I am here to give you the last review of ten won by you in Twink's 'Houston We Have A Problem' Auction.
What a magnificent item to end my last review on for this package! I am amazed at how your artistic abilities do not seem to have any boundaries. You are able to dabble in almost every genre that exists. Obviously you were born to write and have a natrual talent.
The rhyme in this was the highlight for me. It was all direct, consistent and did not skip a beat. I was able to grasp some very dark visuals from this item and ironically, I was in heaven.
Again, the effort you put into making your creations the best they can possible be does not go unnoticed. The art work is fantastic and completely suits the item. I am wondering if this Poem was inspired by this picture like a picture prompt. You will have to let me know.
There are no visible errors in this item and there is no need for suggestions for improvement.
This was a dark delight.
I am here to give you the 7th review of ten won by you in Twink's 'Houston We Have A Problem' Auction.
The pink colored text you have used helps to infuse the romance in the Poem. Romance is one genre I am unable to write in but I do enjoy reading it and I can only commend you for the heartfelt items you are able to create. You make it look so easy!
Your rhyme is all in place and working well in this Poem. There are no bumps, it is all smooth.
There are no visible errors but I do have two suggestions.
Line 6- The wordplay in this line is not working and seems to stall. My suggestion is to re-work the line, something similar to- A single touch causes me to shiver
Line 11- I would suggest removing 'fully' and replace it with 'are' so the line reads smoother.
My suggestions are extended in the spirit of helping you. Please use what you feel is helpful and discard the rest.
As always you have managed to conjure warm and endearing emotions within the reader through your Poetry. Well done!
I am here to give you the 6th review of ten won by you in Twink's 'Houston We Have A Problem' Auction.
I always enjoy Poetry where questions are included in the content because I feel it secures a deeper connection between the reader and the item. When questions are posed the reader is given no choice but to become active within the item and ask themselves these very questions. There is an abundance of questions in your item and I was in my element.
The repetitions seen at the end of each line distracted me a bit. I would have loved to have seen fresh words placed in these areas to strengthen the quality of the rhyme. This is not an error only a personal observation because I am not a huge fan of repetition. It did not hurt the overall impact of the message but it did slow down your pace and put a slight bump in the flow of the item.
There are no visible errors in your item and my only suggestion for improvement is to replace the old with the new.
I am here to give you the 5th review of ten won by you in Twink's 'Houston We Have A Problem' Auction.
This gave me shivers for two reasons. One, because it was hard to read and not get a lump in my throat and two, because you have composed it so well. It is items like these that make me wish the rating system reached higher than a 5.0 because a 5.0 does not do this item justice.
It has been a long time since I have read anything that has impacted upon me so forcefully. Sure I like many items I read but this particular item will linger in my mind for some time to come. It is haunting...
Your item is moving, touching and demands the sole attention of the reader and I gave it willingly.
There are no visible errors in your item and suggestions for improvement are not needed.
This is my favorite item on WDC by far. It is a masterpiece.
I am here to give you the 4th review of ten won by you in Twink's 'Houston We Have A Problem' Auction.
This is another spiritual Poem written in free verse. I am reading this and all that keeps flashing to my mind is sentiment cards. Some of the beautiful messages in your Poetry would be fantastic incorporated onto little trinkets.
Your belief in God is strong and lovely to see. I enjoy that you are willing to share this intimate belief with all of us here at WDC and I am stunned you are able to write about it so well. I will be honest and tell you that I do not usually take satisfaction from spiritual items as my own views are very different to others. It has not only shocked me that you divulge in this topic so freely but also that you made me look at it from a different point of view. You managed to touch a sceptic which is no easy feat.
There are no visible errors and no suggestions for improvement are needed.
Well done. This is a gem.
I am here to give you the 3rd review of ten won by you in Twink's 'Houston We Have A Problem' Auction.
Your spiritual views are flush in this piece and it is very easy for the reader to seek comfort and solace within your subliminal words. I am not surprised you are spiritual considering you are an Angel. Sorry, had to slip that in lol...
I love the relaxing tones in your item, very peaceful. It is almost as if you are trying to coax the reader into a pure belief by describing the bounty they will recieve if allowed passage through Heaven's gate. You were selling and I was buying Sherri.
By no means am I saying you were pushing your views onto others because there is no such notion in this item but there is an enthusiastic promise that they shall receive the love of the Lord if they merely embrace him, this is the sole reason why I liked your item. You did not manipulate you merely convinced me that this is a place I would like to go when it is my time.
Although this is Poetic in every sense of the word it felt private. Very similar to an intimate discussion between two people and I was entranced from the beginning to the end. You are a true necromancer when it comes to writing Sherri. I am definitely a fan.
