Hi
Here are my thoughts about,"Country Girl." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.
Content:
This is an interesting piece on human nature, as well as earthly nature. I kind of know where your thoughts are coming from. Country living and city living are different, and they mix like oil and water. What is the same however, are people. The ones you described are jaded by their circumstances, environment, and stresses of life in general. They hustle along every day in this dog eat dog world looking out for the wolf, which is always at their door. When you show them a kindness, like a simple hello, their first response in their mind is, “what does he mean by that?” They are not use to the kindness of strangers. They tend to be on their guard, always suspicious. Baltimore isn’t always an easy going city, and west Baltimore is even worse. But all they really need is to be acclimated to others showing a genuine kindness. What you doing, when you say hello, or open a door for someone with a stroller, is following God’s precepts. The bible speaks of this; Eph.4:32 it says “Instead, be kind to each other, tenderhearted, forgiving one another, just as God through Christ has forgiven you.” Note: it said “kind to each other.” And then again in; Romans 12:9 it says, “Love each other with genuine affection, and take delight in honoring each other. You are right on the mark when you show kindness to others. Even by saying a simple hello. Keep doing it.
Suggestions:
I had a little trouble when I came to the part; “…he just shrugged and kept driving (at this point, we were still in the car), and said, "I guess..” I don’t think it is necessary to have in parentheses, “we were still in the car.” Because you already said “he kept driving” which indicates that you were in the car. Also, that part should be re-worded a bit different for clarity, I think.
Overall:
A good story.
Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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