It has a good theme and it's a reminder too. It's true that everything is vain, especially when we don't have faith Above.Relationships really matters but not every relationship is harmonious because we can't please everyone.Just a thought.
Your essayl is very clear and it's a reminder too.It is written as well that there is a time for everything.What you have written on do's and don't will be done in perfect time.Thanks for the good advice.
I like the theme of your poem and it's good too. In my opinion, we can control our destiny because of the choices we make and that is the gift of "free will."
One thing I know is what they call a righteous anger wherein one hates what is evil.I just really can't tell if yours is one but as you've said you are being reasonable somewhat you are being righteous too as you hate terrorists.It is written in the Bible,"Hate what is evil and cling to what is good."Your article is very informative and somehow made me think of what is really in the term "hate." It's kind of broad too. Since the time of Old Testament with all the Bible stories the righteous and the Godly defend what is right.Submission and acknowledging authorities can help to lessen crimes too.
The structure of your sentences too is good and well written.
It's a good personal essay and you've just said your views about this generation.Well, it is written as well that in the last days people will go from worse to worst meaning those who are violent will become more violent,those who are disobedient will become more disobedient,and many will be lovers of themselves and lovers of money,and so forth... so what you have written is true. Your essay is a self-help category too.I've just noticed as well in the first paragraph a sentence that is irrelevant as in "Cool is not putting..."In a paragraph there must be unity in sentences.However,your essay helps!Keep on writing!
It's kind of an absract poem yet I got your point.It's good but it will be nicer if you made your story more vivid to the readers and a little bit longer.Keep writing!
It's quite good to read your paragraph, it's some kind of a unique one.However, I'm somewhat confused on what you are trying to convey to your readers.It will be nicer if you show in your paragraph the real point and message.And the sentences are not that arrange well.However, Write on!
Your poem shows feelings coming from a heart and that is what a poem is. You are able to present this feeling into a poem and convey message.I think its good.Write on!
Your poem reveals your true feelings and you are able to show it in your poem.I like the way you put your feelings into paper and it touches my heart too.That's really a poem wherein it really shows what's inside your mind and heart.However, cheer up ; "after the rain there is always a rainbow!" Write on!
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