A Poetry Review for
It is a forum for poetry scoring.
This is NOT intended as a general review, but rather to offer my own
unique and occasionally insightful assessment of your poem through scores in 11
specific categories I feel make or break a poem. This is intended to assist a critical
self examining poet.
The Following are the Categories of Scoring a
description of what each category is, and the score that has been given in
each. The Final Score, or tally of all the categories,
dictates the rating given for the poem. A chart for those scores can be found
in the forum.
Emotional Impact: Does this item make me feel a particular way. Does it
stay in that mood?
Do fresh imagery, metaphor and/or solid word choice support it?
This is scored on a 1 to 10 scale. SCORE= 7
Fluidity: Does this item read through without a stop or re-read caused
by a lack of rhythm, rhyme, meter, confusing images or poor word choice that
causes confusion?
This is rated 1 to 10 SCORE= 7
Blend: In every poem, the subject and pace should have camaraderie. If
you write about loss, and have a singsong cadence/meter/rhythm, it will feel
weird. When they blend, the two combine to enhance the writing.
This is scored 1 to 5 SCORE= 4
Metaphor, imagery, other devices etc.: Are they original? Are they used
properly with the subject and emotion? Does it follow a theme, or are they used
well in contrast? Do the words used for them fit the idea and the rest of the
poem?
This is scored 1 to 10 SCORE= 8
Grammar and Punctuation: Has the intent been conveyed clearly? Has
anything had to be reread to see the correct path? Is it over punctuated like a
book? Is it under punctuated when some is needed?
This is scored 1 to 5 SCORE= 3
Depth of understanding: Is the subject matter fully conveyed? Is the
feel and idea vivid? If there is elusiveness or ambiguity, is it intentional?
If it is intentional, does it channel a stream of consciousness, or evoke
thought?
This is scored 1 to 10 SCORE= 5
Words: Words are the paintbrush. Is the poem filled with useless wasted
connector words? Is it always telling? Has each choice – every word been
selected as the best choice? Is there a destructive repetition of words? Are
they natural and compatible?
This is scored 1 to 10 SCORE= 6
Structure: Is this a form? If so, does it meet the requirements, and to
what degree? Does it fit the form without being forced in place?
Is it free verse? If so, is there a rhythm to each line, and thought? Are
devices such as alliteration, onomatopoeia, assonance, metaphor etc. used?
This is scored 1 to 10 SCORE= 6
Rhythm, Rhyme scheme: Whether forced by form or followed as a scheme, the rhyme
needs to be natural, cohesive, unforced and not the main element of the poem.
Like a well used metaphor, the rhyme should be something that binds the feel
and idea to the rhythm. Does the meter jump around and feel truncated or
disturbed by the rhyme? Do the words and lines flow effortlessly?
This is scored 1 to 10 SCORE= 5
Originality/Uniqueness: Is this different? Does it tell something in a
new way? What perspective has this given about the author, or subject matter?
Are devices combined in a new and different way? Is there a hidden element to
this?
This is scored 1 to 10 SCORE= 6
Overall Impact: Breathless scale; somewhere between disinterested and
deeply moved.
This is scored 1 to 10 SCORE= 5
Score totals ~ SCORE TOTAL = 62 (7,7,4,8,3,5,6,6,5,6,5)
General Commentary: I don't mind the contradiction of what is an intangible, being named and described as an object, but it did confuse when it was described as both. Also didn't get the redundancy in the final 3 words. It felt like a coy ploy that fell shy of it's objective. I do feel the universal weight of time and renewal, but only superficially. NOT telling is a very good thing, but I felt as though too much was left as assumed, when it can't be. This poem is different, and I appreciate creative exploration.
You have some great lines of description, and areas of real strength. The name feels important, the way it is presented, but is left unexplored, leaving me wondering why it is there.
Thank you and good luck with your poem and poetry.
Mark
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