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I like to read novels and biographies, so if I can review them at the same time, why not. My ratings are usually at the high end because I think if someone has taken the time and effort to write a large piece, it is an achievement. The review will give the opportunity to flag up typographic errors. I do not mark down ratings for these errors because they are easily fixed.
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Rhyming Verse. Novels and short stories.
Least Favorite Item Types
Non-rhyming poetry.
I will not review...
Erotica, Vampire and Wolf stories. Their stories are all very samey to me.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Good to be continuing with this story. The writing remains at a high standard and I noticed no errors or typo's. The chapter starts with Jim and he seems to sink to even greater depths. I wonder what Al is up to with Mercurio but something is interfering with her and it adds a good deal of suspense. Jim's tricks were good and I wonder how Gary will react. Exciting stuff indeed.
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Review of "Oak Orchard"  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Mary turns up and I would be pleased to see her again if it were not for her pot smoking. She is a good character though and the interaction with Sam is good and believable. She mentions going to see her cousin and then set's off to her brothers. I don't know if this is an error or intentional. The crows are still playing their part which is a good thread to the story. I thought I noticed a typo but can't seem to find it again. A good interesting chapter.
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Review of "Oak Orchard"  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Things are moving on slowly and Sam is getting more puzzled. A good and interesting read again.
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Review of "Oak Orchard"  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
A good chapter and some good banter and atmosphere in the bar, even if some was not so welcoming as others. We meet Reddog who has a thing about him which we are just beginning to comprehend and no doubt he plays a big part in the story. I relate to the sound of the crows as there are some roosting in the trees near me. An enjoyable read.
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Review of "Oak Orchard"  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
The story continues and starts with what I believe to be the main theme. Well written again and I only noted one typo a missing t at (as if hearing my though(t) ). I like the introduction of the crows which makes me think of Hitchcock's, The Birds. I feel we need some interaction with someone, other than the spirit, even if it is just a brief exchange with passing neighbour. The story certainly keeps my interest.
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Review of "Oak Orchard"  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Well written and well presented again. I noticed no errors or typo's. A good description of the state of the house and the work in hand. A bit of backstory added and a good diversion to the nearby store with an unhelpful owner. I was a little disappointed that we didn't see any visit from Mary, but no doubt that will come.
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Review of "Oak Orchard "  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
I only noticed one typo and no other errors: 5th paragraph (you wantef to find out). The chapter is well-presented again with spaced paragraphs which makes it easier for the reader. The dialogue between the two characters is believable and business like as would be expected at this stage. I wonder if they become more close as time moves on and I look forward to finding out.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A well-written and interesting fictional tale from long ago. The characters are well drawn and there is enough description for me. A typo noted at: ( she would not marry him if the (he) dragged her to the altar ). A couple of small bits I felt were missing. The sound of horse's hooves and then the punch from Lord Nash with no indication that he had dismounted. A few sentences later he helped her to her feet but there was no indication that she had fallen. A great start to the novel but a pity the author has not visited for a long time. Hope she is okay.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Plenty going on as the judging begins and both Gary and Jim get through to the next round. Some good thoughts are left with the reader. Will Gary and Cherie begin to get on again or will she give up on him whether he wins or not? What is the mystery surrounding the scream? A good chapter with plenty to think about.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Another well-written and enjoyable read. I noticed no errors or typo's. I like the plot and themes in all the chapters, but the thing I like best in all stories is the dialogue and these chapters hit the spot for me. I look forward to the next chapter. It will be a disappointment if Jim gets away with his attack on Lacy, but that is up to the author.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Jim seems to be getting away with his crime, for the moment anyway. He seems to be getting more callous as winning seems to get near and he hopes within his grasp, but he realises Gary is a thorn in his side; and a good job too. I wonder will Cherie be offered Lacy's job? A nice long chapter with plenty going on and I noticed no errors or typo's.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Lacy dies as a result of her attack from Jim. I was not expecting that but it does add to the story at the cost of one of the characters. Jim was worried before about getting caught for the attack but he will soon have to worry about a possible murder charge. A good and interesting chapter. I noticed no errors or typo's.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow, edge of the chair stuff. Maybe you do need to read the previous chapters to fully understand this. But to those that have this is such a brilliant piece of writing and almost impossible to put down before the end. A well-written chapter and I noticed no errors or typo's.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The suspense in this chapter is intense. Jim is in a panic and realises he would be in big trouble if the truth comes out. Gary and Cherie continue in their love hate relationship which I feel is a good part to the story, in my opinion anyway. Will the relationship continue after the show when there is no more reason to continue? Have to wait and see. Does Jim become violent again as his fears increase? Have to wait and see.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Plenty going on in this chapter with three themes going on. The entertaining banter between Gary and Cherie continues. AL and Lacey are hard at work getting everything ready for the show. Jim is getting increasingly stressed thinking of Gary's act and makes a big mistake. I noticed no errors or typo's in this interesting chapter. I need to find out, of course, how Lacey is.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
