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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I like this collection... but I have to tell ya that the third one kinda looks like false teeth in the glass... LOL!
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Review of Beauty  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
I like that you used color on this. It adds to it. *Smile*
The metaphors throughout are beautiful. Thanks for sharing.
Sorry I have no suggestions for improvemtent.

This is one of 3 reviews won in "Invalid Item" 
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Review of Dangerous Beauty  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
*Star*Your brief description really drew me in to read this poem. I want to know WHAT to watch out for.

*Confused*After reading the poem through (twice), I'm still a bit confused as to what the danger is.
*Star*Even so, your descriptions are once again beautiful throughout.

*Note1*Also, you choose awkward places for line breaks in a few places. One example of this:
ice crystals fall and mold
themselves to every surface

Mostly, this was written well. Keep it up!

Congrats again at winning "Invalid Item" 
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
I like the descriptions you used throughout this.
My favorite stanza is the second one.

I think it would be even better if you added more to it, though.

Congrats on winning Round 5 of "Invalid Item" 

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Rated: E | (4.0)
I sit hear at my table
*Note1*hear should be here

With a half-hearted list here on display
*Idea*Consider taking the word 'here' out, as it is used at another place in the stanza.

*Note1*The emoticons take away from this.

All in all, this is a good poem that I enjoyed reading. *Smile*

Good luck in "Invalid Item"   [] by A Guest Visitor
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Consider changing your brief description as it is close to what the title is.

I like your poem, especially the last stanza.
The punctuation could use a bit improvement, though, as there are a few times it gets a bit confusing.

Good luck in "Invalid Item"   [] by A Guest Visitor
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I'm sorry I don't have anything much to say here... but this was another great poem!

One suggestion:
Uncut roses dance happily, while
You probably can take the word while out. To me, at least, it flows better.

Keep on writing! *Smile*

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Review of My Child  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Intuey - this is beautiful! Not only is it about my favorite animal, but the word choice is perfect for your purpose.
The only problem with this is that butterflies generally don't live in nests (at least to my understanding they don't). Maybe there would be a better way to word that.
{/i}And I will protect you with{/i}
might be a possible correction.

Keep on writing! *Smile*

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Review of The Song of Hope  
Rated: E | (4.5)
So you know, the image listed on the top of this is no longer valid. What was it?
I am wowwed by this. You've written it beautifully.
The only small suggestion I have is that you do something a little differnt with the quotation. Italicize it or put your poem in a differnt color, possibly.

Keep on writing!
By the way, this was one of three review won by of_the_ona is Professor Q 's auction. They were gifted to you.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
You always host interesting contests! I was reading through this earlier and got to your prize section and though "hmmmm... this sounds a lot like Kraken" And low and behold -- it was you! LOL

Anyway, I will try my hand at this at some point... too bad I just missed this!

Don't forget to mention that it was included in today's edition of the C&A NL.

Oh, and when you have an opening and/or closing date for this, let me know so I can add it to "Invalid Item" 

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Ooooh! How fun! I can't wait to see who gets to play with these and how they exactly will work (on the creating side of things).

Maybe there can be a way to give gift points to people who solve the whole puzzle?

What fun things will you roll out with next?
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
That there was something still instore for me.
*Note1*You left the space out of in store.

That I noticed that was no stranger to me,
*Note1*This line is awkward.
         *Bullet*It shouldn't start with "That".
         *Bullet*Consider: "I noticed he was not stranger to me"??

*Question*Why are most lines capitalized, but some not?

*Note1*You do not need to use punctuation at the end of each line. Sometimes it might be appropriate to not use it.

*Thumbsup*This item comes with a great message that many out there need to read.

*Star*You have some interesting and unique word choices through this.

Keep on writing!

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Thank you for including my link on here *Bigsmile*.
There are so many interesting things on here, many of which I've never seen before. Thanks for putting them all in one place!

One little problem: "Invalid Item"  is listed twice (under "Sharables" and "Emoticons".

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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Who would have thought that a peanut butter and chocolate sandwich would taste so good?
hehehe -- It's almost Nutella. But not.

This was very fun to read... I found myself nodding at most of it!

*Idea*One thing to consider: You might want to take this and turn it into an In And Out. Or, you might want to just made an in-and-out as well so you can put all the responses onto this list. I'm sure there are many people out there who would be interested in adding to this list!

*Thumbsup*Other than that, great job! *Bigsmile*

Happy Halloween!
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Review of Apart  
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
*Idea*Consider changing your brief description. Describing it as "bad poetry" won't usually pull in a reader.