There are no visible errors in your item and no need for suggestions for improvement.
I loved this. Well done!
I am here to give you the 2nd of ten reviews won by you in Twink's 'Houston We Have A Problem' Auction.
This item was like you had ordered me onto a magic carpet and taken me on an adventure into a magical and mystical land. It was amazing how potent your imagery was in this item. Serene visualizations came to me with ease and your character was so believable that I was able to see her through your words. I needed to read an item like this today, an item which is hopeful, peaceful and brings sensations of relaxation.
The pink colored text helped to enhance the glitter of the item. Strong feminine tones were shining through to stroke the brow of the reader. It was truly beautiful. You are extremely gifted when it comes to creating stunning portraits for the reader to drift into and I was completely mesmerised by the sophistication of this item.
There are no visible errors in your item and suggestions for improvement are not needed.
Congratulations on creating a perfect item.
I am here to give you the 1st of 10 reviews won by you in Twinks 'Houston We Have A Problem' Auction.
I can say with complete honesty that this is the most attractive Poem I have ever seen. Not only are the words in each stanza pretty and elegant but the added features surrounding the item are magnificent, absolutely beautiful.
We all know you are a fabulous writer Sherri, your writing speaks for itself but when someone takes the time to put a huge effort into making their items extra special that is something different altogether. The images are just as pretty as the piece. You have chosen to incorporate images which display soft and subtle colors and this goes hand in hand with the delicate flow of the item.
There are only three stanzas in your Poem. It is quite quaint but they all individually paint a very pretty and graceful picture for the reader to enjoy. Your Poem speaks of harmony and bringing happiness to a world which is blanketed in pain. The message is inspirational and very beautiful. I am in awe.
There are no visible errors and no need for suggestions for improvement.
This item speaks for itself.
I am here to give you a 'Showering Acts Of Joy' review.
Wow, I am amazed by how palapable the love is between these two people. This is projected clearly to the reader and one cannot help but to get swept up in these warm feelings.
Your Poem speaks of a love which is unrequited and has no limitations as to the depths of its romantic nature.
It is an absolute golden display of how loves is 'supposed' to be. The true definition available for all to see and ask themselves if they have infact ever experienced this themselves. It truly melts my heart.
A large array of soft and gentle descriptive words have been sprinkled through the content further flairing the flames of the passion between these two rich lovers.
There were no visible errors but I do have some suggestions.
Line 5- I think if you switched cherishes for cherishing this line would flow smoother.
Line 10- This line is much longer than the previous and could use a snip. Perhaps something like- Content with a love which knows no bounds.
Line 15- This line is also very large and could be cut down to something similar to-
Smiling whilst nestled in his arms.
Verse 7- I am thinking perhaps the speech marks may need re-adjusting to include all of the message.
Last suggestion- Period points need to be added at the end of each verse to finish it off and continue to the next one.
My suggestions and comments are extended in kindness and in the spirit of helping. Please feel free to use what you feel is appropriate for you and discard the rest.
In general this is a Poem which sets alight the hearts of all who read it. It is written with a dreamy tone and one cannot help but to be mesmerised by it. It was a stunning write.
I am here to give you an 'Images In Ink' and 'Simply Positive' review. This is the 4th review from ten won by you in the 'Judy's Day Auction'.
Wow, Kim, I really like these lyrics. Although you have it categorized under lyrics your item reads just as well as a Poem. If you were to take away the display of (chorus) no one would ever know the difference.
There are many different messages laced through your words and they are all positive ones. The positivity in the words in turn impacts upon the reader in a positive and beneficial way leaving them with glowing feelings when they have finished reading your item. It is definitely a 'feel good' read.
You have always been talented when it comes to incorporating nature into your writing. I remember reading many Poems of your's long ago and some of them were so 'believable' that for a split second you were able to manipulate me into thinking I was outside rather than in LOL This item is no exception. Although much of your item is centered around the ultimate message you are delivering, there are still some traces of nature detected within this.
I wish I knew the exact tune you would choose to put to this. Whilst I was reading I kept imagining something slow, natural and more than likely celtic in sound. You will have to let me know if I am close to the mark.
As usual there were no visible errors in your item and no need to offer suggestions for improvement.
I liked it just the way it is.
I am here to give you a review on this wonderful occasion known as 'Judy's Day'.
'Memories of my childhood' is a superb folder containing items of recalled memories of all kinds.
The exceptional quality of the work only serves to enhance the magnificent messages and wonderful tones within each of the individual items. This folder is definitely a must read! It was thoroughly invigorating, educational, and in general a pure delight to read.
I am here to give you a review on this wonderful occasion known as 'Judy's Day'.