I have not spoken much about the anomaly but when it appears the suspense is greatly increased. Thoughts and questions are in the readers mind and it is not clear yet if the anomaly is good or evil, although it leans more towards evil at the moment. Typo's noted: (take a shower.r5") ( her phone a(nd) leapt to her feet. ). Cherie might be getting a little drunk and I wonder if it leads to anything.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Possible typo: Sher answered, “This is Lacy.” Now that is out of the way, let me say this is a cracking chapter. All the chapters have been good but this is my favourite. Amongst the finest I have read on my time on WDC. The show and the lead up to it was very entertaining and the comments by Cherie when Jim was caught out, was great and funny. Not often do I start laughing when reading but I could not help it when she called him that classic name. I might keep this chapter and read it again when I need cheering up.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
We are getting nearer to the show and the suspense is building up. Jim is still under a false belief about Gary's skill. I did enjoy the chapter but I noticed the fiancé glitch three times: fiancthing, fiancwould and fiancand. Also, and just an opinion of mine which other readers may not agree with, the use of brackets. (Pause) and (Laughs). Seem to interfere and destroy the flow of the story. Nevertheless, this is an interesting, well-written and enjoyable chapter.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
With a risk of repeating myself, I really am enjoying the situations and dialogue between the characters, especially Gary and Cherie. The dream is a great piece of writing. Sometimes dreams are added for no other reason but to bulk the story or to deny something that has happened. I Remember the TV series "Dallas". In this case, however, the dream fits in. I think Gary was shown to have a dream before. Yes, as a reader I thought at first that the dream was real and found it to be full of drama and suspense with maybe the thought of some naughty romance. Brilliant, and not at all a let down when it was revealed as a dream because it fitted perfectly within the story.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I had to read the first bit twice because I was confused. Did Cherie's Mom pay for her ticket? This is a good chapter that moves the story forward. The interaction and dialogue between the characters is very good, as usual. Jim arrives by car and it seems as if his fear of the competition from Gary is getting to him. I noticed no errors or typo's.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Jim comes across as a bit worried and I wait and see how desperate he becomes. The telephone call from Mercurio is well handled. Sometimes in fiction the calls sound a bit false but here it was spot on. At the Movie chapter I was not sure if Cherie was on the house phone or outside on her mobile phone until further down when she hung up. There is also a couple of typo's: sense, should be sense. and a missing closing speech mark at eight o'clock. Minor things will make it better for the next reader. We find Jim interfering with things which he shouldn't and seems to get transported. An unexpected and great part to the chapter. We finish with "The cabinet was closed and locked." What is going on? The reader (me) asks. Always a great way to end a chapter.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A short but informative chapter that leads us forward. Mercurio is very interested in his task and I wonder if he will become a friend or a foe. Cherie always come across as a good character and this time is no exception; she is very likable in the story, so far. There is a missing close speech mark at: "Please do.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The chapter starts with a reference to Jim which is always interesting as to how he is getting on with his task to compete against Gary. It continues with Gary and his time in his workplace and the suspense is strong as the anomaly appears. This is balanced with a good piece of domestic time with Cherie. One of the last sentences needs an opening quote mark. Earlier: fiancyet. Not sure if this is a typo or a clever play on dialogue words.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
As expected, another interesting chapter. Although it is fiction I get the feel that it is as if we are looking in to actual facts. I have not come across a single chapter in this work where it has not kept me fully interested and the ends always give me the need to read the next item. No errors noticed.
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Review of Chapter 1  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
A good and interesting start to the story. It is well-written and I noticed no grammar or typographic errors. The characters are well-drawn and their names are easily pronounceable. The hook at the end is good and will prompt the reader to continue when the next chapter is presented. The visual presentation can be improved if you have a mind to do so. At the top of your work the gear wheel takes you to the edit tab which will display the edit line. If you select your work and select the 5 option it will increase the font size. At the bottom select advanced and then on paragraphs select double. If you try it I am sure you will be pleased with the effect.
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