This is a very good source of information, some really handy hints here.
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I really enjoyed this easy to use guide. There is a lot of information here to digest but with easy to use step by step instructions everyone will be writing about unique characters, all with characterm specific personalityy traits, jobs families etc, in other words all the things we can sometimes leave out because we are trying to write what is in our head before we think about how our characters need to react.
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I found no spelling or grammar errors here
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Comprehensive and easy to use, it is definatly now resting amoungst my favourites to come back to time and time again.
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This one had me howling with laughter. Not for the younger readers mind
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These rhyming verses had me in stitches, I could really visualise santa there on the lawn.
I love the way you draw the reader right into the poem with your vivid images.
I am not so sure about the use of characters though.
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I found no grammar or spelling issues here.
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I giggled all the way through. Thanks so much for the enjoyable read
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This is a very powerful poem full of darkness and emotion.
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The rhymic flow of this poem only acts to enhance the sorrow of this poem, the tragedy behind it and illuminates pityfully on the wound accross that wrist.
There is just one verse that doesnt quite fit the rhyme:
"I can still smell her perfume,
Picture sunlight on her hair.
Even while memories loom
And I drown in bloody tears."
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I found no errors great job
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Fantastic poem, the emotion shines through, even through the dark and sorrowful tone.
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A multicoloured "storm" of a piece. Acts as an invaluable guide to this mad port
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I had to giggle, the whole piece is a whirlwind in itself.
It is great how you have sorted your pieces of work and made this most excellent guide. Something perhaps all writers should do here. It has certainly helped me find my way.
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"short annd relevant" - and
"with fierce intensity." - should the gap be here? There are a few of these gaps around this piece.
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Fantastic idea, also gives a little mad intro into what to expect to all those who venture in your port. Great Job
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I had my toe tapping along tot he natural rhythm of the poem. Beautifully written. Feels like it could be one of the church hymns I loved when I was younger.
Certainly gave me that same high.
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I found no errors here
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A great song/poem giving praise. The soft rhyme really works well here.
What a fantastic idea. As soon as the Endu Review is over I would love to come back and try this out, it sure sounds like a lot of fun
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I love the easy to understand step by step approach, makes a good laymans guide to anyone wishing to develop their creativeness within the community. Great job
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I found no grammatical or spelling errors here. Nice one
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This is a fantastic idea, one that I certainly hope to try out for myself.
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That father seems a brute. How cruel he is to the little girl in this story.
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was deeply saddened adn distrubed by how brutal and harsh the father here seems.
Great imagery here, I love the way the scenery rushed past the car indicating the speed of their travel.
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I found no grammatical or spelling errors here.
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Saddening, how a man can act so brutal to one so young is beyond me. There is obviously a lot to do here, and I am sure that there is a lot more to come.
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Although I am not a great fan of repetition throughout poetry (although I do have one or two pieces that have repeating lines throughout for effect) and I did find it a little cumbersome and awkward in places, I was drawn to this poem for its simplicity and light uplifting mood it creates.
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I found no grammatical or spelling errors. Nice one
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I really like the mood this poem creates, the softness and comforting tone flows nicely.
Again I am not too comfortable with the repetiton throuhgout but understand that it firstly was intended as lyrics.
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I felt the pace of the poem dragging me ever onwards through the poem, I felt like I too was being pulled through the nightmare. Creepy, but so very effective. Nice work
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I found no errors here great job
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Great atmospheric poem, I love the little details here and there, some nice touches
"He strikes his pose and flashes his grin"
Very sinister image. Cleverly written. Nice one
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This poem is so sad, but too often true in relationships.
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The rhyme scheme here indicates drudgery and dreariness, everyday the same, monotone, it feels to me that this about a relationship going or gone sour, or if not sour then at least lost its peak, its romance, its love.
Heart wrenching to read as it is so real in many cases.
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I noticed no errors here
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Quite a sad toned piece of writing, really tugs as it is so down to earth.
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This is a very sad poem, you seem to have given up the fight to keep your love alive.
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It is always a hard subject to talk about, losing a love in some form or another, wether to death or another woman or to some other means. You have however captured that loss here very effectively.
I feel it in your mood and tone, the long drawn out lines reflecting your spirit.
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I found no grammatical or spelling errors here. Great job
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A sad but effective poem. You have really created the emotion here, my heart goes to you.
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I love the imagery used here to depict the clear crispness, the frosty feel. Very atmospheric, I felt I was there with the snow falling peacefully around.
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This poem doesn't have any punctuation in the first half, is there a reason for this?
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I love the winter image you have painted here, reminds me that Christmas is oh so close now
A tribute to a loved one whos precious life was ripped away in such a horrid way.
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I am sure this poem was so hard to write, rememberign the pain of his passing. You have however done him proud this is a great tibute to him.
You have though lost a little of the magical control you have over your rhyme scheme towars the end, It doesnt quite fit there as naturally as perhaps it could.
"The grandest person.
The kindest first one."
Maybe you would consider revising?
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Have another look at your punctuation. If you read the poem aloud you will find where ther pauses and stops should be, as they dont quite sit as well as they should.
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I am sure your friend would be very proud that he had a friend in you, your tribute to him is worhty of praise.