I do not doubt your story at all, infact I believe in it completely. I have recalled many memories to family members who have been horrified that I could remember anything from such a young age. We seem to have the same parenting philosophies too. I have three young children and have always spoken to them in typical language. (I must admit, sometimes I slipped and cooed and gaga'd at them a few times ) but I always made a point of speaking to them properly and they all began speaking at a very young age because of it.
You were a social worker?...Knowing this now thoroughly explains the nurturing vibrations displayed in your items. I really do hope this is published. If it is not then it should be. More and more people need to be aware their children are not as limited as they may think merely because they are young of age. They are more intune than given credit for.
I loved this item and have enjoyed the little snippets of personal information you give to us. All of your items have been much like an introduction, slowly unfolding. Absolutely wonderful.
I am here to give you a review on this wonderful occasion known as 'Judy's Day'.
Your entire item is relaxing to read. There is an innocence and purity weaved through it which completely puts the mind in a state of ease. Your item is tranquil, bordering on mesmerising. I actually read this over twice because I liked it so much.
You have some wonderful memories to call upon. My grandfather used to tell me stories of times where people did not have to lock their front doors or windows. Times when the smaller things in life wre given the appreciation they deserve. It was very different during my own youth, those times had already long come to pass.
Your item is written so well and drew me into its depths with ease. I have yet to find one error in any of your items which clearly displays your skill in all areas of writing. You truly are gifted.
Well done and write on.
I am here to give you a review on this wonderful occassion known as Judy's Day.
The days of home visits from Doctors... I think all people, especially parents wish those days were not over. I had chicken pox when I was 6 and at that time home visits were just beginning to faze out. As you pointed out in your item people with ailments are now left with no other option than to leave the comfort of their homes to seek medical attention only causing them more discomfort. You should send this for publication. You make some very valid points which deserve the appropriate attention.
There are no visible errors in your item and no suggestions for improvement are needed.
Well done and write on.
I am here to give you a review on this wonderful day which is otherwise known as 'Judy's Day'.
This item is so honest and emotional. It is an item which I am able to connect with because I have lived through this same situation. The fact you were able to write so openly from your heart and share an experience with us all that is intimate is amazing. Your abundant talent for writing is clearly on display to all who read this.
I am here to give you an 'Images In Ink' review. All comments and suggestions are extended in kindness and are not intended to offend.
This is absolutely hilarious!! I loved the tongue-in-cheek humor and if I were the one who came up with the concept I would have strived for something exactly like this. Your rhyme is wonderful and helps to enhance the comedic aspects of your Poem. The pace is fast and continues to build momentum as it goes along but never skips a beat.
There are no visible errors and no suggestions for improvement are needed, I loved it just the way it is!
*An excellent Poem*
I am here to give you an 'Images In Ink' review. All comments and suggestions are extended in kindness and are not intended to offend.
I love this Poem! I especially like the way the rhyme twists and turns. That was the highlight for me! Again this is another quaint Poem but full of meaning. The message is strong and shines through with ease, leaving no room for mis-interpretation. The scattering of questions in the item enhances the connection between the reader and the Poem because it draws them into the depths of your item and encourages them to seek answers to the questions you are asking.
There are no visible errors in your item and no suggestions for improvement are needed.
I am here to give you an 'Images In Ink' review. All comments and suggestions are extended in kindness and are not intended to offend.
This is a quaint free verse Poem about the significance of choice. The freedom to choose what we want to do and when we want to do it, even in regards to do with trivial things, is often taken for granted. One does not realize how precious this freedom is until the option is taken from us.
I like the Poem and enjoyed the message but would have preferred to have seen some more length added to it and other examples of small but meaningful things you enjoy having the freedom to do and decide, further enhancing the connection between the item and the viewer.
I am here to give you an 'Images In Ink' review. All comments and suggestions are extended in kindness and are not intended to offend.
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Aralls, you almost killed me! I choked on my drink.
I don't think I have the strength to write a huge review on this. I laughed it all out.
An excellent write, hilarious, brought tears to my ears, almost killed me in the process and I am still laughing now. This item is a classic!
I know all about children saying unexpected things. My own children come out with some of the worst WTH? statements I have ever experienced. Unfortunately it seems I am their personal target when they do. You were lucky that this one was directed at nanny.
I am here to give you an 'Images In Ink' review. All comments and suggestions are extended in kindness and are not intended to offend.
This was absolutely hilarious!!!! Hang on, I have to catch my breath...
Horrible things like this always happen to me too but after reading this, I think it is safe to say I can quit pitying myself. I have (yet) to experience something embarrassing of this magnitude. I emphasize the word yet because I know it is just around the corner and will present itself to me sooner or later.
I loved the quick cover up for the scream. A spider...
