Sounds like every one had a good ole time. This is well-written and where there is conversation it sounds real and believable. Well presented. And I wonder how many 21 year olds have done similiar things as you and your group did, I know I did back when I turned 21,. Good job.
I read this story all the way through and to tell the truth, when I saw what Santa had brought you all for Christmas I almost cried. Boy this is a Well-written, emotional story. I'm giving it five stars. I don't see anything that needs changing. Job well done.
Now did I read this wrong, or is "Fishing Buddies" a love story? And the writer of this story is a natural born storyteller. Entertaining and well written and most important in this genre is: the story is believable.
Thank you for a job well done. Keep on writing.
Now is a very sad piece of writing. No one knows how to laugh. Very sad. But the writing itself is powerful and tells a story. One that I enjoyed reading. It was well-written and entertaining. And BoBo turned out to be a good character. Welcome to writing.com
I hope I'm the only one that sees my thoughts. Sometimes when my thoughts are exceptionally bad I get scared that they will appear on my forehead like a lit up marquee, but so far that hasn't happened. I would say everybody has these thoughts. Now keep writing and Welcome to writing.com
Hey, I was a little surprised because this was actually a pretty good "space" story. This one was written in very understandable words and actually had strong characters and a good plot. A man takes on new responsibilities but can not find his friend thaqt is lost. Strong.
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This is agood poem. For me it could have been a prayer. Because I pray for wisdom and understanding. I liked the way you wrote it, even though the meter might be a tad off in one or two places. But as far as I'm concerned, that doesn't matter, the overall poem and thus lesson learned far outweights the meter.
Jenna arrives at her condo. She gestures open the door and walks through the doorway. The Wilson Estimator kicks in and brings the temperature and humidity to optimum levels for her mood, adjusts the lighting to match the activity level of her brain, and provides an intricately calculated combination of aromas to enhance her performance in her currently desired area of interest. In less than a second, every room in her condo is at a temperature of 74.6 degrees with 34.7 percent humidity, bathed in a bright white glow, and pleasantly fragranced in a scent dominated by lavender and jasmine. Tonight is a night to study.
This paragraph, I want all of this in my house. Pronto.
Okay as to the story. Your correlation of having the NFL rule our country sounds preety good, in fact, I don't know but what they would do a better job than out last seven presidents. I'd be willing to give them a try.
This story is well-written and clever. Keep up the good, and imaginative work.
I don't see anything wrong with this very short poem dedicated to faith. However, without a prologue to let us (the readers) know what this is all about, I think it is too short to stand alone. Clever words put together to sound great, but just not enough to explain the entire thought.
This is a cute little poem, however I wonder if this line was thrown in there just because it rhymes, because it looks completely out of context: And a lover's heart the shore........
In fact, there are several lines that do not make sense to the overall poem, but seem to be put in because they rhyme. But keep writing and Welcome to writing.com
This piece is full of sincere feelings and thoughts about someone you love very much. I sincerely hope your partner appreciates you for these feelings and returns these feelings to you. ( I'm having a sleepless night myself so here I am writing reviews trying despartly to get my mind on something else.
I had talked to my dad just the evening before and he had mentioned that he was having pain in back and that he did not want to go to the hospital and sit in a chair for 6 hours but, he was going to go the next day if it was not better. ...I think this should be having pain in the back.
This is me. I hate to go to the doctor and then spend hours waiting to get in. The waiting either cures me or makes me sicker.
Once I was on the highway I began to feel a sense of panic about what lie ahead. .. should be: what lay ahead.
I saw a few mis-uses of words like above but I thought the article was GREAT. Reminds me of my own father who passed away in 1982 and even after all of these years, hardly a day passes that I don't have a memory of him.
Oooo-o-o, I'm scared. The corn is calling.
This is well-written and entertaining. I enjoyed reading it and gave it four stars because it is a good read. I would like to see more, past the point where John enters the corn. But that is up to the writer.
I sometimes feel like I'm stuck in the blues bayou. Hey this was a very entertaining, long poem. But is seemed to be well-metered and a lot of it made sense, but some of it will be left to interpretation. Good writing. Keep up the good work and Welcome to writing.com
Well, darn it, I don't know how to catch a fish with a fly either. Very good, light-hearted story. Which I enjoyed reading very much. My father used to be a storyteller like the one in this story. So, this was a good story. Keep writing and WELCOME to writing.com
This is a funny, cute, well-written short story. I actually laughed out loud when I read the last three lines. You must have a vivid imagination. Or you see a lot of doctors. I can think of one doctor I'd like to share this with. Good writing. Welcome to writing.com
Interesting correlation between tree and marriage. So, is this fiction? Because I am married to the love of my life. (2nd marriage - been together 5 years and we are in our mid 50's) if my partner whom I trust cheats then that's it, it is over. And visa versa. If somehow we managed to stay together, it would be without trust.
I, too, am new to writing.com and I suspose I, too, am lazy about wading through articles. I joined about two months ago. However, I did not get active until about ten days ago. Now I average about two- three hours a day on this site. Welcome to writing.com
This is a good short story. In fact, the way you end it, this could be chapter one in a novel. You write conversations between two people very realistically and real. I enjoyed reading this very much. Keep up the good work and Welcome to writing.com
Now this is a cute story about a couple of peas. And you really built the character of Mr. Pea up. Then the plot was developed and it worked. Very novel idea, shows you have a vivid imagination. Fine piece of writing. Keep writing, you have talent. And Welcome to writing.com
This is a great tribute to Mr. Overton. I had a teacher my senior year of high school that was like your Mr. Overton. He kept pushing me the extra mile. He was my english teacher and he saw my ability to write, if pushed and boy did he push. We kept in touch during the summer after I graduated and then he, too, died of a heart attack. BUMMER. I enjoyed reading your fine story. Keep writing. Welcome to writing.com
For me this poem is about insomia, however, you probally wrote it to have an entirely different meaning. Its just insomia that jumps out at me. Even though I've only suffered from that on rare occassions. Anyway, keep writing and Welcome to writing.com
Okay, is this whole poem about cooking, learning how to cook. I wold prefer more clarity. But not that bad for a poetry kit, which I assume is words with magnetic backings that you work around until you get what you want. Keep working and Welcome to writing.com
Right on, I'll vote for that. Smoke, smoke, smoke that cigarette. Tell St Peter at the golden gate that he'll just have to wait, while you have one more cigarette.... Nicely done. I enjoyed that poem very much. Let's go have a smoke. Keep writing and Welcome to writing.com
This is a well-written piece with eloquent adjectives spread out generously to highlight every idea of the story. I enjoyed this very much and personally don't see any changes to be made. Keep writing and welcome to writing.com And by the way, your characters seem to come to life.
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