This is a delightful poem, it is listed as for children but for me this is for everyone children of all ages the young and the old. We all need to hear the magic mirror now and again.
Beautiful poem indeed and so full of innocence. I love it!
Write on!
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What a lazy laid back summer afternoon poem this is
The slow rhythm of the poem makes the dreamy flow of the piece as gentle as the ripples on the pond you describe. I loved the atmosphere of the poem, not a thing wrong in the world, just an afternoon watching the geese under a willow tree over the pond.
This is a great poem that parents will love to read children and children will love to hear.
I imagine myself back in the classroom on the itchy carpet we had in the reading corner, 30 of us kids all sat around and my teacher reading aloud. Your poem transported me back over 20 years, I loved that teacher and he would have made all the actions, and paused just at the right spot over emphasising your words. This is one of those poems that seam just RIGHT there.
I wonder if you have read a poem by Ted Hughes entitled "THe Thought Fox". It is a magical poem about writing a poem in its basic terms. About first feeling there is nothing to say and then as if by magic thoughts have entered the mind and the poem is written. Your poem very much reminds me of "The Thought Fox".
This is a very beautifully presented, perfectly punctuated, poem, its form and shape neat concise, but the content vibrant, lashing out and making a statement. This one will remain and linger a while in my memory as well as reminding me of one of my favourite poets.
Thanks for the great read.
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I love visiting your port you always have a new form of poetry to teach me, this is another, the Lilibonnelle.
You have executed this form in all your wonderfulness. I just love this night time poem. the imagery, the sounds, I can almost taste and smell the darkening hours.
You have triumphed again. Truly magical poem.
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This one really made me giggle. Wonderful zany names you have for your furbabies.
I love the shape this septet makes, almost like a bauble, it has given me an idea for a christmassy (is there such a word?) version which I will try out as I have tried this form of poetry.
You seem to have not only tried but mastered this form, this is a lovely piece and a true credit to you.
Write on
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I loved this poem. I felt my toe tapping to the gently unforced rhythm, and almost read it like a song, in fact I imagine this would work great to the dulcet sounds of an old church organ (although I must admit most of the congregation in my church are quite old and their voices wouldnt do this beautiful poem justice at all hehe).
My favourite line is the last two -
"I'm truly blessed by you my Lord,
for being both my shield and sword" - strong passionate and full of awe and respect and love for Our Lord.
Fantastic writing!
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This reminded me of the time I was in university and missed home terribly. This is a great poem.
I love your use of the senses here, everything is vivid here, I can really feel your longing as you remember the small details of back home, the smells, the colours, the sounds. Great stuff!
Very nostalgic poem, made me think of my home very much (even if I only live a few miles from my family hehe)
So many poets have written about the subject of the paths we choose, here you have managed to keep this personal to yourself as well as inviting others to read you.
I love poetry that is written maily for the person writing them, it is a shame that many poets fail to keep that their sense of self in their poetry especially when writing on such topics as this. You however have grasped that and have written from the heart.
Only one thing I would like to point out here and that is really a matter of opinion -
"to be the best person, I can possibly be" - does the commar need to be here between 'person' and 'I'? I feel it reads better without.
Some of my favourite poetry are those that celebrate nature in all its beauty, in this Acrostic form you have elevated that beauty in nature and made it your own. Some wonderful images here.
My favourite line here -
"Tasting the love that only nature brings" - this is wonderful, all my senses immediately tuned into this poem and I too could almost taste the sweet fragrance that only comes after a rain. Beautifully done!
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Some of your line lengths here make your rhyme scheme feel a little disjointed.
"quieting the turbulence in my mind,
soothing my distress." - the length of the 3rd line here knocks the rhyme scheme out a little. What about queiting in the turbulent mind instead?
"The fire of hope may flicker,
but the flame will never die,
blanketing the menaces with feathers,
carrying them on toward the sky" - the 3rd and 4th lines here again feel out of balance. What about - blanketing menaces with feathers, carrying them toward the sky.
I love it when poetry have that hopeful tune to them and here you have managed to add in a beautiful ray of that hope. Great read!
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Your imagery here is superp. You bring this poem to life in all its technicolour splendour.
