Hello, Captaintaya here with a review for this poem on behalf of "Invalid Item"
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Imagery: I must say this....I love this poem! I love animals above all things in this world, and was so happy to of came across this poem. I enjoyed the imagery founf in this. The description was very showy and very easy to see what all was happening! I can't stop thinking of my own cats now and how they do this to me all the time. Scratch me cause I had a clean shower and they want to lick my hair dry!! Or nip at my fingers cause i may have the taste of supper still on them! Such a wonderful poem you have here and I am so happy to of had this chance to read it!
Flow: Very good flow indeed. Smooth read, very understandable, and gentley written. Bravo!
Suggestions:None
Favorite part: My favorite part of course is the end! I love how you finally figured out what it was the silly cat was after! Even tho they cats talk to us, its nice that they have their own silly ways to let us know about things we have that they want!
Final thoughts: Such a wonderful poem you have here and I am so happy to of had this chance to read it!
Hello, Captaintaya here with a review on behalf of "Invalid Item"
I would forst like to say thank-you for your participation within our fundraiser for many charities here around wdc.
Imagery: This poem provides very heartwarming imagery. Such wonderful description of love, loss, and memories of lovers. I could feel your words take me away into a time where love was seen and how slowly it had to be let go, with them most gentlest of memories left behind to sooth the aching heart. Very well done.
Flow: I enjoyed reading this as it flowed so smoothly along. Simple and warming read of poetry indeed, and with the use of rhyme, it added such a wonderful touch to the poem. It helped it capture the moments deep within.
Suggestion: None
Favorite part: I seem to be not able to pick just one favorite part as i read this poem. The whole poem spoke out to me and made my heart melt. Such a fabulous poem.
I can see why this poem has an award upon it. Its such a strong heartfelt poem and is written very well. Great Job!
Hello sweetie, as you know I was bound to make my way back to where I feel like home, and this is here, within your lovely port. On behalf of "Invalid Item" I will be taking a few moments to review this piece, thanks to your generous participation.
I can see topaz right now, looking at this and saying....what other contestant? LOL
You have done a amazing job describing life's joyful moments that lead up to life's happiest laughters. I can't believe how often I though about using words close enough to ( laughter ) that would have fit in this piece but knowing you can't use them, must have been so hard! But you pulled it off and did a remarkable job with this. Bravo!!
I like how you took great memories and placed them in the scene. Its brillance I tell ya, sheer brillance!
And now, this is where I say: What are you having for supper?? LOL
Thanks for a wonderful share babes,a nd good luck in the contest. I know if I was the judge, I'd give you two thumbs way way up!!
Hello sweetie, Captaintaya here with a review for this piece on behalf of your participation in "Invalid Item"
This poem speaks out with warmth, love, and with a gantle touch of faith. To not fear our creator, and to place as much trust in him and he does us, is a wonderful thought to have. You have captured the words he says within your owns words also, and it shows you have the faith to live this life and know that as you live it, you are loved. I love the opening line of the second stanza the most. For I do believe that once we exit from this world, and whole new world indeed opens up for us, and that within that world, the difference will be seen and felt strongly.
You gave excellent description and your flow was so simple to follow along with. You have such a great way to open the mind to what heaven shall be like when we do actually pass to that point.
Thanks for a great share and keep them creative juices flowing!!
Hello Captaintaya here with your review for being the highest bidder on a fellow mate in "Invalid Item" !
Imagery: Beautiful, heartfelt and so breath-taking. You have written this with much love, much devotion and much care. I could feel the love just pour inside this poem due to the way you have worded each line, each stanza!! This provides excellent imagery indeed to feed the imagination.
Flow: This was a very easy to follow poem, and the flow of it was set just right, and with the added rhymes, it just stands right out. You have done a great job catching my attention to this area also.
Suggestions: None
Favorite Part: The very last stanza. It made my eyes water.
Thank you so much for a lovely share, keep up such fabulous poetry!!
Ohhh, I think this is my favorite so far, such call for love, the longing, the purity, the warmth and security one can provide. Such sweet words of romance. The ending line is what really took my breath away. I envy your talent to write such wonderful romance poems. You have such a amazing passion for this, and your words are truely touching to the heart and soul. Your description in this piece set my mind alfoat. It sheds such sweet memories my way.
Your flow once again so gentle and loving!
Thanks again for another share, your a fantasic writter, and I hope to keep reading more and more as time goes by.
Captaintaya
Another masterpiece. Such great passion of romance you posses. Each word of description to this woman, sent me drifting away to a spot of sheer romance. The emotion found within it, is so touching, so warm.
Again, the privided audio adds the magic touch. Adds the voice of love, desire, romance to the poem.
Thanks again for another beautiful share of poetry.
Captaintaya
This is beautiful, just truely beautiful, the desire to want within it, the fact you crave the love in such way of emotion. Truely remarkable written poem. The description is fabulous and the flow was so gentle, so moving. The audio provided adds thats magic touch to it.
