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The movie that was being shown today at RC was District I was not really sure what to expect from it since so few science fiction movies have been made lately and I did not like the remake of War of the Worlds or the movie Avatar. This one, however, I did enjoy. It was different from most sci-fi movies even though it did have elements of an old plot. It was pretty politically oriented too.
After the movie there was a discussion group which I stayed for even though I do not answer the questions the woman leading it asks. I like listening to what other people say about what they got out of the films. Sometimes a person will bring up something that it reminds them of that most of us were not very familiar with and we learn something new. This is particularly true when the movies deal with prejudice and genocide and there are people in the group whose families experienced such treatment.
Our chorus rehearsal was after the discussion. Tim did a lot of talking and we did not do a lot of singing, but we did go over the chorus from the opera Nabuko and a fun song. Carol brought desserts that were left over from our party last week, so we had snacks.
When the chorus rehearsal ended, I had a short break before the play rehearsal, or what the director called a speed reading. We just did our lines straight through in order without being interrupted and told to repeat, but when one of us forgot or missed a line that was given to us. Tomorrow we will rehearsal with the props and will have our pictures taken for the poster they make advertising the play.The movie that was being shown today at RC was District I was not really sure what to expect from it since so few science fiction movies have been made lately and I did not like the remake of War of the Worlds or the movie Avatar. This one, however, I did enjoy. It was different from most sci-fi movies even though it did have elements of an old plot. It was pretty politically oriented too.
After the movie there was a discussion group which I stayed for even though I do not answer the questions the woman leading it asks. I like listening to what other people say about what they got out of the films. Sometimes a person will bring up something that it reminds them of that most of us were not very familiar with and we learn something new. This is particularly true when the movies deal with prejudice and genocide and there are people in the group whose families experienced such treatment.
Our chorus rehearsal was after the discussion. Tim did a lot of talking and we did not do a lot of singing, but we did go over the chorus from the opera Nabuko and a fun song. Carol brought desserts that were left over from our party last week, so we had snacks.
When the chorus rehearsal ended, I had a short break before the play rehearsal, or what the director called a speed reading. We just did our lines straight through in order without being interrupted and told to repeat, but when one of us forgot or missed a line that was given to us. Tomorrow we will rehearsal with the props and will have our pictures taken for the poster they make advertising the play.The movie that was being shown today at RC was District I was not really sure what to expect from it since so few science fiction movies have been made lately and I did not like the remake of War of the Worlds or the movie Avatar. This one, however, I did enjoy. It was different from most sci-fi movies even though it did have elements of an old plot. It was pretty politically oriented too.
After the movie there was a discussion group which I stayed for even though I do not answer the questions the woman leading it asks. I like listening to what other people say about what they got out of the films. Sometimes a person will bring up something that it reminds them of that most of us were not very familiar with and we learn something new. This is particularly true when the movies deal with prejudice and genocide and there are people in the group whose families experienced such treatment.
Our chorus rehearsal was after the discussion. Tim did a lot of talking and we did not do a lot of singing, but we did go over the chorus from the opera Nabuko and a fun song. Carol brought desserts that were left over from our party last week, so we had snacks.
When the chorus rehearsal ended, I had a short break before the play rehearsal, or what the director called a speed reading. We just did our lines straight through in order without being interrupted and told to repeat, but when one of us forgot or missed a line that was given to us. Tomorrow we will rehearsal with the props and will have our pictures taken for the poster they make advertising the play.Your introduction has mistakes in it. Did you mean to say you have I ever been to Japan or Europe? That should be connected in one sentence then. Or Europe is not a sentence. There are no periods before and inside of hyphens. And, your last one is unnecessary. I also do not know why you used * there and in the story.
The story is pretty interesting. I like your character Crimson, but you have no paragraphs, you make sentences from fragments, and your dialog does not have correct punctuation. Each time a different person speaks you should indent and put what they say in quotation marks. Also, for at least the first two lines of dialog you need to indicate who is speaking. You do not have to continue that with each line as long as you separate them. The reader will know that it is a question, or statement, and response back in the order in which it began.. Here is an example:
"Put the gun down," I told him.
"No!" he shouted back.
"You don't really want to do this now, do you?"
Pay more attention to what you read and how it looks on the page and practice that. Your dialog could also use some work. It does not sound like people really talk.
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