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Chapter Eight: Winter Arrives - how extremely difficult- not only are your parents no longer together but the distance between the locations creates an almost impossible visiting situation- very hard on all concerned. Mom's roommate - so hard we dealt with this - hard on mom and hard on you. The single room was probably a good choice - we didn't have that option but the home always made sure that the empty bed in her room was the last to be filled. What a Christmas you gave your parents - you are a saint. A great chapter!!
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Chapter Seven: Changing Direction - Hummm - your mom is different from my wife's mom - she would not visit with us anywhere but her room; we did have the same roommate issues however. We had the hearing aid and circulation issue as well - all the stuff is so overwhelming to deal with- people just have no idea. No errors that I see - another good chapter!!
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Chapter Six: Trouble on the Horizon - yap they love to mediate it makes life easier for the staff. Casino life - I love it and miss it. What a setback with your dad - major issue- too bad. The drugs - we took my mother-in-law off of them, and she was much better also. The separations is awful - I hope that changes. No errors that I see - good job!!
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Chapter Five: Marketing the House - selling the house- the garage sales and storing of belonging so much more than people realize goes into caring for elderly parents. What else- oh yeah a flood wouldn't you know it. Nicely done and no errors!
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Chapter Four: New Beginnings- this opens with a new nursing home closer to home, search- we did exactly the same thing. I like the next couple of paragraphs showing your parents being able to feel a little human again- it moves us closer to them- like Iron-man - mom wanted a cheeseburger, I love that. You figured it out - power of attorney is the way to go - it takes the system off the hook and that is what the system wants- attorney should have been wise to that from the go get. Yap - the night screaming scares the hell out of residents. In our case the home way over medicated. A nice job - no errors!!
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Chapter Three - A Wonderful Idea! The opening sentence says it all it begins to wear- A nursing home it is hard on everybody-not just the children. My mother-in-law complained everyday that she wanted to go but she was not able to be alone. This chapter leads us into a system more interested in covering its butt than doing what is best - I have encountered the same thing- no social worker will ever- nor will a nursing home put the seal of approval on home care- they are afraid of law suits- judges are too. Well written no errors that I see.
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Chp. Two: Altered Lives - deals with nursing home life and the struggle with one's self over leaving a parent in such a place. I have been here with my wife's mother and it is very difficult. This chapter finds a small blessing buried under the pain. Well written without and errors that I see.
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Chp. One: The Nightmare Begins - opens into a nightmare that many have and others will face regarding elderly parents. The chapter is well written and is a fast read thought the onset of issues. There are no errors that I see. A very well done start.
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Time moves on nicely through the nine tercets of the verse that contains it. I was drawn to this because I just posted a piece myself with moving through time as the subject. The poem flow very good and the subject is handled nicely- harsh words and soft words all in the right places. There are no errors- very well done!!
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Southern Woods is a one stanza free-verse that strolls the woods enjoying nature which servers as a doorway to thoughts of God. The poem has some very good imagery and flows without an effort as each line flows into the next. It is a wonderful poem - without error- I love it- perfect!!!
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Life Began- is a poem contain in five quatrains of effortless flow - the poem is discovered in the third stanza so try to keep you eyes off it until you get there. Tender and beautiful - no errors that I see- nice job!!!
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First drum set- a lyrical poem - it is hard to speak through the big smile. I gotta big bang outta this - loved it - perfect!!!
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Uncle Paul's Voice is a free-verse about something preciously told with a creative spin. I love the poem and can relate it to more than the subject. What I take from the poem other may not- that might be by author intent requiring the reader to READ and THINK. I could spoil the intent by pointing it so all I will say is that it is to do with an end-stop. Brenda, this is a very good free-verse, and with open arms I welcome your talent to WDC. Great job!!!
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The Call is a free-verse about infidelity. The flow is pretty good as is the story it tells - good ending. The language is a little causal for a heavy topic- Example: The Call Vs she said. I think some of the end-stops could be adjusted to strengthen the impact. Example:
‘There’s…
something you should know,’
Maybe consider:
‘There’s something
you should know,’
Another suggestion would be to turn some of the narrative over to image- Example:
my whole world is
changed forever.
my whole world crumbles,
a broken cookie.
Over-all nice job!!
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An Old Oaken Bucket- is a poem contained by five quatrains with a very nice abcb rhyme and excellent end stops. The piece has a nice feel to flow and tone. That said the poem is about an antique bucket- yeah maybe- but these images don't come from a bucket, they come from a time and our journey through it. I love the poem - no errors - perfect!!!
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Blink is an absent love poem delivered over three quatrains an aabb-ccbb-ddbb rhyme driven by the forth line of each stanza repeating. A sad but true write that strikes the right note with me. The flow is great the rhyme wonderful and the repeating line is catchy, strong and a poem driver. I love the poem - I see no errors - great job!!!
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I THINK OF YOU- a poem that rhymes and flows with the soft sadness of somebody special in the past- perfect!!
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Storm is a free-verse into the freedom of nature viewed by the soul through the bedroom window. Strong imagery creates the sensual storm outside and within. Great flow and fantastic use of words- I'll add that I love reading this from a woman's point of view. I love it - great job!!
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Journey to Forgiveness- a Writing.Com Editor's Pick is an instruction manual to joy buried under the inability to forgive written into a Free-Verse poem. We are harshly and pointedly painted a picture of the unforgiving and then given the option to joy. The write is well organized and flows well through a series rather hard sounding words - not an easy trick to pull off. "Rotting, festering flesh of the spirit," - How could I not love this and still be me? - Congratulation - Well Done!!
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My Brother, is a testament of love given by a brother to his departing brother as he was going off to school. The first two stanzas are in abcddefe rhyme- the last is in aabbccddeeff. The poem setting is the writers heart and like the things of heart, I Love You, the poem is straight forward without twist of confusion and like love the images are clear to see in their simplicity. The poem reads well with nice flow and good rhyme to help. Some things are just what they are- this piece is a case in point- this simple straight forward approach to brotherly love does not hide in device - it is what it is. I do not spot any errors- A lucky brother - well done!!
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His life, his own?- is a poem about the darkness of society blindfolding the subject in what appears to be a near hopeless situation. There is too much rhyme to call it Free-Verse and not enough concise meter to call it Blank-Verse - so what. The poem tackles its subject well and reads wells with just enough smooth flow and rhyme that an edgy poems of this length need. Reminds me of somebody - welcome to WDC - good job!!!
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This Craziness, is a free-verse about raising difficult children and searching for moments of relief from the strain. The write is error free and flows nicely within its pain and small smile of hope. Well done again Pat.
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The Chanters is a quick trip to the inside of my head - just can't figure how Gothic got there. The poem is three quatrains of snappy aabb rhyme telling the story of me and maybe you with great flow - Well Done!!!
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Overcoming!is an addition to the ABA Campfire written in free-verse. This is an interesting piece stark on imagery - I got a hollow feeling in my stomach reading it and my eyes misted. Point - STARK IS IMAGERY - this piece looks at the darkness of abuse and reached me on an emotional level. Yes we can remove power form our abusers but even so - there is a place within us that remains empty - stark. Maybe I like this so much because I have used the same device, and I am excited to find another WDC writer that gets all poems do not require strong images and in the case of this poem more imagery would have missed my emotion - I love poetry that can make me cry and for me this is a masterpiece - well done!!!
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My Own Rainbow is an addition to the III Campfire delivered in three creamy quatrains with an abcb rhyme. The flow is snappy and silky smooth as we take a look a positive mind set touched by bipolar disease. There are no errors - well done!!
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