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Review of Staremaster  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi foxtale -

*Staro**Starw* Please keep in mind this is an OPINION REVIEW, NOT a traditional review – no mandatory character count and no grammar check (whether you need it or not). These are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them! *StarW**StarO*

The reason I chose this particular story/poem: You sent me a review request.

My opinion of said story/poem: Very funny, I especially loved that, for some strange reason, the coffee shop seemed to be filled with people focused on the outside world while they sat safely inside drinking coffee and, hopefully, eating donuts.

Conclusion: All in all I enjoyed this short tale. I do have one suggestion: the word "collision" is only used twice, but (probably because they are so close together) it feels like more. Maybe you could find another word for one of them.

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *Paw*

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Review of Red Carpet  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Hope -

*Staro**Starw* Please keep in mind this is an OPINION REVIEW, NOT a traditional review – no mandatory character count and no grammar check (whether you need it or not). These are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them! *StarW**StarO*

The reason I chose this particular story/poem: You reviewed one of mine so I wanted to return the favor and the bright red square caught my eye.

My opinion of said story/poem: Love it! *Rolling* Unexpected hilarity!

Conclusion: It would not hurt to expand it a bit if you so desire.

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *Paw*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi audra_branson -

*Staro**Starw* Please keep in mind this is an OPINION REVIEW, NOT a traditional review – no mandatory character count and no grammar check (whether you need it or not). These are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them! *StarW**StarO*

The reason I chose this particular story/poem: While browsing your port I noticed this little story had not received any reviews.

My opinion of said story/poem: It made me smile, and I needed that this morning!

Conclusion: All dialogue stories are hard to do, you pulled it off nicely. Good job!

Write on!

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Lovina *Paw*

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Silvia Romerez -

*Staro**Starw* Please keep in mind this is an OPINION REVIEW, NOT a traditional review – no mandatory character count and no grammar check (whether you need it or not). These are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them! *StarW**StarO*

The reason I chose this particular story/poem: I'd already done chapter 1 so I decided to go in order.

My opinion of said story/poem: Interesting premise, but a very rough first draft.

Conclusion: Part of being a writer is the rewrite. According to your bio, you are testing the waters, maybe deciding if you want to do this. It's a lot of work, but for those of us who keep at it, it is more an enjoyable pastime than actual work. The point, this chapter could use some attention.

Let me know if you need any ideas on how to proceed.

Write on!

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Lovina *Paw*

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Review of DREAMS  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Naomi -

*Staro**Starw* Please keep in mind this is an OPINION REVIEW, NOT a traditional review – no mandatory character count and no grammar check (whether you need it or not). These are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them! *StarW**StarO*

The reason I chose this particular story/poem: You reviewed one of my works, I am returning the favor.

My opinion of said story/poem: I found your little essay to be very motivational.

Conclusion: Your interpretations and descriptions of dreams are an inspiration to your readers.

Write on!

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Lovina *Paw*

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Sumojo -

*Staro**Starw* Please keep in mind this is an OPINION REVIEW, NOT a traditional review – no mandatory character count and no grammar check (whether you need it or not). These are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them! *StarW**StarO*

The reason I chose this particular story/poem: We both entered the same contest and you reviewed my story, I am returning the favor.

My opinion of said story/poem: A very well thought out and interesting plot.

Conclusion: An enjoyable read. I love to discover concepts I have not considered before, it gets my tiny brain to thinking. *BigSmile*

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *Paw*

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Review by Lov.in.a.🍀
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi peanutbutter -

*Staro**Starw* Please keep in mind this is an OPINION REVIEW, NOT a traditional review – no mandatory character count and no grammar check (whether you need it or not). These are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them! *StarW**StarO*

The reason I chose this particular story/poem: You gave me a review so I thought I should check out your port.

My opinion of said story/poem: I like it. A few words should be changed and/or deleted to make it flow better (example: eliminate the word "like")

Conclusion: This should actually be labeled "Prose" or "Poetry" NOT "Short Story". You may also want to check your genres, this item would do better under romance/love, inspirational, and religious. The genres are one of the main ways for others to find your items, labeling them correctly will gain you more readers.

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *Paw*

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Review by Lov.in.a.🍀
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Silvia Romerez -

*Staro**Starw* Please keep in mind this is an OPINION REVIEW, NOT a traditional review – no mandatory character count and no grammar check (whether you need it or not). These are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them! *StarW**StarO*

The reason I chose this particular story/poem: You fanned me so I thought I should check out your port. For this review, I chose to start with Chapter 1.

