This is a beautiful piece. I felt the resplendent peace wash over me, in metaphoric thought. Your words sung a song like the Ocean, and the breeze above it, and cooled and soothed my soul, simultaneously.
I too find comfort in the waves, being in it as well as admiring it from a distance. The ebb and flow reminds me of time, and how my life is so like that, full of depth, coming and coming, enriching and being a part of it all.
A heavy message bestowed here. Society puts so much emphasis on external beauty and now young women today forego personality, even, as long as they feel like they look good. And they forget what are the important things: a true heart, a kind Soul, compassion, but as long as that long hair continues to rank in the commericals, that's all they are concerned about and its sad, we made Models Monsters.
I know the entire area. I know the River. I know Madisonville, and lived in Mandeville for two years. Wow, this brings back so many memories . . . the gar fish, bet no one else knows what they are . . .
I understand. My nostalgia comes back to hit hard with all your Poems of my hometown . . . for I have lived in Colorado now for five years. I watched New Orleans get destroyed on TV.
Terry, this was impeccable. And so haunting. I loved this poem because I have Loon memory of my own, of one that sung to me as a child on the Tangipahoa River in Ponchatoula, Louisiana.
This poem holds a haunting and special message to me and I'm glad we shared a similar beautiful moment distilled suspended in time, in nature, in our youth.
These are wonderful - astronomical words used to portray the feelings of when we find ourselves in a broken relationship, alone. You have expressed this with much flair and sad emotion, but a hint of "not giving up" gives the reader a sense of inspiration, that we will come out of this. That there is hope at the end of a dark tunnel.
Beautiul. Thank you for guiding me here. I can't wait to read your other one. This was phenomenal.
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Actually, it's kinda cute. Good rhyme structure going on. I'm not a structured Poet, but I like all forms and I love to read what others can come up with. Old, huh, at 22? I wish I was 22 again. I was getting my first book published. Boy, I thought I was something, LOL
Anyway, enjoyed your little "ditty."
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