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Review of Three of a kind  
Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi

Here are my thoughts about,"Three of a kind." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

This is a real nice poem and a fine tribute to a friend. You made some excellent choices of words, and brought about some nice imagery. The emotion in this piece is made quite evident as you read. I really like the words;” To write a poem One must think Not with the mind But with the heart.” I thought that the author note at the end added to the poem. On a personal note; I liked the larger print. It made it much easier for me to read. Very nicely done!



Structure:

I didn't notice any errors throught this piece.


Suggestions:

None



Overall:

A good read

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi

Here are my thoughts about, "For that is the way it was meant to be." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

You have a pretty good premise for this piece. However, I found many errors throughout it both in grammar and punctuation. I also found many typos present. You have a good start and definitely you have something to work with regarding this piece. My suggestion is to find and correct these errors. It will make for a better read and nicer presentation.



Overall:

Needs some more work.

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of Clones  
Review by Boston
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi

Here are my thoughts about,"Clones." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

I enjoyed reading this piece. You brought up an interesting topic, however I felt that there was a lot more information needed to support your hypothesis.


Structure:

I thought that this was well written and I didn't find any errors.


Overall:

a good read

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi

Here are my thoughts about,"Peeing in Gatorade Bottles." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

From your title I didn’t expect this write to be what it is, but rather some inane piece about peeing in a Gatorade bottle. I know what a feat that can be, especially in a moving truck. Don’t ask how I know. At any rate, as you mention in this piece, at first you thought that you would be able to hold it until you got to a port-a john. How quickly we learn to adapt in dire situations, don’t we? I like this vignette and thought that you did a great job writing it. I think that if I was in that situation I too would pee in a Gatorade bottle, but I would make very certain that the seal on the top of any bottle wasn’t broken before I drank any Gatorade.




Overall:

A good read

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of Dead Rose  
Review by Boston
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi

Here are my thoughts about,"Dead Rose." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

I like this dark poem a lot. You have done a fine job on this. I especially like your last four lines, and the way you ended the poem. There just may be a good story that you can glean from this piece. Very nicely done!




Overall:

A good read

Thanks for sharing this with us, and keep writing.
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Review of Dragonfly  
Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi

Here are my thoughts about,"Dragonfly." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

This is a nice poem on love and you used some good imagery, especially with the dragonfly. I didn’t notice any errors in this piece. I like how you made use of repeating the line; “Dragonfly bright soul,” in the third verse. That was a nice touch and really worked out well in this piece. Good job!


Overall:

A delightful read.

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of Basketball Dreams  
Review by Boston
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi

Here are my thoughts about,"Best Friends." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

I think that you have a pretty good start to a fine story here. Vic, being obese, is being treated poorly by everyone, while being a bit disillusioned. She loves Luck, but obviously she doesn’t see that Zac may be the only person who really cares for her. You kind of feel sorry for both of them because they are both missing out.
You have developed Vic’s character pretty well, although I found that all the references to her weight being be a little too much. The character of Zac, on the other hand, I felt should have been developed more, as is the case with Luke also. All in all it’s not a bad start, but there were errors throughout this piece that need to be addressed. Some of your sentence structure, punctuation, and so forth need to be looked at. . Also, some misused words, like;”She looked over her [should] to see whom he really was speaking to. I think you meant to write shoulder. It’s a typo I know but it makes for a lot better read if all these things are taken care of. I would consider going over this again and finding where you can make some changes to make this an even better story.




Overall:

Good story but can use some more work.

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of Bad Taco  
Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Josh

Here are my thoughts about,"Bad Taco." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.


This is a good piece and it makes us think about others whose lives and work seem to be something less than who think they are. It does as you say make us think that;” If life for her was all that she wanted it to be.” Often we get fooled by the impression we get from other people. Sometimes on closer inspection, we may find out just how wrong we really are.

This piece reminded me of an experience that I once had while working at a hospital. A woman, an assistant, had to clean up after patients She would do all sorts of tasks that most of us would think was degrading. I too thought if life was everything that she wanted it to be. Sadly I even went a little further by thinking less of her for it. Unseen, I watched as she worked. Soon my attitude about her quickly changed as she started to sing. What a voice! Then I understood. It was her gift from God and eventually her ticket much to better things.

You did a fine job on this and much emotion was put into your words. Your imagery was good and I thought it had a nice flow to it. Good job! Thanks for sharing this with us, and keep writing.
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Review by Boston
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi

Here are my thoughts about,"Sound Not The Taps." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

This is a sad poem about a veteran struggling without a home. You wrote; “half a century old my story yet told.” So I am surmising that this person is a veteran of the Viet Nam war, which as we know, was an unpopular war in some turbulent times. Veterans came home and didn’t receive the respect or admiration that they deserved, but instead were ignored for their service to their country. I think that no veteran should ever have to go homeless, but rather be helped and properly taken care of so this type of thing doesn’t happen. In one word- honored! They should be honored for the sacrifice and service that they have given to our country. Another part that I liked in this piece is your reference to the scripture found in 2 Thessalonians 3:10;” If a man don't work, he won't eat for thus say the word.” I think you done a fine job on this poem. Thanks for sharing and keep writing.
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Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi and welcome to WDC

Here are my thoughts about Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:
This is a good piece that relates to so many of us; especially in this current economic climate. I have many friends who are feeling the strain economically. Some of them are worse than others, but they all could use some positive words of encouragement along the way. I like your style of writing and thought that this piece flowed along quite well. Very nicely done! Thanks for sharing this with us.