My opinion of said story/poem: An interesting plot and a good first draft.

Conclusion: I would like to offer some advice that I wish had been offered to me (if you don't want it, just skip on by).

1. Remove helping and linking verbs - if you don't know what those are Google will give you a list.

2. Eliminate filter words - Google it.

3. Tighten things up, I will use your first paragraph as an example:

Between the flashing of lights, the shutter (cameras have a shutter but it is not the sound they make, Google will tell you the written sound of just about anything) clicking of thousands of cameras, and the screams of the crowds in excitement, the screeching wheels of a Bentley was unheard stopping at the curb went unnoticed until the door opened. The crowd rushed in as a slender stylish figure slipped out of the car with splendor and style as the crowds rushed in and the photographers stationed their cameras to get a better view of the "most famous and the arising sensation of the year" this years rising star - Larcia Grace.

Between the flashing lights, the clicking of thousands of cameras, and the screams of the crowd, the screeching wheels of a Bentley stopping at the curb went unnoticed until the door opened. The crowd rushed in as a slender stylish figure slipped out of the car and the photographers stationed their cameras to get a better view of this years rising star - Larcia Grace.

Remember these are just my opinions and, I am sure, there are many more knowledgeable people here that can give you better advice and helpful hints. And, yes, I do love Google! *BigSmile*

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *Paw*

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Review of ADOBO  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Naomi -

*Staro**Starw* Please keep in mind this is an OPINION REVIEW, NOT a traditional review – no mandatory character count and no grammar check (whether you need it or not). These are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them! *StarW**StarO*

The reason I chose this particular story/poem: A native Philippine recipe, how could I resist?!

My opinion of said story/poem: It sounds so good I had to print it out so that I could try making it sometime.

Conclusion: I haven't had a chance to make this yet, so I can't comment on the flavor. However, I like how you added substitution choices, it's like having more than one recipe to try.

Write on!

Thanks much,
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Kenword -

*Staro**Starw* Please keep in mind this is an OPINION REVIEW, NOT a traditional review – no mandatory character count and no grammar check (whether you need it or not). These are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them! *StarW**StarO*

The reason I chose this particular story/poem: The title caught my eye and the description intrigued me.

My opinion of said story/poem: I do understand you had a word count to adhere to and I did enjoy the read, but there are a few areas that could use a bit of flushing out.

Paragraph three - something is rocking itself apart, it's not clear what, so you may want to add a bit more to that area for clarification's sake.

When the Delta probe relays that it has detected life signs, known life signs, won't Lance discover the truth? How do they get past knowing there is life on the planet but not sending a rescue for the Commander?

Why the last will broadcast? Just curious, but doesn't that sound a little premeditated? Like he committed suicide? Wouldn't the last will be something that is available on the computer, something that all hands have prepared ahead of time, a part of their personal papers?

The planet's atmosphere is so thick a probe cannot properly read the planet yet a "light like Earth's sun" is revealing the surface. Is it a reflection of something on the surface? Personally, I would just delete that sentence, it's not necessary for the story and it just adds unanswerable questions.

Now that the contest is over you might consider a revision.

Conclusion: I enjoyed your story, it has a very interesting plot. This type of plot could be the basis of a great novel.

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *Paw*

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Review of Surprise  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Starw* Please keep in mind these are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them! *StarW*

Overall Impression: An interesting plot and good use of the prompt.

Spelling/Grammar: I found a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:

1. In this section - handed her a small glistening handful - Handful of what?

2. In this section - It doesn't matter take the key - you may want to insert a comma after "matter".

Readability: The character names were impossible to pronounce making the read difficult.

Suggestions: I know everyone thinks they have to make up a name to make their characters sound different/exotic/strange/otherworldly but, when the name is unpronounceable, it makes the story hard to read. I would suggest keeping the names simple and save your reader the trouble. *BigSmile*

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *Paw*

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Review of Why no Wimple?  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Beholden -

*Starw* Please keep in mind these are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them! *StarW*

Overall Impression: Gross! Seriously, not a visual I needed in my head! *Rolling*

Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome! *Cool*

Readability: A well written and quick little read.

Suggestions: I have no suggestions on the writing, but, it would be interesting to see how you would explain how the chant and the demon were connected if you chose to expand this little tale.

Write on!

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Lovina *Paw*

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Soxweaver!