Sorry, that one brough tears to my eyes. Nevertheless you are somewhat of a Guardian Angel yourself. Imagine how 'James' would have felt if you were to reveal there was no spider?...you spared him a great deal of embarrassment.
I am here to give you an 'Images In Ink' review. All comments and suggestions are extended in kindness and are not intended to offend.
Your Poem is well written and I like and appreciate the darkness you have managed to capture in such a small space. The use of strong descriptive words enables your reader to connect effortlessly with your item. A somber tone of narration is detected and draws the reader into the depths of your words.
The format has been followed perfectly. There are no visible errors in your item and I have no suggestions for improvement. It is a delight just the way it is.
I am here to give you an 'Images In Ink' review. All comments and suggestions are extended in kndness and are not intended to offend.
Theme-I like and appreciate the message you are expressing in this Poem. Forgiving and admitting go hand in hand and are both equally extremely difficult to do. Admitting you have done wrong is the first step in taking responsibility for your actions and you should be proud in doing so. Unfortunately it depends on what you have done as to whether forgiveness will be given. This is a topic which can be just as controversial as politics and no one person will ever agree with the other. In my opinion I believe forgiveness should be earned and not something to be expected from the other.
Format- Your format is a little rough around the edges. You use stanza format for the first four verses then slip in a triplet. It is strangely out of place and has no reason for being there. I would consider adding another line so your format is consistent.
Rhyme- Majority of your rhyme is direct and strong in certain stanzas. However in some areas the quality begins to slip. For example:
6th stanza, 2nd and 4th line- 'be' and 'guilty' are indirect rhymes. They are highlighted to the reader because you have led your reader through a Poem which has been written to 'direct' rhyme.
7th stanza, 3nd and 4th line- 'sin' and 'again' are neither direct or indirect rhyme. They do not rhyme at all. These areas in your Poem are in need of some extra attention.
Besides these minor hitches I think you have done a good job with this Poem.
Well done and write on.
I am here to give you an 'Images In Ink' review. All comments and suggestions are extended in kindness and are not intended to offend.
The highlight to me in your Poem was the pace. It was fast and forcefully pushed the reader through, almost dominant as darkness usually is. This strengthened the sinister tone in which you were attempting to set for your item. I am a dark writer myself so you managed to capture my attention easily.
There are a few problems with your item and the first I will address is that there is not any real depth to your Poem. It is stated that this item is biographical yet it is not having any great impact upon me when I read it as one would expect. Your item is a scratch on the surface and if you wish for your readers to be entangled and intoxicated by your words then you must try to dig deeper and retract something more potent.
6th line- 'inconceivable' should read as 'Inconceivable'.
7th line- The use of 'forced'- This takes your item to the past tense instead of the present. I found this very confusing because I did not know if I was reading a memory of something that happened long ago or this was supposed to be based on things that are happening in the here and now.
Overall it was a good effort and with a few adjustments it should be a winner. This is certainly something I would like to read again.
Well done and write on.
I am here to give you an 'Images In Ink' review. All comments and suggestions are extended in kindness and are not intended to offend.
Your Poem has a very uplifting tone to it. Indulging in the smaller pleasures of life and depicting how they also can bring a tremendous amount of happiness was great to read. I liked the couplet format you used, it worked well, but there is a a lack of punctuation and this aspect stands out. You may want to think about adding it to strengthen your Poem.
Line 9- Is strangely out of place. It highlights itself because it does not blend in with the rest of the content. I would consider changing this particular line and replacing it with something stronger and more suited. Entirely your choice though.
Line 10- The 's' in 'assures' is not needed and should be dropped.
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Well done. This was a light and 'airy' write. Very pleasant to read.
Write on.
I am here to give you an 'Images In Ink' review. All comments and suggestions are extended in kindness and are not intended to offend.
This Poem is attractive. It has the ability to reel the reader in and grasp their attention with force.
The entire piece is romantic, kindred, and I detected some undertones of appreciation flowing through the content.
My favorite part: Two spirits, deeply intertwined,
One the lock, the other the key.
*Those two lines are beautifully written. Absolutely stunning and Poetic in every sense of the word.
I did happen to notice you have some capitalization issues in your Poem. It is not necessary to capitalize the beginning letter of every line. If you smoothed out this minor bump in the road your item would take on a more natural display.
I would love to see more added onto this. Although what you have is fantastic, you ended it too abruptly and it gave me a feeling that I had missed a part of a bigger picture. Adding some length will do wonders for this Poem.
A tremendous effort has been shown here. I wish you the best of luck with your item and look forward to viewing more of your writing.
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) but I always made a point of speaking to them properly and they all began speaking at a very young age because of it.
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