Thanks for a very beautiful read!
Well what can I say?? Excellent job done with this poem. No errors at all noticed, the description is as always supurb and the flow is what it is, fantastic. Very well creative and amazing in its own dark form...your muse should be proud to pop out such a masterpiece!!
OK, this looks great, so I have re-rated it from a 4 star to a 4.5 star. It's very tidy now, and looks wonderful.
I feel as if I had just sat in a theater and watched you do a ballet presentation or even a art presentation of this. The vibe, the pulse, just very remarkable. As if the body was made to sway to this. Made to capture each word, each feeling. Thanks for such a great read, and keep on writing!!
Hello sweetie, Captaintaya here with another review for yet another great poem.
I happen to adore this poem very much. The fact that you have really nailed the common grounds that sisters stand upon is fantastic. You've really done such an oustanding job describing what its like being sisters within an arcostic poem, Bravo my friend and keep up such lovely work!
Hello, Captaintaya here with a review for this poem.
Imagery: What a great way to start out with in a poem. Imagery is what provides us readers the chance to open our minds and allow it to vision what the author is trying to say within his work. Your imagery in this poem is good.
Flow: The flow to this poem is gentle, pouring emotions inside and left to dry in the end. Such wonderful simple short poem with more meaning to it then it says.
Suggestions: The ending is a bit dry, it could use a little added touch perhaps to end it a more heartfelt way. Leaving it where it is would be fine if you placed a period to it, but still it leaves the reader in curiousity, as to why this person couldn't hear your pleads or see your kindness.
Favorite part: I would have to say that the begiining had struck me greatly when I first started to read it..it opened up so nicely, and then it kinda fell in the end.
Thank you for the share of poetry. I do hope my review is somewhat what you were expecting and somewhat helpful in anyway.
xoxoxo
Captaintaya
Hello, Captaintaya here with a review for this piece.
First of all I would like to say, thank you for giving me this chance to visit your work today.
Imagery:You have such great inner heartwarming imagery within this poem. The sense of love, contentment, and pure passion, felt within each word. The description is fabulous and it really grabed my attention.
Flow: This area of the poem was good but due to the way the poem presented itself, it kinda threw me off a wee bit. But nothing can nopt be fixed, which leads me to the next part of this review!
Suggestions: I am thinking perhaps, setting this piece into 4 lined stanza's or even 3 lined stanza's, as to where you can take out so many of them periods and place some needed comma's in place. I can actually help you along in this area if you wish to give me the chance. If not, just say so...I do believe each writter has their own style and their own ways of writting. I just do believe that this as it stands is kinda jumbled together, and can really use some punctuation and some serious spacings. The fact that some lines are so short and then some so long, having it maybe in stanza's can help this poem be a little more presenting and have that glorious chance to shine bright as the words and emotion set deep inside!
Overall Impression: It is a lovely romantic poem, and its so pure an very heartwarming to read. I did enjoy it, even with the suggestion area open in mind.
Thanks again for such a lovely share, and I do encourage you to keep on writting!!
Hello, Your favorite reviewer here to review this poem.
Imagery : Creepy..but satisfying. The description is very well told in this piece and gave me shivers as I read along.
Flow: Shall I hide my head now, thinking some demon will come get me or shall I sit here and just say: VERY well done in this area!!
Excellent job in this form of poetry, the meter is perfect and right on key, the syllable count is 10 per line and is in perfect order, the rhyme scheme is brilliant and no forced rhyme seen at all, and the use of darkness as a genre for this type of form must have been rather hard to conquer but you have managed to do a fabulous job with it.
Suggestions: NONE
My favorite part:
Tears cascade from heaven like sin's cement.
Horrid winds blow on~ see angel's stone dead.
Death laughs openly at this sick repent.
Such perverse endings for those sweetly bled.
This is my favorite only because it set some creepy little shivers up my spine, thanks for that btw...lol
Overall Impression: Very well written, I think this is your best form written poem yet,and can't wait to see you take on many other types of poetry forms in the future!!
Thanks you very much for the wonderful share and keep on writting!!
Hello, Just popping in to give a donation, Hope it helps out!!
I also would like to say that I am loving being a member to this group, and also thanks again for accepting me as part of the Raok Family!!
I just love helping out others and feel this is right where I belong being on this site!
Having the chance to be part of something so great, helping newbies, reviewing them, sharing advice and what knowledge I do have, gives me such joy!
xoxoxoxo
Captaintaya
This poem, is kinda how I felt with my husband at point..So it wasn't too hard to relate to.
The imagery you provided within this, just sent me straight back down memory lane. The fact you want him gone, but him to stay, the feeling of being torn in a choice that must be made..such a hard choice at that. The coming to realize, its just not what you want just yet. That its the anger talking, taking over the mixed emotions felt deep inside.
The flow to this poem was very good, smooth sailing from beginning to end. Another one I just couldn't peel my eyes from.
