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Cinnamon. I can relate to holding onto things that mean much to me. As I have been an avid reader for years. So, I continued to buy books. I was married and all kinds of hell broke loose. I lost my wife due to my mental illness but I did not realize it until way later.
Well, I lostmy apartment an agency that was helping me, sent me to a woman's home to get better. This was fine until she told me to get rid of my books. The books were things i held onto because I still loved the first woman I married and also they had meaning for me, from my past.
Things that we hold onto mean more than what we remember. your prom dress had momeries of you acheiving your degree, Which meant a great deal to you.
I hope you do not mind, If I take a look inside your portoflio. Thank you for the suppoet in your group. How do I join a reveiw group?
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Dues. That was a remarkible tale of remorse. The action to slay someone is someting we should not revile in. However the merits of murdering a witch is a portion of your tale. It makes sense as they are pursuing your main character.
At times, we the writers do not understand waht we are saying, when we suggest such a thought as this. Trying to cleanse the soul of the murder has to be done or that character may not see anything wrong in it. How does one explain to ones' self that they had to do this, Unless it is reasonible to think such things are okay.
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Robert. The story has an eerie qualiy to it. It made me feel, and envision what you were discribing to the reader. The fear that the boy felt as he was killed. Witnessing his mothers death. Wanting for her to come to him. However knowing she could not. He has forgiven his mother through the writers wanderings into the water.
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Robert. Great explanation for winter. Mother earth is responsible for his death and the commencement of winter. As he says, He never dies. He is reborn each summer from her form, The feeling that only if he could stay alive longer than he does.
However she knows she is cursed with his birth each summer. There is nothing she can do about it. Thank you for the story.
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The story is graphic as you warned. YOu have to not let something like this happen to another being in your family. I hope you have friends who will offer you support. It is better to tell someone about the problems at home,.
I know you have to be careful. Do you know anyone you can trust that much. That they will listen and advise you as to what you should do, or where you should go for help. As you said, it ended ten years ago. You have to allow others to know, what has happened. If you have a boyfriend tell him.
Your pain will always be there, but not every one is like that. You have to spread your wings and truely fly into the sky. You are beautiful as we all are. Darkness can consume the light. However if you expose the darkness to light all will be seen by those who love you
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Tader. The tale has its merits. I do not know which you wrote about was worse. Timmy is crippled, so he has a little doll that supports him gives him a beliefe that he is worthy of being mortal, his parents are not good.
However that should not be reflected on him. The character who slays him. Is perhaps worse than he is. His evaluaion of him is not good. Perhaps he should go and talk to someone about how he is feeling about him.
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William. I did not see that ball coming. I thought he was late or was going to be late for is job. The presentation and all. He was racing to get to work. He was worried about forgetting something.
He forgot what he was doing? He was going too fast, the road was slick. It was pouring rain, but he did not realize that. As he had to get to work first and foremost, he could not afford not too. However he did not realize that he died.
That is the suggestion some have for ghosts. They do not reaize that they have died just yet. If you ssw I think the title was the others. It was a tale from the ghosts point of veiw.
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TJ So, their parents are going to kil them. For breaking their jewerly, I some how do not think that was what the ouija's spirit meant. It was a good tale, not quite what I was expecting to happen.
I did feel a chill when reading it That is what we are expecting, but not quite what we the reader was expecting,good change up.
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Jeannie, the story was great. What would you do for a million dollars. If it simply meant to go to some parties, that would be grand. However as you were saying, there would have to a catch some where? That was the catch? That she would have to meet Dracula.
Play the song that his mother had played while she waited for the test, that was her doing that. Dracula had lied to her, so his mother attempted to allow her to win although she had been drugged so as that she lost. He wanted to make her his bride.
His mother was unable to kill him, so she had too, And did. Great work, I enjoyed the craftsmanship of it.
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beetle. Great story. You could expand on it. Allow us to see what kinds of trials and tribulations she has. After now finding out that she was not mad, but was able to see the dead. That is something, that you could capitalize on. It is good story.
Allows us to see more about your attitude in writing.
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Jadu. My father was prostian and mom was Caholic, when I was baptized there was hell to pay. We got posted the CFB Chatham, NB. Canada. Where to be taught French. My father had a bird.
Thought mom, was teaching me latin. Another grave mistake, she then told him it was french, that was almost as bad as latin. The next moring pop went to the school to tell them, he did not wish for me to be attending French. The principal told him, it was not his discussion. It was the federal government who the teachers work for.
If he has any complaints he can take it up with Ottawa, but he doubted he would listen to him. This happened in the sixties. My father also worked for the federal government. Thanks how I was in Germany- France-Sardinia, back to canada. Ottawa, 4 going on 5 Chathamm 8, Cold Lake 8-17, last posting was to here. Winnipeg or winterpeg as it is called by the people who come here in the winter. They complain about the temperatures here. Cold Lake it usually is 45 below and with a wind speed.