*Idea*Also, consider adding a 3rd Genre. Maybe Personal?

*Question*Did you send this to your girlfriend?

*Note1*This could be improved by adding more emotions to it.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I honestly don't give very many 5.0s (Usually 4.5s and 4.0s), but this one is one of the few that deserves a 5.0 from me.
*Star*Congrats!*Star*
This item is fully thought-out, addressing many important points that I haven't thought about in the past (one being that the site uses mean, instead of other averaging methods).
The ML you use (mostly bolding) help break up the paragraphs and highlight important information. (THANK YOU -- for me, that was much needed!)

I have a couple complaints (and a small ones at that):
*Bullet*some times the paragraphs were a bit too long for me. This probably wouldn't be an issue were this hard-copy, but the mind works a bit different online (mine does at least.)
*Bullet*I wouldn't push that everyone rates using "your system." You did remedy yourself, though, by stating you understand that not everyone will agree.

You're deserve that trophy! Hope its polished often *Wink*

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Review of Story Cafe  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Note: The link you have to the indiviual who made the image isn't valid. *Idea*Might want to change it to text?

Another suggestion:
*Idea*If there are any restrictions on what can be posted (length, rating), post it in the introduction. (If there are none, you might want to post that as well...)

*Star*Great forum! Well desrving of the awardicons!

Happy Halloween!
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Review of A Lovely Feeling  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Title and Brief Description:
*Idea*Use the brief description to lure readers to your poem. Make it more interesting!
*Idea*Try to come up with at least a temporary title.

Genres and Ratings:
*Idea*Consider using more genres. You might want to consider Experience, Personal, Relationship.

Your Poem:
Dear, but my dreams are sweet
*Note1*"Dear" seems off here.

For the heavens are ablaze
*Star*I really liked this line. *Smile*

*Note1*The poem doesn't seem to flow right when I'm reading it.
*Idea*Try using a few more exiting words and phrases. I like "heavens are ablaze" and a few of your other phrases.

Best of luck with your writing! Welcome back to the site! If you need any assistance finding your way around, just ask.

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Review of Despair Has Won  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Written For Dark Thoughts Poetry Competitin
You forgot the second o in Competition in your brief description.

Daymares of reality.
*Star*While I enjoyed your descriptions throughout, this line stood out above the rest!

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Review 20 of 20.


(It's been fun!)
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Rated: E | (4.5)
How and why I can just suppose.
*Note1*While it rhymes well, "suppose" doesn't seem to be the correct word here.

Enchanting as a bluebirds's song.
*Note1*Bluebirds's should be bluebird's.

While Watching all the squirrels scurry.
*Note1*Watching should probably be lowercased.

*Star*Again, I love your unique descriptions and how most of your poems ends with a twist. *Smile*

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Review 19 of 20.
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Review of Under The Willow  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Star*A much better short description than many I've seen lately! *Smile*

*Star*You wrote a lovely poem with a wonderful twist at the end! You made me *Smile*smile*Smile*, made me *Laugh*laugh*Laugh*.

Keep on writing; I've enjoyed what I've read over these past few days!

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Review 18 of 20.
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Review of PALINDROME  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Or do you need a pup to make it clear?
*Question*What does this have to do with the line above it?

*Star*I'm impressed by this, your first acrostic.
*Star*The set-up of it is nice as well. The bolding allows the fact that this is an acrostic to be clear!

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Review 17 of 20.
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Review of Last Caress  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
A tear drop fell
*Note1*Teardrop is usually written as one word.

While the rising sun
Reflected her golden hair.
*Star*What a beautiful description! *Smile*

One last Caress.
*Question*Is there a reason for the capitalization?

*Star*I enjoyed this poem. *Smile*
*Balloon3*Congrats on winning the contest!

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Review 16 of 20.
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Review of A Quiet Day  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
When the Fish Bite
*Question*Why is Fish Bite capitalized?

And the pallate is seduced.
*Question*Do you mean palate?

*Idea*You may wish to consider turning this into only two stanzas instead of keeping it divided into four.

*Star*Great job at showing that its your perspective that makes something good or bad. *Smile*

*Star*I reallly liked this poem! *Smile*

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Review 15 of 20.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Waking up in the forbidden cemetary.
*Note1*Cemetery is misspelled here.

There was never a ghost of a chance.
*Star*I really liked this line. It gave me a good chuckle.

*Note1*This poem is well-written, but lacking in emotion a bit. The fear doesn't come through very strongly.
Other than that, you did well! *Smile*

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