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Review of The Game  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Here are my thoughts about,"The Game." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

This is a very good story and is written very well. Right from the start it grabbed you and held you in suspense. Good job!




Suggestions:

None that I can think of.



Overall:

An exciting read

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of My eagle  
Review by Boston
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Here are my thoughts about,"My eagle." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

This was a very good story with a bittersweet ending. Although it was sad to see him leave it was wonderful thing for him to be able to do. The eagle needs his freedom much more than the love. He was lucky in the fact that he experienced both. You wrote this piece very well. I love your style and your imagery was amazing. You pulled me in right from the beginning, and like the eagle held me there until the right moment; the end. Job well done!



Suggestions:


None that i can think of.


Overall:

A great read.

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of I Am A Cornfield  
Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Here are my thoughts about,I Am A Cornfield." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

This is a good poem. Your rhyme is good and the poem flows along nicely with a good rhythm. You paint a good word picture about autumn and the kids pinching some corn for Halloween. Nice job!




Suggestions:


Although good, I felt that the last line was a bit weak. I would take another look at this.


Overall:

A good poem

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of Suede Patches  
Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Here are my thoughts about,"Suede patches." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:


This piece has a lot of imagery and feel to it. I like the fact that you mentioned Phila. I have sort of a personal attachment to that city. The only part in this piece that seemed a bit off to me was your description of the subways brakes: “the brakes squealing with delight” With delight? Other than that I like this piece. Good job!



Suggestions:


Consider revising the first sentence as mentioned above.


Overall:

A good read

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of Hauntings  
Review by Boston
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Here are my thoughts about,"Hauntings." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

This is a good poem about a person dealing with Somniphobia. They are afraid of the darkness, falling asleep, and the dream world that awaits them. I have a special interest in this since it is the subject of one of the projects that I am working on. You done a fine job with this poem.




Suggestions:

None that i can think of excep maybe adding another verse or two.



Overall:

A good read.

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of New Day  
Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Here are my thoughts about,"New day." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

I like this haiku. Your poem shows a lot of emotion and love for someone. I think that my favorite part is the fourth verse. The imagery of a setting sun, and promise of a brand new day, makes for a nice piece. Good job!



Suggestions:

None that I could see.



Overall:

A good read

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of Sydney Harbor  
Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Here are my thoughts about,"Sydney Harbor." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.


As far as the Hakiu form is concerned you are correct with your syllable count of 5-7-5. However, I was a bit confused about the content. Are the lily pads sailing? That doesn’t seem to be quite right to me. Furthermore, you describe them as sailing like a silent motorboat, which really isn’t silent at all since you write in the next line; “screeching on the pond.” I guess that when I think of lily pads they are attached to their heavy stems that are below the water’s surface, and the large pads float or hover on top the water. At any rate, I may be wrong, but I thank you for sharing this poem.
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Review of i loev you  
Review by Boston
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi welcome to WDC

Here are my thoughts about,""i loev you." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

This is a nice little poem expressing your love for someone. Your rhyme is good and it seems to flow nicely.


Structure:

The first thing that I noticed was your title. I believe you meant to write "i love you" but made a typo. I also feel that the last verse is a little weak. You used the word feelings twice making it sound a bit repetitive.


Suggestions:
I would separate this poem into five verses, adding an additional line to the last verse. This would make it read easier and the addition of the last line will help the flow of the poem.




Overall:

A good read


Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of A Possum's Story  
Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Here are my thoughts about,"A Possum's Story." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.




Content:

I like your story. Boy, if there were a possum in my house my cat would go crazy. Possy, although a wild animal, showed a lot of love and he bonded to you and the cats. I am wondering if he was at a young age when this all started. At any rate, the story shows how a creature, whether it be animal or human responds to love. I think the possum knew that it was dying, and wanted to be near the one who loved him during his last hours. Animals are more soulful than a lot people give them credit to be.



Suggestions:


Tell more about your cats.


Overall:

A heartwarming read.


Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of I've Been  
Review by Boston
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Here are my thoughts about,"I've Been." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.




Content:

This is a good poem showing that we all have the good days and the bad ones as well. Most importantly though, is that you correctly added that, God has His way. He is in control of all things at all times; everywhere. His timing is always perfect. You had done a fine job with this.





Overall:


A good read.



Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review by Boston
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Here are my thoughts about,"Pearl of Wisdom-a Collage Poem." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

I think that this is a very clever poem. I like how you used all of the phrases and put them together to form this piece. You have accomplished a very difficult task, and I commend you for it. Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of The Beast  
Review by Boston
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Here are my thoughts about,"The Beast." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.




Content:

I like your story about the Halloween prank. I think that mostly everyone of us has been plagued by a local area beast of their own. I had one in my area when I was growing up, and your story reminded me of that. My beast was actually a man named Rubin who would like to scare the kids on Halloween, or any other time for that manner. Truth told, he was just as scary as the real person that he was. At any rate, you wrote a nice story. I like how you used all of the dialogue in keeping to the rules of the contest. Dialogue really gets a story moving. I wish that I could write good dialogue. Good job!



Overall:


A good read.

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review by Boston
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Here are my thoughts about,"The road less traveled." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

I enjoyed reading this story. It shows how the choices a teen, or adult for that matter, makes has consequences to them. JC’s decision has, as well as Elizabeth’s. I thought that your characters were strong and developed well, although I would have liked to have heard a little more about Josh and JC’s friends. At any rate, good job.




