Basically this is a good sample with a couple of typos in it. I prefer to see paragraphs have line breaks and conversations to have line breaks, it just makes it easier for the Reader to read when line breaks are incorporated. Nice. Welcome to writing.com
Now this piece of writing has teeth. The subject is abuse and the writer tells about it with emotion and passion. Verdes are good and meter seems to work. And the piece tells a story, sad, but with a happy ending. My hat off to the writer for a job well-done.
This writer writes with so much compassion that I'm venturing we'll soon see her in print. And notice how she has a craft for weaving words of wisdom into old songs that have special meaning, not only to the writer but to all of those considered to be baby boomers.
Well-written and so truthful. Takes me back forty or so years when some of my friends were writing similiar poems and articles about the vietnam war. We marched in the streets to the beat of a different drummer. Sunflower shows so much depth in all of her writing.
Is this a tribute to Odis Redding? No, it is a tribute to life. Odis just gets a little credit for the song, "sitting on the Dock of the Bay."
This is a well written piece of work that is truly good.
The waves pulsate awry,
wind blowing raw and harsh with words
of warning to my presence
against all further intrusion.
Sunflower has done it again by writing an emotional poem that is full of thought provoking narratives. In any event, I enjoyed reading this poem, the writer has a way with words and how to use them to her advantage. So I envy this writer because she/he can say so much with so little.
This is a very intense, however brilliant, piece of work about the loss of someone the writer loved and still does love. The poem itself could fill up a single poetry book, but regardless of the vlume of work, every line points and reminds of the loss of good times.
Bravo! Excellent! Brilliant!
There is so much passion and compassion in this poem.
This is an extrodinary piece of work. Not only in it's lenght (it is almost a novella) but in its entire dedication to the love of one person, his daughter.
Not only filled with memories past but also of favorite recipies the man and his daughter had shared over the years.
The intensity of the love shown here is very awesome.
This has always been one of my favorite songs. I have the video version on VHS. I thought the added verses were just excellent. I kind of sang them to myself as I was looking through them. My hat goes off to the writer for being very creative and doing a great job.
I thought this was an excellent poem and it exhibited creative expression, even though I thought a couple of lines in the first part of the poem were melodramtic. That is just a personal opinion, so don't try to cash it at the bank. Over all it was good.
Excellent take-off on an old classic. I'm laughing so hard right now that I can't type. The verses are all good and the meter works just about the whole way through. Might be a little bump in the meter here and there, but it does not distract from the quality of the writing. Very good job and I gave it five stars.
I would like to be a good reviewer and it is articles like this that give me deeper insight into reviewing. I can tell by the way you write (very good) that you are and excellent reviewer. Anyone that is going to do any serious reviewing should definitely read this article.
Unresolved by conventional warfare,
The "I do somemnly swear. . .
To the best of my abilty
WILL PRESERVE
PROTECT,
And DEFEND
The Constitution of the United States. . . " Efforts are failing.
This segement had special meaning to me, because I feel the same way.
This poem is well-written and makes a significant polical statement. Well-done.!!
To tell the truth, I passed over this story a few times. I just could not bring myself to review another piece of writing concerning 911. But, since I had reviewed some of you other work, I thought I waould take a crack at it anyway,
This story is well-written in its entirity. I enjoyed reading it and I feel like a like of thought went into the writing of this piece.
Well written little poem and the verses seem to be in good meter. The poem is about the age old struggle that is instinctually inherient in all men. Good luck on trying to overcome this feeling. However, I think all men feel this way at some point in their life. Good writing, well done.
If this isn't a creative piece of writing, then I don't know what is. Very well written and full of humor. In fact, I started laughing on the first paragraph and I was still rolling on the floor when I got to the end.
The group of people that wrote this are completely "In sync" with the rest of the group. This story is just fantastic. !!!
I could nopt find any spelling or gramatical mistakes and the story is so well-written, so entertaining, so eloquent.... then I had to give it five stars, even though I seldom give anything five stars.
My hat goes off to this writer for being so talented.
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Pretty good. I could see no flaws in the verses and it is well-written. Plus it is happy poem. Ends happy. Sounds to me like two people in love. Hey, isn't that waht makes the world go round? Very nice, keep writing and welcome to writing.com ........BRAVO!
This is the best story I've read tonight and I've read some really good ones. The story starts out fast and furious, and so far has not slowed down. The conversations are real and very believeable and the entire two chapters are well written. I can't wait to see the rest of this novel. Bravo for a job well done.
I found noting wrong with grammer nor did I find any mis-spelled words. I gave this excellet, well-written piece of writing five stars because it is a true story that tells of tragedy as well as valor. This story is a tribute to all scouts. And was well told by the writer.
This piece of work describes me and the "Love of My Life" ( my wife) to a T. We met online, then we met offline, and then we got married. So, my hat off to you for writing such a meaningful poem about ME. When my wife awakes I'll have to share with her.
Nothing wrong with this piece of work. It says everything with clarity. It was entertaining in the fact that I like buttons, too. Especially as described in this piece. I thought the overall poem was witty and clever. Writer has talent. Bravo! My hat off to you.
Good poem but what does it say? When reviewing poetry I try not to be too critical, because the writer has his/her own interpretation of what they are writing. However, when it is not clear what has been written, then the reader has to make his own interpretation. And in this case I don't know what to say except it sounds like a dream.
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