A nicely written short story that I liked reading because you did "step up to the plate"
so to speak , and stop the husband from beating his wife. Abuse, of any kind, can not be tolerated. The words you wrote to describe the events that happened enabled the reader to mentally picture what occured and feel the anger flowing from the words. Write on.
A very emotional, heartfelt free verse poem that is powerfully written. You express your thoughts and feelings about the one who betrayed you with words that
convey the pain you felt because of it. Then you come to know God`s unwavering
Love and one can feel the warmth and comfort flowing through your words. Yes, He
can be trusted not to hurt you. Write on.
An emotional poem that I enjoyed reading. You expressed the thoughts and feelings of the one playing the guitar very well. You followed the them throughout
the poem with words that enabled the reader to visualize, mentally, the events that you wrote about. That added power to what you were portraying. Write on.
A nicely written poem that encourages one to press forward and not give up when things go wrong. Your rhyme is good. You followed the theme throughout the poem.
You expressed your views and feelings about the theme very well with words that
enable the reader to easily understand what you are saying in the poem. Write on.
A inspiring, emotional prayer in the form of a prose poem that is heartfelt by the
reader. As I read your prayer, I can feel your gratitude flowing from the words you use to thank God for the blessings He has bestowed on you. Keep the words
flowing, write on.
I think this is a great idea as a way to benefit the charities you support and possibly win something for oneself. I like the fact that there are different raffles to choose
from or one can buy tickets in all of them. Keep up the good deeds. Write on.
A mentally stimulating story that I enjoyed reading. I liked the way you presented it
with the character wondering what happened and who broke the mirrors, then as the story progresses, the reader gets the sense that she was very confused. The many discriptive words enabled the reader to mentally picture the scene and feel
the emotions being portrayed in the story. All the makings of a good story. Write on.
I think your free verse poem is very interesting. I like the way you present it in
the form of a self analysis. The thoughts and feelings you express through out the poem are ones that many people feel: the rebelious urge to not conform to society`s way of thinking, questioning who you really are, and why you feel as you do. I liked the last part where you show your rebellion through a poem. The last line made me laugh. Write on.
Another well written emotional and inspiring free verse poem that I loved reading.
I like the way you presented the theme by describing how the tree branches face
all types of problems, but conrtinue on. Then used it, as an example, for humans
to take something positive from every situation. Excellent advice. Write on.
A riveting story that kept me on edge throughout it. The pictures added to the visual stimulation while one reads the story. They, along with all those discriptive words,
enabled the reader to feel the emotions of the characters. They evoked fear then horror when the girl burned to death. A very frightening story that, sadly, could
happen in real liife. Write on.
A sad, heartfelt, and emotional poem that made me sad for all those lives that were changed by what happened, but angry at those who were responsible for the
bombings. You expressed your thoughts and feelings about the bombings, and
the aftermath very well, with words that enabled the reader to easily understand
how it affected the survivors to this day. Write on.
I liked this beginnings two a lot. It is nicely written and held my interest from
the start to the conclusion. You kept to the theme very nicely throughout the story.
As I read the story, I could mentally picture the events that were portrayed and
feel the emotions of the main character because of the discriptive words you used in portraying him. All the makings of a good story. Write on.
A nicely written heartfelt, emotional poem. You expressed your thoughts and feelings in your poem very powerfully. Iike the way you presented it as if you
were speaking to the person who was feeling despair. It made the poem more personal. The refrain after each verse added emotion to what you were writng
about. Keep the words flowing, write on.
I thought your essay about the modern zombie was interesting. You followed the
theme throughout the essay very well. The discriptive words you used to convey what your views were about the zombies from the past , compared to those in the
present, enabled the reader to relate to and easily understand what you were
portraying. The few problems I noted were some mispelled words, improper sentence structure in some places, and lack of proper punctuation in some places.
Otherwise, a nice essay. Write on.
A nicely written story that held my interest from the start to the conclusion. You
followed the them very well. The words you used to describe what your characters
were like, and the events that occured, helped me mentally picture what had
happened and what their feelings were All the makings of good story. Write on.
A nicely written fictional story that, in reality, happens everyday. You followed the
theme throughout the story very well. You conveyed your views on the theme with
words that enabled the reader to visualize the event that you were portraying in
your story. Write on.
I think your story is quite delightful. I enjoyed reading it because I was able to mentally picture all the events you wrote about in it due to the numerous
discriptive words you used in the writing of it. I felt like I was right there observing what happened and feeling how the old woman was feeling about the events that occured. It was sad that she died in the end, but she died happy. The picture of
the possum added a nice touch. Write on.
I liked reading your free verse poem. You expressed your thoughts and feelings
about why you were late for your best friend`s graduation very well. The words you
wrote to explain why enabled the reader to mentally picture what it was that caused you to be late. I especially liked the discriptive words you used to describe your
skirt tangling around your legs and how your hair came loose. It made me chuckle
a little when I pictured that. I hope your friend wasn`t mad at you. Write on.
I think your story about a past Fourth of July that you celebrated is very interesting. It is nicely written with numerous discriptive words that enabled the reader to picture,
mentally, the various events you wrote about in the story. While I read the story, I
could feel the excitement surrounding those events. Reading about the food made
me hungry! The pictures added depth to the story as a visual stimulant. Keep the
words flowing, write on.
Another interesting chapter that I enjoyed reading. The story gets more intriguing as it goes along. You did a nice job of gradually building up the suspense as to
why the crows and Indian, Reddog, are important. The many conversations and discriptive words enabled me to menatlly picture the many different events and tune in on the emotional aspect of it. The only problems I noted were: use of the wrong word (you wrote "then: instead of "than) in several places; lack of a
"comma" in many areas where one should be. Otherwise, good chapter. Write on.
A nicely thought out, rhyming poem, that is eductional in that it conveys to the
reader how to go about doing a project correctly. I like the way you presented it
by writing the steps, in verse, on how to accomplish it. The words you use to
describe them enable the reader to mentally visualize what you are portraying.
Write on.
A sad, heartfelt poem that is well written. As i read it, from the first line to the
last, I could feel the emotion pouring from the words: the pain, the fear, and
the sadness at first, then finally, the acceptance of her father`s death. I liked
the way you presented it, also. Write on.
A nicely written true experience that I enjoyed reading. You expressed your
thoughts and feeling about the job you were assigned to do very well. The
very discriptive words you used to convey them, and the events that occured,
enabled the reader to picture, vividly, what you went through. They even made
me laugh at some of the things you wrote. I did notice a few errors, though,
so you might want to look it over again. Write on.
A cute, sometimes funny poem that i liked reading. I liked the way you presented
it in the form of a short story, but in verse. Your rhyme was good. I could picture,in my mind, what you were portraying in your poem becasue of the words you used
in it to descibe the different events. Write on.
Another great poem that I enjoyed reading. You convey your thoughts and feelings
very well with many discriptive words that evoke feelings of pleasure as one reads
your poem. While I was reading your romantic poem, I could mentally picture what you wrote and feel the love flowing from the words.Keep the words flowing, write on.
Carlotta
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