A touching story about cooking your first Thanksgiving turkey that I found amusing as it brought back memories of my first ordeal in doing just that. Thankfully now-a-days they come with directions that are easy to follow. Your article is nicely written and followed the theme very well. Write on.
What a harrowing experience you went through. Your story held my attention from the beginning to the conclusion. As I read it I could vividly picture, in my mind, the events you portrayed in it due to the discriptive words you used to convey what happened and how you felt. I`m thankful your Guardian Angel was helping you that day. Keep the words flowing, write on.
A well written free verse poem that conveyed the passion the poet felt toward his muse. All those wonderful discriptive words enabled the reader to feel those emotions flowing from the words and mentally picture the scenes depicted in the poem. Keep the words flowing, write on.
A nicely written short story that I enjoyed reading. You followed the theme very well through out the story. It held my interest from the beginning to the conclusion. I liked the way you
presented it by using many discriptive words that enabled the reader to easily picture, mentally, the various events portrayed in it. They also brought the story to life as I read it. The verbal interaction of the characters made it more realistic, also. Keep the words flowing, write on.
An exciting story that I enjoyed reading. You followed the theme very nicely through out the story. As I read it I could easily visualize the events you portrayed in it due to the many discriptive words you used that brought the story to life, so to speak. There were some errors, though. A few I noted were: you wrote "forbided him for" which should read "his pride forbid him from, etc"; "stormed off the stadium" should be "stormed out of the stadium"; "the stench sourced from her" should read "eminated from her"; "a cross" is "across" and "gathered to his feet should read "he climbed to his feet." Otherwise a good story, so write on.
An emotional, heartfelt, well written free verse poem that I enjoyed reading. I think you did an excellent job of writng it from a man's perspective. As I read it I could feel the emotions flowing from all those wonderful discriptive words that made the poem come alive for the reader. Keep the words flowing. Write on.
A nicely written short story that held my interest from the start to the finish. You followed the theme through out the story. I liked the way you presented it by keeping the reader guessing as to who the person was that she wanted to give the box of chocolates to. The oral exhanges brought the story to life in the reader's mind as well as the use of many discriptive words. I liked that the story had a positive moral to it at the end. Write on.
The many discriptive words you used to tell your story of hope, in a free verse poem, enabled the reader to feel the emotions flowing from them. As I read it I could mentally visualize the scenes you portrayed so well. That added depth to the poem and made it
enjoyable to read. How wonderful it would be, if only it were true. Write on.
An interesting short story that kept my attention throughout it. The conversations made it realistic as I read it. The scenes you portrayed enabled the reader to mentally picture the different events which added power to the story. Keep the words flowing, write on.
An emotional, heartfelt poem about how one may deal with the loss of a loved one. You express the thoughts and feelings of the wife very effectively as she goes through the stages of grieving. As I read the poem I could feel her disbelief in the beginning as she
pretends he's still there, then finally her acceptance that he's gone as she relives her memories of times past. Keep the words flowing, write on.
I really enjoyed reading your poem about the Silver River. Your rhyme was good. Your use of many discriptive words created a mental picture in my mind of the river as it made it's playfull way to wherever it was going. As I read it I felt like I was right there seeing what you saw. Your words brought it to life, so to speak. Keep the words flowing, write on.
A very emotional heartfelt poem in which you expressed your anger at the father of your children and the pain his duplicity and lying caused you and your children. The words you used to describe your thoughts and feelings about the situation touched my heart. As I read your poem I could feel your anger, pain and disalusionment flowing from them. Living life is a matter of making choices. All one can do is what one thinks is the right one in the moment. Sometimes we're right, sometimes not. No one is perfect. We live and hopefully learn. Write on.
A heartfelt, emotional poem that is nicely written. You express your thoughts and feelings about the one you love very well. The many discriptive words you use enable the reader to feel those emotions flowing from the words. They also let the reader mentally picture the scenes you portray in it. Two very important aspects when writing a poem or story. Write on.
A well written, heartfelt story about how a life changing event can alter your perceptions about what is important in your life, which in your instance was being truly free. Sometimes it takes a traumatic experience to wake one up, so to speak, in order to realize what is truly important in one's life and who their friends really are. Keep the words flowing, write on.
A nicely written short story that I enjoyed reading. It held my interest from the start to the conclusion. I liked the way you presented it and that there was a moral to the story, that
giving can bring one happiness. As I read the story I could visualize, mentally, the events you described in it and feel the emotions of the character as well. Keep the words flowing, write on.
An interesting fictional story that I enjoyed reading. You expressed the thoughts and feelings of Annie very well. As I read the story I could visualize the many events you portrayed in it due to the words you used to describe what was happening. I did have some difficulty following the progression of the story, at times, since the subject changed from one paragraph to the next. Also, using "and" a lot interrupts the flow of the thought when another connective would work better such as then, but, so, etc. or making a separate sentence, or rearranging the wording in it to make it easier to read. Otherwise, write on.
An interesting Scifi short story that kept me captivated from the start to the conclusion. I liked the way you presented it. Your discription of the various scenes enabled the reader to mentally picture what you were writing about. The many conversations brought the story to life. Keep the words flowing, write on.
I liked the way you presentd the story with the conversational episodes that bring it to life. As I read it I could easily picture the scenes you depicted throughout the chapter which
added to the impact of what you were portaying. I didn't notice any glaring errors. Keep the words flowing, write on.
I thought your story was well written and interesting. It held my attention from the start to the conclusion. I liked the way you presented it by not giving away what the aliens looked like and what the things were that they were hanging on to until the surprise ending. Your discriptive words made it easy to mentally picture what occurred during their perusal of the planet they had landed on. Write on.
A nicely written poem that tells a story. I liked the way you presented it. You followed the theme throughout the poem. You used many discriptive words that painted a mental picture in the reader's mind of what you were trying to convey in the poem. One could feel the suspense prior to the events portrayed. Write on.
A nicely written, emotional, poem that held my interest from the start to the conclusion. Your rhyme was good. You followed the theme very well throughout the poem. I liked the way you presented it in the form of a story, but in rhyme. As I read it I could mentally picture the events you portrayed in the poem. The words you used to describe what the characters were thinking and feeling conveyed them to the reader in such a way that the reader could feel them, also. The only suggestion I have is to not indent the first line of each verse. Write on.
A nicely written true story about your admiration for trees and how you lost several special ones that you loved in particular. You expressd your thoughts and feelings about them very well. I liked the way you presented the story. You followed the theme throughout it. As I read it I could visualize, mentally, the events you portrayed in the story because of the discriptive words you used. Keep the words flowing, write on.
An interesting story in which the plot was easy to follow. I liked the way you presented it as a first person narrative with the conversational quality then your thoughts in italics. I didn't
notice any glaring errors except in one sentence where you left out the word "with" before---"the girls are finished (with) their sundaes". Otherwise a nicely written story. Write on.
An enchanting, emotional, and heartfelt short story that kept me captivated from the start to the conclusion. As I read it I felt like I was right there with Angela, seeing what she saw and feeling what she felt, because of the words you used to describe the scenes, her reactions, and emotional responses to the events that you portrayed in the story. Keep the words flowing, write on.
An emotional, hearfelt reminder of that terrible day in September when our lives changed. You express your thoughts and feelings very well with many discriptive words that paint a picture in the reader's mind of what you were doing. They also conveyed them in a way that the reader could feel what you felt, especially the pride and fear of seeing a son going off to war. Write on.
Carlotta
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