The reviews I do are in the spirit of helping you. What I see may not be what you see. Do not ever change what your vision and heart says should remain. The images we put in ink, for our various reasons, entertain and help others think. I thank you for the gift you give and the opportunity to open my mind.
Remembering Winters is a reminiscence of Maine winters. It is a warm story, and I taste the hot chocolate. The tone moves to the point with good even flow making the read enjoyable.
There are two misspelled word and several places that could use a comma. I would also consider editing some of the passive voice sentences.
Comma example:
Thus, I spent many Maine winters creating memories which play fondly in my mind. = memories, which
Spelling:
till = until
snow storms = snowstorms
Please continue to write from you heart, that is our art. Continue to let us sneak a peek at all those simply positive images you paint. Jim a.k.a. jimmyfin.
The reviews I do are in the spirit of helping you. What I see may not be what you see. Do not ever change what your vision and heart says should remain. The images we put in ink, for our various reasons, entertain and help others think. I thank you for the gift you give and the opportunity to open my mind.
The Sixtieth Arrow, I will admit is a tough review. The item is listed as poetry. The 11-non-rhymed or metered uneven lined stanzas as written in poetic line breaks. This is one of the most different pieces I've come across. I am also a story telling poet and like a good interesting story and wiggy delivers. I loved the story and teared up on the last two words -that is how much I was drawn into her word of archery. I read the poem in my head and aloud - Iread it fast and slow - I like slow best but regardless the flow is there, and I will say this is an unusual amazing job. Terrific!!
Please continue to write from you heart, that is our art. Continue to let us sneak a peek at all those simply positive images you paint. Jim a.k.a. jimmyfin.
The reviews I do are in the spirit of helping you. What I see may not be what you see. Do not ever change what your vision and heart says should remain. The images we put in ink, for our various reasons, entertain and help others think. I thank you for the gift you give and the opportunity to open my mind.
A Raging Storm is a dark love poem. There are 5-quatrains written in the abcb rhyme scheme. The piece flows well with good rhyme. The first two lines set the tone and are my favorite, filled with powerful imagery:
Dark clouds gather in the evening sky,
there will be no setting of the sun this day.
At first I felt that I was reading an allegory but that quickly gave way to what I see as a poem long simile that is neatly tied together by the second to last line:
A raging storm so like the rage I feel inside.
I feel Countrymom has come through for us once again and the poem reads aloud as well as in the head. It's a great poem and I wouldn't change a thing - well don!!
Please continue to write from you heart, that is our art. Continue to let us sneak a peek at
all those beautiful images you put in ink. Jim a.k.a. jimmyfin.
The reviews I do are in the spirit of helping you. What I see may not be what you see.
Do not ever change what your vision and heart says should remain. The images we put in ink, for our various reasons, entertain and help others think. I thank you for the gift you give and the opportunity to open my mind.
Pleas of an Unemployed Muse, is a very original free-style poem without meter or rhyme. It is said to be written in AD style - ok! Whatever it works and even has great flow from one short line to the next. I like the poem and I really like the originality. Great Job!
Please continue to write from you heart, that is our art. Continue to let us sneak a peek at
all the images you put in ink. Jim a.k.a. jimmyfin.
The reviews I do are in the spirit of helping you. What I see may not be what you see.
Do not ever change what your vision and heart says should remain. The images we put in ink, for our various reasons, entertain and help others think. I thank you for the gift you give and the opportunity to open my mind.
When I write a poem I try to pull on the readers mind, heart or both. I had a feeling by the time I was done reading the first line of Midnight's kiss that I was in trouble. By the fifth line, my tears were flowing. Therefore, if nobody else is touched by this poem I say lucky them, because this is one of the saddest love poems I've ever read. It is beautifully written and now I go to finish my cry. Well done!
Please continue to write from you heart, that is our art. Continue to let us sneak a peek at
all the images you put in ink. Jim a.k.a. jimmyfin.
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