*Starw* Please keep in mind these are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them! *StarW*

Overall Impression: It does not say anywhere if this is a work of fiction or a true story, I'm hoping for a true story because it makes it that much more entertaining.

Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome! *Cool*

Readability: A well written and entertaining read.

Suggestions: I have no suggestions for the writing but it would be great if you used your third genre choice and labeled this fiction or nonfiction.

Write on!

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Lovina *Paw*

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Review of Kalamity  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi iKïyå§ama-BacktoWonderland!

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Overall Impression: A wonderfully original plot!

Spelling/Grammar: I found only one spelling/grammar error for you to consider:

1. In this section - maneuver the submarine until its diving area - INTO its diving area or until IT REACHED its diving area or ?

Readability: A fun and entertaining read, however I was left wondering about Edmund's fate!

Suggestions: Only one - You state that he can no longer see out of his right eye but you don't say why. If the eye itself was damaged he would still be able to open and close the lid. If he received a "black eye" and it was swollen shut then he wouldn't be able to open or close the lid (I imagine this is what happened because you only have him opening or closing one eye). Finding a way to say what the damage was would help a lot.

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Thanks much,
Lovina *Paw*

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Overall Impression: An interesting plot and a great beginning.

Spelling/Grammar: I found only one spelling/grammar error for your consideration:

1. In this section - His Maker Professor Scoggins had - there should be a comma after "Maker" and again after "Scoggins".

Readability: Lack of proper comma placement throughout made reading difficult.

Suggestions: The only suggestion I have is working on the commas. It is hard to fully grasp a story when you have to constantly reread in order to figure out what the writer intended to say.

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *Paw*

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Overall Impression: A very interesting plot with great characters.

Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:

1. In this section - to make sure there only son - you may want to change "there" to "their".

2. In this section - give me you attention - you may want to change "you" to "your".

3. In this section - into my thoughts and looks out the windows - you may want to change "looks" to "looked".

4. In this section - and the existed the rooftop through a door - I think you wanted "they exited" instead of "the existed".

Readability: When Hiram is talking of a recent adventure the main character, Miram, states "This was always my favorite part". I think you meant talk of time jumps are always her favorite part, but it is not clear.

Suggestions: Adding commas in the correct places (especially the second half of the story) will make for an easier read and better understanding.

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *Paw*

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*Starw* Please keep in mind these are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them! *StarW*

Overall Impression: If only all our soldiers had such contraptions it could make war pointless.

Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:

1. In this section - When MacWoad turning back - you may want to change "turning" to "turned".

2. In this section - watching as the man wheel and rode off - you may want to change "wheel" to "wheeled".

3. In this section - Out out of the smoke walked - you may want to get rid off one of those "out"s.

Readability: The technical bits were not well drawn out, but it was still an interesting read.

Suggestions: A bit of work on the descriptions of the armor would be helpful.

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *Paw*

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Review of Fixing a Block  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Overall Impression: What happened?! I was happily reading, waiting to find out what happens, and it's not finished! It just stops, without a conclusion.

Spelling/Grammar: I found a few spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:

1. In this section - On the other side of that large hand was a smaller gold arm holding a black wrench. - The arm is holding the wrench, not the hand?

2. In this section - it looks like a wrench, but it was actually a smaller hand, screwing into the boiler - he is screwing his hand into the boiler?

3. In this section - Gox's anger seemed out of his pipes with a hiss - I think you meant "leaked" instead of "seemed".

4. In this section - Junky suddenly burst into the boiler room - I think you meant "Jinky" instead of "Junky".

5. In this section - Gox could not belive what he was hearing - You may want to change "belive" to "believe".

6. In this section - And while your at it - you may want to change "your" to "you're".

7. In this section - As they were supping their drinks - you may want to change "supping" to "sipping".

8. In this section - Blocked so what his mechanic was doing - you may want to change "so" to "saw".

9. In this section - Blocked and Gix were both vibrating - I think you meant "Gox" instead of "Gix"

Readability: An interesting writing style.

Suggestions: When writing a story numbers should always be written out (one instead of 1) and money amounts should always be preceded by a symbol (such as $ for U.S. dollars) and include a comma before each third number starting from the right (1,000,000).

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *Paw*

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Overall Impression: A very interesting and unique plot.

Spelling/Grammar: I found a few spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:

1. In this section - she looked up and see what appeared to be - you may want to change "and" to "to".

2. In this section - it ran amok and cause havoc in one - you may want to add a "d" on "cause".

3. In this section - ticket to fatness was sat right in front of her - you may want to eliminate "was".

4. In this section - her proportions were always limited to - you may want to change "proportions" to "portions".

Readability: Because of the lack of commas in many places I had difficulty reading and understanding the story.

