hi,
It sounds like even if your highly educated it does not matter. Its not what you know, but who you know? the tale reasonates as true, I know a few people who have gotten degrees. Yet they can not find a job. Other people know someone or other and they do The tale is good.
you have to learn to keep your head up, and keep on fighting Eventually you will get there as is the writing business, Keep on pounding away at it. Keep on selling yourself to the publishers Do not give up the faith.
hi,
the piece is what seems to be a tourist guide. You do mention that there are difficulties there. Pariside is where we go when we die. The description is direct, and is personable allows us to visualize what you are saying. That is what you are trying to to do.
However it does appear to be something which the people who want you to see their country would say to bring you there
The poem is pertaining to death and the arrival of a new occupant to the place where the dead dwell, It is at times most promising when we are born on this earth AS we walk forward we are faced with aspirations of our worth. As you say, some of us good to heaven others to hell Look at the present to see where we are to go. There is a suggestion one god deed is worth ten fold. However one made deed is measured by a great deal more the ten fold.
hi,
the tale has a lot going for it The gentleman returning the dog was a nice touch. It made me think, that this person was alright When he suggested."he would bring the dog to her." Did not offer much of a threat,. Instead of her going there,
When he had entered her house and dropped the lighter. Told me, or made my think something was not quite right, but who the character was I did not know When she found him there. Thinking she could defend herself from him with her husbands razor made a little sense
When he told her that the other woman there had a relationship with him and his dog. That was troubling. When she choose to attack him, I was fearful for her When Robert finally made his appearance; I felt he was a godsend. The ending might have been more profound. Then what you have offered.
Hi,
The story has an eerie quality to it it carried with it some weight It allowed me to see the little girl Walking and skipping on the grass before the graves stones. Your reaction to the little girl is waht I could see happening. When you mention that the truck rolled onto where you were, I did not know what to do shout and scream for you to get out of its way. As you suggested, you heard the little girl scream look out and she was gone
Afterwards you would look about the graveyard in search of her. The ending was ominous, as in that was when you understood the girl being there. As was laid yo rest at the graveyard
hi,
It was well developed. The description of the bar tender is accurate for most respects, They all have heard a tale like that at least once in their time there, The story seems realistic The characters were visual and you allowed us to see them through our eyes
The feelings that Nick was feeling seemed real enough The desire to allow his pain to be heard and released rather than bottling it up is constructive
Sincerely
Whats wrong with romantic poetry Everyone has romance in their hearts if not They would die. as would we all For what brings lovers together, but one word, Romance. If there was none where would we be. Would you or I be alive.
Would humans survive, not a chance, there has to be romance What I see, is beauty If you look and you will beauty in you. It is what we are? Is what you are, be true to you Love is what you offer in your words of choice. Rejoice, in love.
The past is something, that can not be forgiven true. The people who are dead, are remembered in ones spirit. You can not forget the past, but it mares you when do not forgive. There is a statement in the bible I think is a good one, Let he who is perfect cast the first stone He who has not commited a sin by his hand or heart do the same.
The people who had done wrong do not see it to understand it. They see themselves as being right. Who is right. The only thing we can do is, Try and see the good. That is what we must do. To be true to yur heart look at the person you are.
Allow those who do not see. To walk blind, if they choose too. Believe in who you be, See who you are?
It was inelegant, but still they are, but elephants. The peom is a little trite. It allows the reader to think of things, that must not be. Yet they are Large animals that have carried man across the alps The peom is small and concise, it pays but a price The beauty is what you say and how you say it. Keep the tome open for all to see,
look do they truly see. What is there You are clear as a springs water Fresh, and no I do not mean for you to get fresh with me. The water is clear blue spring. It is sweet as honey The water with which we drink is as you are.
The tale is a blessing to those who have read it Mind you, you have the gods and goddesses discussing what they do not have The next statement is woman. Is not a goddess a woman That I ask you kind sir
What do you have to say to this,
The discussion should have been with the gods not them and the goddesses, If so, what are woman as gods I susopect they are woman. Are they not kind, sir I ask you. The story is good.. Keep up the work kind sir.
I enjoyed it immensely.
Sincerely
Richard Edwards
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