It was a small community, that created a school for the mentally retarded. Joyce my wife tells me, they are intellectualy challenged. I had a brother who was that way.
Mind you after I left home. I found religion. As you were saying, John was talked into carrying a gun in to rob a restaurant. He was fortunate to run into a person who was a priest.
Only god could have made him decide to talk to him. God is a portion of your consceince, even if your parents are atheists. God speaks to them that is how they know what is good or bad. His form is there when you are born. The love that your parents feel, is their love with god's own hand to allow you to be nutured.
Why were you born, was it because they hated you. I think the key word there is love. When you first learned to walk, they congradulated you. When I did my diaper hit the floor, they had a picture of it.
We each have a gift, it is inside each of us. It is god's gift to the world. The little being that was you and is you. Little I should be talking. As I am only 5"2' being 54 I don't think I will be growing any taller. Shorter may be.
I hope your friend understand how special a friendship is. Offer him you love. Allow him to love you too. Cherish you as you cherish him.
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Xena. The peom discribes it perfectly, The rage consumes you. It takes a monument amount of restraint to stop it from exploding and going everywhere. The person you are arguing with. May not see what is wrong. But it as if another bit of pressure is there. Another rivet pops loose, the thing the rivets are to contain blows open. It goes where ever it can go til it stops.
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Laura take it easy on yourself. The tale is good as it is. Take it one step at a time, on the occasion you have to look at things and see what they are. Where you would like to take them. I
If you push too hard, the thoughts may become jumbled and lost. It is like the first time you drank a milkshake. It tasted so, good. You wanted another, but your parents told you, it would not be good. If you had another.
your writing is your blessing to those who know or wish to know you.
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Laura. You have to maybe walk away from what you are producing for a while. The ideas might germinate, more ideas will come to you. Having a powerful opening is good.
In this one, you have awakened from your dream to be in a room. That is 3 by 4 feet. You recall your parents in this piece. Maybe have the dreams to allow you to see your parents, in the other they have passed.
But you feel you will find them again. Perhaps allow us to see what you want wish for us to see. Have the dreams tie it together. It is an idea. Thank about see if it helps,
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Laura. you have created a great opening for the tale. I suspect there is more to come to read that is. So, he thinks he will be able to find them. I take it is going to be quite a book, when you complete it. Keep at it. That is the only way to get it done. Never give up on your gift.
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beetle. I take it, we have travelled back in time or foreward to have allowed a dragon to be here. The story is good. As you were saying it is the opening chapter. You have drawn me in. Allowed me to see, what you wished for me to see.
The beast has ravaged the world, people are afraid of the dragon that they call the beast with good reason. So, you will have to redevelop a means with which to destroy the beast and try and restore the world to what it was.
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so, you have taken Japan as the source of your stories. I am impressed with what I have read thus far. Displine was and is something that can motivate people into doing things. That are for the best of intentions a means of gaining knowledge and understanding what is brought forward.
I appreciate the insight I now have of you and the characters you are creating. I have never been there. How are thing going there?
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Pandie, I take you are not impressed with dignitaries and their parties. However your statement is true. If someone dares to be different the others will his or her lead. They can not afford to be out done. I understand the statement that none of us are perfect. We all have beencreated in god's image. The big and the small If we are than I suppose his form is average as it not large or small but inbetween,
WE should strive to be willing to stand on our own feet. Speak what we wish to say.We have to be willing to be heard, If we do not than we are no more or less than the problem.That stands before us.
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Starling. The tale is unique, the impression, that she had to learn to love someone. Not learn to make love, however that could be another intangible that I did not see coming. You let the reader imagine the out come. You did it with a great deal on inguinity. I liked the way that you played up the scene. Thank you for writing the piece
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Roland. Helloween I take that was set up from. It has a heady feel to it. I did not know as to what to exepct when she brought him inside the car. I suppose one should be careful of what you ask for. what that a trick or a treat. I supsect it was a trick not a treat, He thought he was going to receive a treat. However the trick saw things differently. As he would up sleeping out of his bed. on the pavement,
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taylor. I realize how you feel. You have lost your reason to live. The person you loved no one longer desires t=you to be there. You must believe that you are worthy. You have friends that you know. Allow them inside your home and into your heart. Beilieve you are worthy of love. The reason is that you are. Believe in the beauty you have in your heart, that was why she had been there is because she saw some good in you. We are all needed on the planet called earth.
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muzz That was cute. So, why did you not tell her from the start that Larissa had been making a mistake. Rathern thanpointing it out to her boss. Can see why she was not impressed with your doing this. The story has true ringto of comerializism.
I thought it was well done I could imagine the star fairies fastly moving about WITH GITTY TRAILS OF SPARKLES WHICH REMINDS ME OF TINKER BELL ON WALT DISNEY
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The tom tom poetry is good it rhymes it sounds like the color and the sound come alive like an aboriginal dance when people are dancing or drumming together You can feel the spirit of the piece. it seems like it comes alive.
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