Suggestions:


I noticed that in a few areas the sentences, for me, could have been worded a little differently, or broken up into two of sentences. I also saw some error, or missing punctuation in some places. A typo was found in “My parents had given me a cell phone so that I could get [ahold] of them…..” Ahold should be two words, a hold.
All of these are very easy fixes. I would look through the story and see where you can change some of these minor things.




Overall:

A good read

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of Mangled  
Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Here are my thoughts about,"Mangled." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

You describe vividly how brutal winter can be up in the North East. I know firsthand; that's why I now live in S. Fla. The imagery in this piece was very good, and although winters in upstate NY can be harsh, there is also a lot of beauty found in all of the seasons there. I especially love autumn in the mountains. You’ve done a nice job on this.




Overall:

A good read.

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review by Boston
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Here are my thoughts about,"For better and better." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

This is a delightful romantic poem about a couple in love. You have put so much emotion into these sixteen lines, and done it so well. My favorite part is the first verse. “Let's go and sit, by yonder stream.” This is a wonderful image that you have created. Nice job!


Structure:

I like how you used the second line to start each verse. I am not quite sure what that form is, but it flowed well throughout the entire piece. The rhythm was good also, and it had a nice relaxed feel to it. I did look at the syllable count, and if I am correct, you were trying to get a four syllable count to each line. I believe that, with the exceptions of lines seven and eleven, you accomplished this well. At any rate, that doesn’t mar the beauty of this piece at all.





Overall:

a very good read.

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of Prologue  
Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Here are my thoughts about,"Prologue." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

This is a good prologue to, what promises to be a good story. It is descriptive and very well written. You done a very good job with this piece



Overall:

A good read

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of Come With Me  
Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi welcome to WDC

Here are my thoughts about,"Come With Me." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

I think that this is a nice love poem, and a good prelude for your story as well. My favorite part is the third part, especially when you write about playing with dolphins. You used your words beautifully, painting wonderful imagery throught.




Suggestions:


None that I can think of.


Overall:

A good read

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Here are my thoughts about,"First Foot in the Water. Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

I have felt and experienced the same types of things; only it was related to my music. I reached a point where I didn’t play for over two years, and had many issues because of it. I enjoyed reading your piece. You have done a fine job.



Suggestions:

The only thing that I don't care for, and maybe it is just me, is your use of the caps for emphasis. I feel they weren't needed.



Overall:

A good read

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Here are my thoughts about,"Upon Silent Reflection." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:
Define "nothing” It’s hard to do, if not impossible. It's what "rocks dream of." At any rate, you wrote a good poem. This is a very thought provoking piece.


Structure:

I'm not sure what form this falls under so I can't comment.


Suggestions:

None that I can think of.



Overall:

An interesting read

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of Bullying lesson  
Review by Boston
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Hi welcome to WDC

Here are my thoughts about,"Bullying lesson." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

This is a good story. As a kid in grade school I had to sometimes deal with bullies who were a lot bigger than I. However, instead of a chain and lock I had a protector; the guardian of the school yard who was my best friend.


Structure:

I noticed a few errors; one of them being that you used small case on all your [I’s] also, the number 7 should be written out. There was a few other small errors as well. I also felt the the ending was a little weak.


Suggestions:

I would make some of the changes mentioned above. They are small changes and easy to correct, so I don’t think you would have any problems. All in all it is a good story though.



Overall:

A good read

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi welcome to WDC

Here are my thoughts about,"Unsupervised knitting needle scenario." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

This is a good piece. It is typical of manufactures, and many other places of employment, to have their own butts covered for every contingency. Many of the manuals such as OSHA, MSDS, Employee handbooks, and safety regulation manuals are all written in language that the average worker can’t understand. Keep them in the dark about such things. As long as it’s for the good of the company it’s alright. Well, it could be worse. You could work in the mines where the safety regulations are really lax.


Structure:

Very well written.


Suggestions:


None


Overall:

A very good read.

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of Lost True Love  
Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Here are my thoughts about,"Lost True Love." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

It is terrible to see with the affects of addiction can do. You have described quite well in this poem one of the many facets to addiction, and how it can destroy family and loved ones. I have seen it from both perspectives. I saw how hard it was on the family, sometimes; equally hard on the addict. Both situations are sad, and hard to deal with. You’ve done a fine job on this poem bringing out these emotions.



Suggestions:


I would seperate the lines into four line verses. I think that will make it read easier, and look better too.


Overall:

A good read

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of Caught  
Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi

Here are my thoughts about Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

This is a good poem that shows much passion. My favorite part is the first verse. "Would but you be caught by my loving snare." Very nicely said, good job.



Suggestions:

None that i can think of.



Overall:

a good read.

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of Inside Without  
Review by Boston
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Here are my thoughts about,"Inside Without." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

This is an emotional poem. You really can feel for the wife desiring to be recognized and loved more by the husband, but sad'ly she isn't. You have done a fine job expressing these emotions throughout this piece.



Suggestions:

I can't think of any right now.



Overall:
a sad poem,that's a good read.


Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of Haiku  
Review by Boston
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Hi

Here are my thoughts about,"Haiku." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

You wrote ten haiku poems that stay in form with the three lines, 5-7-5 sybille count. However, they don't have a nature theme which is common in Haiku, but I am not expert. Otherwise, they are fine.



Suggestions:


I would seperate the poem from the title, or underline the title. It can be confusing to some, and they might think that the title is part of the poem.




Overall:
A good read


Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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