I am going to give you a five as I am just trying to get around here and do somehing useful. This is the first post I've managed since I joined and I really want to be more active.
I am more of a prose writer but I do like to read the poems and have become more interested in poetry since being on this site.
A beautful and true poem. So many important little things that make life really worth living.
You have caught them. Really enjoyed it.
I am shamelessly asking for reviews also. Please stop over to my port.Certainly would appreciate it.
Maretta
I have always thoought that the writing muse strikes early. I remember in my younger days writing compositions for 4 or 5 of my friends for our Friday afternoon English class. {They shared their math with me} After the class was over our teacher, who was a nun mentioned the fact tht she really appreciated the fact that June Herzog had really impressed her with her numerouse writings that afternoon but let it be known that from now on veryone should write their own compositions. {Guess we all have our own style even at an early age.}
A delightful and truly humerous way at looking at age.
It has made me want to put pen to paper immediately and describe and tell of my own feelings of entering this stage of life. Well written.
I have just had a birthday which has not helped matters any but at least for the moment can laugh heartily with you.
My overall impression of this story is that it is a poignant flash fiction story and you have done well in getting the story told in few words.
For some reason I think you could pull the opening together more. Of course, it is your choice but what would you think of saying this?
According to the gold watch my grandfather gave me, I had finally made it back and in time to see his old home.
And again later on I think you could leave out the word NEWER when mentioning the Jaguar.
I think the last sentence in the last paragraph should distinguish you are ewriting of your aunt and uncle by stating,"my uncle passed away and my aunt is going into a home."
I like your story about your grandfather, your grandmother's marmalade and your grandfather's endless coffee pot. Maretta
A very sad but too true story. Well written and inspiring. I have written some stories about events in my life, would be happy if you would give me a review.
Here it is New Years Eve, very early, and if we would all think about the story you have written and about the woman you helped, if we all took it really to heart and did our part we could all make it a better New Year. THanks and Happy New Year.
Thank you for the tips.
There is a question I would like to ask you.
is the work I have published on this site considered "published" when you are submitting a story to a magazine or an anthology?
I would like to add to my piece "The Seascape" and send it to a contest but am not sure if it would be considered published.
I really love this site and it has made me want to write more. I also enjoy reviewing but wish I could get my work reviewed more and sometimes ask people I review to review me. Is this proper to do?
I find I read many very beautiful pieces on this site
and review more for the content than punctuation etc.
Of course if there is horrible grammer I do try to mention it but because I too make mistakes I hate to harp on every comma misplaced, perhaps because I am
guilty of that also.Thank you for your help.
June
I saw that your poem was about a sailor who loved the ocean and I too love it so I read it.
Although I never have been a sailor, I can remember the first time I felt the ocean breeze on my face and it was instant love. Since then I have stayed on the shores of the ocean many, many tines, listened to the fog horns or the lapping of the waves on shore and relishedit. I also sailed across the sea to England and it was a dream come true.
I felt your poem deeply. It is beautiful. Thanks for a wonderful read.
If you have a chance please look at something on my site as I am always looking for a review.
A beautiful poem. Well fitted for this season and every season for that matter. Enjoyed reading it.
Please stop at my place and look thru my portfolio. I am pretty new here and always hoping for reviews.
Merry Christmas!
These stories are great. Really enjoyed reading them.
Don't know how old you are but you really have captured the feelings of the soldiers, nurses,places and the times.
I was a small girl when WW11 started and remember well when my older cousins went off to war. They were in Iwo Jima, Sicily, Battle of the Bulge and stateside. I have v-mails from them and remembered how romantic it seemed when they came home on leave and we would go to parties for them.
It seemed as I think back so much simpler then, the boys really seemed such heroes to us as indeed they were. I had better stop here but again I will say your stories touched me and you have researched and made the times come alive. My dear son who died a year and a half ago was a world war11 buff and he had quite a library. He probably would have had you in his library if you were published.Good luck in the future. Will read more.
Please stop over and read something from my portfolio. I'm fairly new here and could use a review.
I have just read your "Wish Upon a Star" story and it lead me to read another piece of your work. I think I chose one about New England because I too have spent a few years of my life there. I lived in Long Meadow, Mass for about 18 months and then in Norton, Mass for 4 years. I have fond memories of them both.
This reminisent story is beautiful. I can picture you there. Will read more of your stories but now I must wrap, yet more, Chrstmas presents or it will be to late.Thanks for an enjoyable read.
I always bgin my poetry reviews saying,"I am not a poet, but I enjoy reading poetry on this site."
Your poem is well written. It makes me sad but it still makes me feel hopeful as I know there is always a better day ahead.
This does not mean everything will be rosy but each day we can find,at least, one good thing to help us through.
I only tell you this because a year and a half ago I lost one of my beloved son's and didn't think I could go on but I have {not always easy] but can be done.
Good luck and keep writing.
I have only been here about 2 months and would appreciate a review too.
I think your poem is well written. What it says to me is that we all let each other down from time to time.
Be it parent,child or good friend, we sometimes feel we walk alone.
The secret of it all is forgiveness, which is difficult but comes easier when we think of what we may lose. Good work. Keep writing.
I read this one {my third} because I knew it would be the way I feel about some domestic duties. Very humorous and too true.
We have just decorated for Christmas and I put fake snow on all my tables {sort of a thin blanket of cotton wool} It really looks quite nice with a Christmas village etc. and I don't have to dust till after the holidays.
This poem really speaks from the heart. We all know their are so many people in need out there.
If we all help some, I hope this year will give more hope to more people.
Really admire your poem and you for caring so much.
Interesting and happy to hear that many people rate the time with their loved ones are more important than money.
Many people however probably don't have the option.
A beautiful, lovely,heartfelt poem to your Mother.Fantastic to realize all she has seen and the changes she witnessed. She, I am sure will be aware of your love as she watches from her new home.
Please stopver and look at some of my work as I could use the reviewsbeing quite new here.
I enjoyed your first story so much I had to read another one. This is very good flash fiction. I enjoy writing it too.
You almost had me believing he would bring a dead body into the rooom.
As I said it was great but my favorite is the first one I read.
Very well written story with a great ending. You made a great story out of the prompt.
Please stop by my portfolio someday. I am kind of new here and could use some reviews.
A remarkably lovely poem. I pray those wonderful memories fill her heart. We have a dear friend that has been in a nursing home for a few months. She always spent Christmas with us and shared all these wonderful things. Now we are many miles away and I hope the memories and our phone call will sustain her.
Please look at my Christmas story. It is very precious to me. Blessings at this beautiful time of year. Maretta
Thought this was very sweet and humorous. Altho- it was quite some time ago I can remember my girlfriends and I having long discussions about how our boyfriends managed to zoom in on the first kiss. We also rated how boys kissed so I think for both sexes it was a most interesting subject and continues to be.
You seem to have figured everything out very well and it was fun to read.
The three small words that mean the most in life. We all wait to hear them but altho you may be sad now it will be the right three words someday because you can see and feel whether they are true or not.
I am beginning to enjoy poetry, even sent for a rhyming dictionary today. Enjoyed your poem.
Sincere, beautiful poem. As I've told others I am not a poet, "at least a rhyming poet" but I like to think that once in awhile my prose almost makes it.
Your work is full of faith and hope. Something we can all benefit from. I will read more of your work.
Hope you will read some of mine. I am pretty new here and need reviews. Only have 3 entries up at the moment but your list makes one feel they had better get moving.
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