on in the world today...
At first I pictured Satan then Hitler,neither like love or forgiveness!!

What I suggest work on punctuation and your capital letters..Some need to be..
And some don't need to be,get familiar with all the stuff on here you can use
to enhance your stuff...

Keep Writing I'll be looking for more from you!!!



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Review by bigewalksalone
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I think you have the beginning of a poem that has potential of reaching
a 5.0 rating.. I like your commitment you obviously have and how you are
comparing a marriage to a jail sentence..
I suggest getting a little more pattern to this item...The first verse
has 4 lines and the others have 6...Also you use the poem title twice in
the last verse,I think once,maybe the last line would be enough and also
leave the reader with a final thought of your subject that you are writing
about...



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Review of A Faded Love  
Review by bigewalksalone
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Ren my friend..I am glad you ask for a review on your item..You have a nice piece.
I feel to shape into a top notch poem..1. drop the second and in the first line 2. down down down
just seems to be to much...(maybe-rolling down ?) That's about it..See I wasn't
to critical..I like it..I like the thoughts your putting out..You have obviously
given some thought to this..and I respect that.. Try those or leave it alone
and start on another one...




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Review of Transparent Pages  
Review by bigewalksalone
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Phourous,You about made me cry! When you said squandered in a cold
home, It got me,hope this is not from experience or about someone you know.

I love free form poetry,you get the real persons thoughts,rather than a poem
made to fit a certain pattern...
Only suggestion I can think of,is make it a little longer, just a verse or two
you have the reader captured...Express yourself when it feels right!!!

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Review by bigewalksalone
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
My thoughts exactly..I like a style that does not conform to the patterns of poetry..
Your writing just flows...Like I think it should.. I really like the way you broke the lines
up.. Wanted to keep on reading... I will be looking and reading more of your stuff...
Bob Dylan did it Bobs way...
Thanks for allowing me to read your stuff...E.

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Review of The lost Paradise  
Review by bigewalksalone
Rated: E | (4.0)
Red lips I have reviewed your writing,and can tell you have a strong passion for this piece
and I like that. My only suggestion is the format is a little hard to read,and made my mind start to wander.

I am falling again into your arms
like a stupid bird falling from it's nest.
I am crying again
wondering how to stop this water

I am just hopping that I can drown your absent heart?

I can’t feel your presence

This is only a suggestion overall I like it.
Thanks for allowing me to read your stuff...E.
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Review of July Morning  
Review by bigewalksalone
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Nicely done. I feel you must be familar with loved ones in the military..Maybe not I relate
well to your item and have no family in the military. The freedom they have provided
us can never be brought to light enough. Keep on writing you have a nice flare...
Thanks for allowing me to read your stuff...E.
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Review of The Fat Outlaw  
Review by bigewalksalone
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Nice to read some thoughts of western days.. You have a great vision of how I also
picture things we,re.. excellent rhyme and you make the reader anxious to get to the
next line,,least I do.. I think those lawless and wilderness times would have suited me better what i,m seeing now..
Thanks for allowing me to read your stuff..E
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Review of The Elevator  
Review by bigewalksalone
Rated: E | (4.5)
I like your thoughts..Elevators are everywhere in life it seems..

My only suggestion is doors needs to rhyme with floors...[Being surprised by open doors}

Just a thought .. Thanks for allowing me to read your stuff...E
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