this is a great survey!!! intelligent questions and a great reward. when i was taking this survey I really started to appreciate all of the things that Writing.com has to offer. this is such a wonderful website and community. I can't start to understand how I could possibly lived without it for this long!!!
this one is my favorite!!! it is so great nearly indescribable!!! the depth of this poem is amazing and I really enjoyed reading it. One thing that is a bit confusing: the capitalization... the first and the third line are capitalized and then none of the rest are...
just wondering
perfect!!!
the exact emotions that you feel when you have a little sister... great!!!
the rhymr is perfect and the rythem as well... I really enjoyed reading this poem
HEHEHEH... Apparently the prompt was a birthday party for a 36 year old and people mistake it for 40 because this is the third story exactly like it...
Anyway a very funny tale of mistakes...mistakes...and more mistakes!
Hmmmm..... this is the exact same story as the other entry for this contest....
It is a great story very funny but how could you possibly get the same idea? even the same numbers...
This is so true...writing takes you to the most amazing places!!!
great story and I had a great time reading it!!!
thanks for sharing your wonderful work with us here at Writing.com!!!
This is a really exciting story from start to finish!!
it captured my attention and held it thoughout...
Great job!!! the vocabulary is good and the characters seem to spring alive.
Thanks for sharing this wonderful story with us here at WDC
HA HA HA... this is great!!!!! really funny and very enjoyable. i especially enjoyed "Renovati Repeatus" this was really funny!!! The whole episode was really just a bundle of laughs.
Interesting poll!!!! maybe I should have chosen, A flying elephant...or even a ring that laughed-maybe not-...or Maybe a chocolate tree.... hmm so many choices!!! But alas, I hath chosen the most "normal" one Abselute freedom...how...ordinary.
HE HE just my random thought after taking your fun Poll
Your poem is very interesting...I actually kind of liked it
A little confusing at first but after I had read it a few times I figured it out.
A few humble suggestions:
red=capital letter
Along electric wires await<comma> the burn and sizzle, that shocking embrace that holds you conscious<comma> while two lives splice together.
One line cut and the connection's gone.
Two lines crossed and both are gone.
In your quiet eyes I see no boom; your gaze is mellow.
It could come none-too-soon:<this sentence makes no sense to me>
the raise of hackles, the static hair-do and the Sun-burst's glare
of love, Gare, of love
coursing along your wires.
Apart from these technical errors I thought it was pretty good!
Em
WRITE ON~!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WROTE FOREVER~!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
..... The emotion of this piece is incredible!! This is such a terrible thing to have happen... You pull together all of the emotions and feelings so well. The repeating stanza added to the feeling of this piece immensly it sort of brought a feeling of reality by repeating the facts. One thing I noticed: in your quotes the first letters need to be capitalized...other than that I didn't notice any glaring problems.
Thanks for sharing your talent with the rest of us!!
WOW... this is really good!!! I say people think you're strange because you are different from them, in that you are creative and have a mind of your own! So don't ever listen to those people who think you are strange because they are sheep-following the pack. But you are an individual, following your own voice and sharing your talent with us here a Writing.com.
Thanks for a great read!!
And welcome to WDC.
This is great!!
Though I would recommend CAPITALIZING all the I's and putting the 1's into one's other than that a great poem!!!!!!
Oh and you say "by Doug Kelley
11/10/07"
I was just wondering if this was foresight or what because it hasn't been 11/10/07 (or if you do the month first 10/11/07)-just wondering?
Thanks for sharing your wonderful poem with us.
This is a good essay...many strong points and a deep thesis. Many will agree with this essay-though many will not, but I liked it. It has strong feeling and your opinins were felt. This topic (as you point out) has been breached many times before, and I think your name might well be in anothers *** star explanation at the end.
He he he... great background music!!!
this is great I was really interesting to find out such interesting things about you. You are a published author...have any tips?
The prompt contests do the same thing to me exept I am usually inspired to write poems.
Thanks for sharing your...interesting...life with us!
i enjoyed the few moments spent in your shoes...
Well done!!!!! Your resentments and opinions resound in this piece....it has a meaning for everyone and you have successfully provena point!!!!!!
Many people will agree with this and many will not but i shall stand neutral.
Ok Everbody this is a riddle so for any of you mystery seekers LOOk at this !!!!!!!!!! it is pretty hard!!!!!! but i think i got it now!!!!
WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
A challenge!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! its hard!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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