I have no suggestions on this piece, it is what it is and that is, a very well written poem.
My over all impression of this piece is simple, summed up in one word (( Outstanding))
Thanks again for a really fabulous share of poetry
OOOOOOOOOO, a more darker side of poetry..I LIKE!!
Imagery: Such a vast amount that leads to a certain suspence laid out deep within. A story told in poetic form, one very well written and with this type of dark style it sends my mind into a shadow of the unknown till the final ending may come to me. This is sooo, wow. I just can't say the right words.. This I will be sending ann for sure..I know she'll just love this!
Flow: I just couldn't stop reading..screaming kids in behind me and I couldn't even turn away!! Excellent use of rhyme in this piece and I just love the way my imagination flowed along so easily with this.
Suggestions: None
Overall Impression: Fantastic read!!
Favorite part: The ending...it leaves me wondering, and wanting to know but at the same time....not wanting to know my own fate!!
This is so beautiful. It really has such powerful emotion behind each word. A fantastic read!
Imagery: Truely remarkable wordings. Each line and each stanza, stands out and grabs hold of my heart. The feeling of such great hope I get from this...it's a very emotional poem to read. Excellent description added in.
Flow: Amazing. Very very stunning, and so wonderful. I just can't get over the way it makes me feel. Such a gentle loving piece.
Suggestions: None
Overall Impression: Outstanding poem to read, and I really enjoyed it so very much. Thanks so much for another wonderful share!
Hey sweetie, Thanks for the guidance on the way here!!
I'll get right down to business,a nd enjoy the reading along the way, for I know that everything you write has beautiful meaning and very touching thoughts within each piece!
Imagery: Your words to describe how God works, are very wise and true. Each line created the truth deep within his holy power. Each line written in perfection, and each line sets a wonderful feeling of love, hope, and honesty.
Flow: Excellent style of poetry and with this being your choice to write about, you have sent me on a very smooth read. I read it twice just to make sure it had sunk in deep within my mind!
Suggestions: None
Overall Impression: Very well written. Just the right touch to keep the message of the lord and all he does going!
Hello sweetie. I'm here with a review for this poem
Imagery: I love the description in this poem. The scenery you have provided touches me so deeply. I vision a drout so sever, so intense and yet at the same time I can see feel the cold air of the night within the desert. The lack of shelter from heat and lack of shelter from the cold.
Flow: I really love the rhyming, in which i find it adds so much to the poem. This poem stands out so much within the basic two areas of a poem. Bravo
My favorite part: I really adore the ending. The running of horses within a desert and the hope of a single drop of rain. Was very touching.
Hello, tayasky here with a review for this wonderful poem.
Imagery: Fantastic wordings to make the reader stay connected to this particular poem. I really love the way you gave such a small description of each wee little girl. Such a wonderful way to express there differences yet also their appearances through your eyes.
Flow: Amazingly smooth to read, heart warming and tender along the way. With the use of rhyme, it really reads so gently and was very simple to follow along with from beginning to end.
Suggestions: None.
Overall Impression: Very beautiful poem about being a mother, and I really did enjoy the way you created a small scene of what makes each child so special in your eyes and heart. Lovely share.
Thanks for a lovely share and remember to always write on!! Tayasky
Wow, sheer brilliance in prose. the darkness but love trapped inside this piece. I like the way you describe the feelings and also enjoyed the way you were able to twist them to be surrounded in darkness. I really enjoy reading your poems and your prose, and I do hope my reviews as honest as they are help out with getting you noticed more for the dark writer you are here at wdc.
Don't ever give up writing in this fashion, for it is what makes you so unique.
Bravo again on another fantastic prose, and always remember to write on!!
I never knew you did a prose. This is very well written. It has such strong powerful words to describe the events in which are happening through out it, well done with the flow also. I found it easy to follow and simple to understand.
Thanks for a great share hun and keep up such great work!!
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Imagery: I must say this....I love this poem! I love animals above all things in this world, and was so happy to of came across this poem. I enjoyed the imagery founf in this. The description was very showy and very easy to see what all was happening! I can't stop thinking of my own cats now and how they do this to me all the time. Scratch me cause I had a clean shower and they want to lick my hair dry!! Or nip at my fingers cause i may have the taste of supper still on them! Such a wonderful poem you have here and I am so happy to of had this chance to read it!
Flow: Very good flow indeed. Smooth read, very understandable, and gentley written. Bravo!
Suggestions:None 
Favorite part: My favorite part of course is the end! I love how you finally figured out what it was the silly cat was after! Even tho they cats talk to us, its nice that they have their own silly ways to let us know about things we have that they want!
Final thoughts: Such a wonderful poem you have here and I am so happy to of had this chance to read it!
Imagery: I love the description in this poem. The scenery you have provided touches me so deeply. I vision a drout so sever, so intense and yet at the same time I can see feel the cold air of the night within the desert. The lack of shelter from heat and lack of shelter from the cold.