Overall Impression: A very interesting office romance!
Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:
1. In this section - that Gavin started to whether Janie had left the room - I think you meant to insert "wonder" after "to".
2. In this section - The still had a project to work on - I think you meant "They" instead of "The".
Readability: A well-written and compelling read! Well done!
Overall Impression: A very interesting little mystery!
Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:
1. In this section - and as te solution has - you may want to put an "h" in "te".
2. In this section - too much about itb but need - you may want to eliminate that extra "b".
3. In this section - chair of strange green color - you may want to insert an "a" after "of".
4. In this section - Did the papers pulish some answers - you may want to put that extra "b" in "pulish".
5. In this section - than a few feed of dirt and grass - I think you meant "feet" instead of "feed".
Readability: An intriguing read! The key to an exceptional mystery is when the reader is privy to all of the information but only the hero can put it all together.
Overall Impression: Should be an interesting Star Trek episode!
Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:
1. In this section - I might have know Harry Mudd - you may want to change "know" to "known".
2. In this section - Spock hand the kettle to his mother - you may want to change "hand" to "handed".
Readability: An entertaining little read! I know it was for a prompt but the story behind how a copper kettle can stop an intergalactic war should be interesting to say the least!
Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:
1. In this section - So simple words like danger or threat brain region associated with fear - you may have missed some words between "threat" and "brain".
2. In this section - Melissa could look up even open her mouth - you may want to insert "or" after "up".
3. In this section - This when I’m supposed to be out - you may want to insert "is" after "This".
Readability: A very interesting read! It reminds me a bit of the Matrix, if she hadn't called him to the library to warn him would he still be alive?
Overall Impression: Now, what in the world do Gremlins have to do with it? LOL
Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:
1. In this section - made for her for her very first Christmas - you may want to eliminate one of the "for her"s.
2. In this section - You alarms going off again, Rhoda? - you may want to change "you" to "your".
Readability: A well-written and compelling read! Not your typical Christmas "miracle" but I still enjoyed it!
Spelling/Grammar: I found only a couple of spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:
1. In this section - that sat on top of side table - you may want to insert "the" after "of".
2. In this section - there are carrots for your reindeers too - you may want to eliminate the "s" from "reindeers".
3. In this section - folding the note neatly in half and placed it in his coat pocket - you have "folding" and "placed", you can go with "folding" and "placing" or "folded" and "placed".
4. In this section - the final caught item caught his eye - you may want to eliminate one of the "caught"s.
Readability: An intriguing and entertaining read! You did an excellent job of leading the reader down the happy trail only to spring the REAL Santa on them!
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