Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome!
Readability: A well-written and intriguing story. The build up was awesome and I liked how you gave subtle clues about Billy without giving up the ending!
Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:
1. In this section - in the debt of night - you may want to change "debt" to "dead".
2. In this section - Fight-or-Flight mode - you may want to uncapitalize "fight or flight".
3. In this section - and returned his chase - maybe "and returned to the chase"?
Readability: A well-thought out and intriguing read!
Spelling/Grammar:I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome! (I didn't feel it would be right to check for errors on this story)
Readability: A well-written and entertaining read! Your Dad must have been an awesome story teller!
Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:
1. In this section - waited for the ring the bell and pretend he brought - you may want to insert "of" after "ring" and "would" after "and".
2. In this section - Taking her pizza to her little kitchen table, opened the lid. - you may want to eliminate the comma and insert "she".
3. In this section - looked for the woman she has seen - you may want to change "has" to "had".
Readability: An entertaining tale of misunderstanding! Poor Karen!
Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider: (I wasn't sure if you wanted to edit this piece, but, just in case...)
1. In this section - been someone had a grudge - you may want to add "who" after "someone".
2. In this section - anyone who had even met her would - you may want to change "even" to "ever".
.Readability: A well-written (everything was going smooth until you got too emotional at the end) and lovely read! Love your grandma already!
Overall Impression: Sounds like Gilligan's Island is having a very bad nightmare!
Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome!
Readability: A well-written and compelling read! Well, if you are keeping instep with nightmarish offshoot then there has to be more short stories to come...right?...hopefully...
Overall Impression: A very interesting intro to an intro, though I am not sure why an intro would need an intro, did the information not fit in the original intro, no room for rearranging, or maybe it was just fun to give the intro an intro!?!
Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome!
Readability: A well-written and interesting read! An intriguing story line thus far!
Overall Impression: Poor Victor, he had better hurry up and get home!
Spelling/Grammar: I found only a few spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:
1. In this section - to make sure we're still for sushi tonight - you may want to insert "on" after "still".
2. In this section - you've go some explaning to do - you may want to add an "i" to "explaining".
3. In this section - Of corse, it's hard to be tough - you may want to add a "u" to "course".
4. In this section - you ever wan't to see her again - you may want to change "wan't" to "want".
5. In this section - while it is in you possession - you may want to change "you" to "your".
Readability: An entertaining little read! That boy better have a good explanation as to why he is late for his date!
Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:
1. In this section - green Earth was scotched, battered - I think you meant "scorched" instead of "scotched".
2. In this section - they either and run and hide - you may want to eliminate the extra "and".
3. In this section - once the fear of going outside has abandoned - you may want to insert "been" after "has".
Readability: A well-written and entertaining read! Well done!
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