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Isnt it amazing what things we don't want to throw away. Little pieces of junk that to anyone else mean nothing but to us means a lifetime of laughs, joy, fears, cries, wonderment.....
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This friendly little ditty filled me with warm and tender memories of little treasures stashed neatly in an old box I have at my parents house. Great atmospheric piece and very apt for the season
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I found no errors great job
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Nicely written, just a shame there is no more
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I really enjoyed this tale. Althougha sad and sombre tale of death and destruction of a race, it also carries a message of bravery till the last.
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Faultless narrative, the imagination run wild on this one, I envisaged those terrible huge creatures swervign through the toxic mist. I'm not usually a sci fi fan but this wowed my attention till the end.
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Faultless
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A great read, I was captivated.
I have no suggestions to give, this piece is great
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I really felt a link with this poem, it reminds me so much of my own life, you have captured that feeling of guilt perfectly here.
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Your rhyming couplets enhance the guilt feeling, almost doubles it then trebles it etc echoing through the years until the day of realisation. I loved the way your poem had a narrqative that told your story uncomplicatedly and to the point. Wonderful
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I found no grammatical or spelling mistakes great job
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I really felt at one with this poem, it related to my own life. You have written this so emotionally without burdoning it with flowery detail. Excellent
A wondeful poem about the blossoming of friendship. A delightul read
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I enjoyed the radiance of colours throughout your poem, it truly enhanced the message of friendship, I felt uplifted, a warm and tender tone throughout gave the poem a freshness and crispness.
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I found no grammatical or spelling errors here. Nicely done
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A wonderfully uplifting poem.
My favourite line:
"Silently, the yellow -green garden dissolved
Behind us."
Simply beautiful
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A delightful poem, such a sweet happy go lucky tone. Uplifting.
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The shortness of the poem does not lack in quality. This little rhyme sums up so effectively the care and nurturing instinct and want of a parent towards a child. Beautiful.
One suggestion: in the last line of all it feels there should be a the between "and" and "nights" so it would be in line with first half of this line and keep timing with the rest of the rhyme scheme in the poem.
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I found no grammatical or spelling errors great job
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Very sweet poem, says it all in very short space. Nicely written
This is such good advice, a most valuable document to everyone at writing.com indeed.
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Your easy to read, step by step guide will have everyone editing succesfully. This is a great tool for everyone. Easy to understand and full of good ideas. Great piece
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I found no grammatical errors.
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Wonderful. This is a much needed to tool. I certainly will be editing my items as soon as I can.
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As I am about to be married in just under 7 months, I found this beautiful and appropriate. This is a wonderful way of looking at marriage, in the form of colours uniting on a canvas once combined forever remaining.
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The illustrations on this piece are beautiful, highlighting as in fact your expression of the two colours combining. Your easy way of description and light hearted view on the subject draws the reader in to listen. Wonderfully written
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I found no grammatical or spelling errors here. great job
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A fantastic view on marriage, it would also make a wonderful speach at a wedding.
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Seems you had a wonderful childhood and teen years, You are very fortunate indeed, it is a sad fact unfortuantley that not all teenage years are so tranquil.
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You paint a bright picture, a wonderful picture in fact, one that many people would have and do experience as they are nurtured and develop within a loving family.
However not all family life is as wonderful as yours seems to have been, and this is not reflected in this piece. I am sure millions of teens in the world would love to have what you obviously had growing up.
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I found no errors great job
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It is wonderful to gain an insight into others lifes and you have painted a loving picture here of your family life as a teen. I would have liked to have seen a little empathy towards those who cannot enjoy that upbringing instead of the words of wisdom you offered.
This is so emotional and so lovingly written, I am sure Jose knows how you feel.
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You write fromt he heart. The best pieces I have written come straight from the heart and this is among them for deffinate. I love the way you describe in detail the events that make you remember, the good and the bad. Wonderfully written
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I found no grammatical or spelling errors great job
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Heartrendering,really pulled my heart strings. THis is written beautifully
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How poigniant! the time when you yourself held yoour sister's hand the day she died. Sad yet wonderful all the same.
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Very descriptive and lots of wonderful imagery here, thus adding to the poingniancy. I feel very much that you loved your sister deeply, this is all so very evident from your choice of words.
I did find some of the verses don't quite fit as neatly as it could however and this poerhaps is an injustice to the poem itself, for example
"Five years my elder; at Lynchet Cottage a bedroom we shared.
Memories of frequent, huddled, and whispered conversations.
Of frogs in beds; wild chases; and of tempers flared.
A plethora of family days with hoards of our relations.
Green eyed Betty; beautifully slim and auburn haired.
When my nightmares struck, she'd look in consternation,"
Here the rhyme scheme although it is there if you look, doesnt quite sit as easy as the rest of the poem, this maybe because it is too complicated a scheme and maybe this could be simplified a little so that your wonderful story can be relayed easier to the reader.
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I have found no grammer or spelling errors. Great job
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A wonderful poem about a lifetime relationship with you sister, harm warming and rendering at the same time. Wondefull. A delightful read.
I have read this item once before when I first joined the community, and have never referred back to it until now.
As I am one of the contestants for the Endu Review, I thought a little reading up on what makes a great review would help.
Indeed it has, I now know much more about how I should be reviewing and have taken some great tips.
I hope to be putting these into practice from now on in in my reviews.
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