I have one issue with this poem, first off the length of the lines. I almost ran out of breath reading them as they are not punctuated in any way, I felt I had to re-read several times and put my own breaks and pauses in so that I could get the whole feel of the poem, this made reading a little cumbersome and I feel I have in some way lost some of the vitality of the poem and maybe a little of the meaning. I would have preferred if you had punctuated the poem yourself so that I can feel where you want the reader to pause and take a breath.
Based on the imagery alone, I felt this was a chilling piece, it certainly made me shudder more than once, eery and unnerving.
My favourite line -
"Held far below the crimson stain coating the line of unending sky" - wow!
I love photography and hope that I can one day take as brilliant a photo as some of these.
My favourite cNote in this collection is the I was thinking of you today note, this one creates and air of mystery and intrigue. It is simply beautiful.
This collection has inspired me to go out and take more photos myself. There is so much beauty around us in nature but sometimes we miss out on it because we are too busy with our lives to sit back and notice. This collection reminds us what is there right in front of our noses for us to enjoy and be a part of.
This reads like a thought process in action, as if I were actually seeing this for myself on a screen and you connected to the set with wires pushed into your head, your thoughts streaming live and multicolour.
Very vivid poem, almost slow, rhythmic flow.
I loved your imagery here, the contrast of the roses and thorns the imagae of the clown, spine chilling and comforting at the same time.
My favourite line here -
"To once again flirt
With future pain" - almost provoactive.
Great job!
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Again your ability to bring out your emotions right to the surface in your work is so evident here.
You paint this scene so vividly it was almost like watching a film. So very sad. I really felt this one. It left me feeling so very glad that I have never gone through this, and yet feeling it as though I did.
I love the positive note of this poem, I felt really optimistic reading this and in fact wanted to take some of what you felt here away with me so that I too could find that strength.
Have a look at the punctuation here, adding those natural breaks and pauses will really enhance the piece as a whole here.
This is a very deep and emotional poem, I feel your emotion here.
The image of the rain washing away the pain is very strong here and I felt it reminded me a little of baptism, being renewed, how you long for your loved ones to be washed away of their "sins" if you like.
Great entry to the
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Now this is a challenge.
This is a fresh idea, I just love it when a contest really grabs my attention and this one certainly has.
The unusual title first grabbed me but when I entered and took a look, it looks fantastic.
The layout is colourful vibrant and inviting and the little animations make it even more appealing. It is nice when someone goes to the effort of making a contest look exciting for entrants.
No wonder you have people (including me) queing round the block to join in the fun!
I just loved this. A wonderful ode to your grandmother. Made me think of mine and how I should visit her more.
The imagery here is just spectacular, each one conjuring the essence of love and adoration for a loed one.
It is sad to lose a grandparent/parent/family member/loved one, but isn't it wonderful to remember them!
Thank you thank you thank you!
This was invaluable to me I had no idea what I was doing as I tried to create my Guest Book using an In & Out not untill I read this.
These clear instructions got me through and I now have a fantastic new Guest Book shining and gleaming in my port.
Very sad poem. I felt the cold sting me as I read this, your use of imagery here really creates the atmosphere bringing this all too painful event all too real before me.
It is always a devastating blow when a relationship ends but when that relationship has a child involved it is all the more crushing. I really feel for you.
THis really captures that painful moment.
This is a very emotionally charged poem. I felt the horror of it as it unfolded before me.
At first I thought it would be a comforting poem, but I was sure in for a shock.
How very sad and awful to feel trapped inside your own life. Gave me shivers just to read it!
The repetition here gives the poem an almost lunatic feel, the feeling of completely loosing emotions.
Facinating read!
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I love the use of the words here from the contest. You have used them wisely, they really fit here and work fantastically.
The description of coming round from a dream is very expressive here, so cleverly pieced together. The simple almost staggering rhythm here of your rhyme plays beautifully to the topic.
Love it!
The imagery here caught my eye in an instant.
Startling, original, offbeat, dramatic.... Fantastic.
"startling uncertain crows
from pecking my heart
into bits too small
to be sewn to your sleeve" - I just love this... beautiful in an almost horrific blunt way!
Have a look at the punctuation here. I really feel that getting this right will only enhance the drama and intensity of the poem.
Again I feel I have to repeat myself. Great imagery!
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This one really made me giggle. Wonderful zany names you have for your furbabies. 