Suggestions: You may want to expand on Carole's character traits a little more, such as - What is her favorite food to eat? Has she always been a size four and wished to be a size sixteen? Why does she so despise being thin? What does her boyfriend/girlfriend think of this compulsion? Does she have any friends? Are her friends fatties? Are her friends for or against her wishing to be an eating machine? Answers to these questions can be sprinkled throughout the story to give Carole more depth and make her seem more real.

Write on!

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Lovina *Paw*

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Chris Breva aka Marvin Schrebe -

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Overall Impression: Reminds me of Jules Verne (a man way ahead of his time) and Star Trek (a TV show way ahead of its time)!

Spelling/Grammar: I found only one spelling/grammar error for you to consider:

1. In this section - man flying like birds - should it be "men"?

Readability: A well thought out little read.

Suggestions: I really have no suggestions but it might be interesting to note correlations between dreamed up devices and their real counterparts - like Star Trek communicators and cell phones.

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *Paw*

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Review of Stir Crazy  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Let's have a sox to sox talk -

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#2130938 by Satuawany


*Starw* Please keep in mind these are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them! *StarW*

Overall Impression: A great use of the prompt! Poor John, that's a long time to be alone!

Spelling/Grammar: I found only one spelling/grammar error for you to consider:

1. In this section - the cultures they base had in stock - you may want to change "they" to "the".

Readability: A great first draft, an easy and enjoyable read.

Suggestions: My only suggestion would be to find one or two synonyms for "hallucination" so that "hallucination" isn't so repetitive throughout the story.

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *Paw*

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Review by Lov.in.a.🍀
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Angel -

This is a review for the
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Looking for a guiding light. Next round is in May of 2024.
#2130938 by Satuawany
Part 3.


*Starw* Please keep in mind these are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them! *StarW*

Overall Impression: A great first draft and excellent use of the prompt! With a only a little flushing out it will be a wonderful short story.

Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:

1. In this section - Eileen realised was standing by - you may want to insert "she" before "was".

2. In this section - ‘I phoning you about - you may want to change "I" to "I'm".

Readability: I love that you gave both women's perspective it gave the story more depth. For me it would make it a lot easier to differentiate between the two women if you used a different line break instead of just a space, like a dotted or solid line.

Suggestions: In this section - preventing it from being expelled across the counter - it sounds like the cup wants to vomit that coffee *Rolling*, you may want to use "spilled" instead.

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *Paw*

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Review by Lov.in.a.🍀
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Kotaro -

*Starw* Please keep in mind these are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them! *StarW*

Overall Impression: This could be a wonderful chapter in a fantastical story!

Spelling/Grammar: I found only one spelling/grammar error for you to consider:

1. In this section - He knelled and bowed to the seated wizard - you may want to change "knelled" to "knelt".

Readability: A well written and entertaining read.

Suggestions: You may want to add slightly more clarification to the ending.

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *Paw*

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Review of The Valkyrie War  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Dragonbane -

*Starw* Please keep in mind these are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them! *StarW*

Overall Impression: Good visuals, good plot, but poor punctuation - making it difficult to read.

Spelling/Grammar: I found only a few spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:

1. In this section - behind a low wall the whine of a - you may want to insert "as" after "wall".

2. In this section - the third planet were the cultists had risen - you may want to change "were" to "where".

3. In this section - Jane fitted right in - you may want to change "fitted" to "fit".

4. In this section - while there all goggling - you may want to change "there" to "they're".

5. In this section - There was a couple of sticky combat situations - you may want to change "was" to "were".

6. In this section - Hey were is Jane - you may want to change "were" to "where".

Readability: An entertaining read with an interesting plot.

Suggestions: You may want to take care of all those missing commas.

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *Paw*

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Review by Lov.in.a.🍀
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi QueenOwl -

*Starw* Please keep in mind these are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them! *StarW*

Overall Impression: I was shocked to find someone who will admit to liking Rush! He makes sense, has a good moral compass, and his viewpoints are spot on, but I have difficulty with his delivery.

Spelling/Grammar: I found no spelling/grammar errors to report and no additions or deletions to ponder! Awesome! *Cool*

Readability: A well written and informative read.

Suggestions: I have no suggestions for you to consider, though I am sad you got rid of your bumper sticker.

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina *Paw*

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