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Review by Boston
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi

Here are my thoughts about,"Our walk Through The Autumn Woods." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

Although short, I like your story. You painted some good imagery about being out and enjoying autumn; which is something that I miss about my life in the mountains. I thought that it was a rather short piece, but I suspect you were limited by contest rules. At any rate, I would expand this some more or mayby incorporate it into another piece that you may be working on. Nice job! Thanks for sharing this with us, and keep writing.
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Review of I'm So Proud  
Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi and welcome to WDC.

Here are my thoughts about,"I'm So Proud." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

Your poem is a nice tribute to your sister in Christ. She probably had help along the way from you, and others like you, who loved and guided her; being there for her throughout the rough times. I also like that you alluded to Philippians 1:6 in the fifth verse. In life you meet and make a lot of friends, but a “true” friend is hard to find.


Structure:

I noticed that in your first verse you made a typo. The first line you ended with [/]. Also, the first four verses you wrote them quatrains. Then in the fifth verse you changed it to six lines, a sestet, (I believe). Since it is a free form poem I don’t think that it matters all that much. At any rate, the piece stands by itself. It has a nice flow and your words, and what you are expressing, is beautiful. Well done!


Overall:

A delightful read.

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hi and welcome to WDC

Here are my thoughts about,"A Day In My Life (today!) Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

You are telling a story about doing nothing and being bored doing it. What you call lazy, I call a nice relaxing day away from all the stress of work.


Structure:

There are much too many parentheses in this story. It didn’t seem to flow the way it should. I feel that you need to collect and get your thoughts in order. This read like one long paragraph that is lacking some information. Thing like who was Peter? How did he relate to you?


Suggestions:

I would remove most of the parentheses, thay arn't needed. Give more details about this day.



Overall:

Needs work

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of Least Favorite  
Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi

Here are my thoughts about,"Least Favorite." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:


This poem has a good premise. I liked the first line. I thought that it draws you into the poem well. A great start to your poem. However, with all spelling and grammatical errors aside, I think that you should have given more details, putting more depth into the piece. For instance, why do you feel that you are your parents least favorite?

Structure:

Some errors seen are; no body’s should be nobody’s. [i] should be capitalized in line four and six and seven. These are just a few and if corrected will make for a nicer presentation.


Suggestions:

I think that you have a nice start with this piece and it is definitely worth working on some more. Adding more details will help a lot also.




Overall:

Needs some work

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of Me and My shadow  
Review by Boston
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Hi

Here are my thoughts about,"Me and My shadow." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

This is a good poem. You brought out your emotions very well and used some good imagery. I especially like the first verse especially the lines; “Its raining in her eyes whilst the world is shining her smiles are forced as she wakes everyday.” You used a fine choice of words. Very nicely done!


Structure:

I noticed errors throughout this piece. They are minor and can easily be corrected. Some of these are; Its-should be It’s. I mess this up myself just about every time; although I do know differently. Also, everyday should be every day. The poem is very good and would be much better with a little editing. It is always a good idea to have someone else read over it. Often they can see errors that you may have missed.


Suggestions:


Correct some of the errors like I mentioned above.


Overall:

A good read.

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review by Boston
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi

Here are my thoughts about,"Emily Brown: A Monologue of the Deceased." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

This is a dark piece that has a good start pulling the reader right in. However I felt that more needed to be told. Why did this girl feel that she was a monster? Why did she hate herself? Surely a mother who didn’t love her and a sister, who envied her, wouldn’t make her a monster enough to hate herself to the point of which she did. I feel that there is something more that isn’t being told, and should be told, in this story. My favorite part is,”…. but most importantly, she was the reflection in the mirror that disgusted her.



Suggestions:

You have a great start to a good story. I would like to see you expound more upon this, giving much more information and detail. Let the words flow out unto the page. I know you have them already set inside your mind. Let the go!



Overall:

a good read

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of Privileged  
Review by Boston
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi

Here are my thoughts about,"Privileged." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

Nice job on this free verse poem. Materialism and the pursuit of “things” over the true values in life, is not only found among the middle class teens, but also adults as well. Greed-it motivates many things. It disguises itself in wrappers of good, and deceives many. Nice job on this piece!



Overall:

A good read

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi and welcome to WDC

Here are my thoughts about,"Swing for the stars." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

This is a nice free verse poem. I like the dialogue of the old woman and how you incorporated that into the piece; telling a story and summing it all up with the narration. This is something that I am experimenting with myself. I also noticed that you made use of rhyme in some areas and not in others. I like rhyme and where it was used; it was done very well I thought. My favorite part of course is; ” So reach for the stars while you can. Before you're like me, old and gray. Reach for the stars as long as you can Before they all fade away." Nice job done on this poem.


Overall:

A very nice read.

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of Faded Fears  
Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi and welcome to WDC

Here are my thoughts about,"Faded Fears." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

This is a pretty good piece. It contains two of the things that I find fascinating and that are subjects of one of my own projects. They are -dreams and darkness. I liked the line, “As I walk toward the darkness I realize that my phobias are not the things I really fear most …. I wanted to read more and have more detailed information on this dream.



Suggestions:

This piece is very short. I think too short and it needs to be expanded at lot more. You have some interesting thoughts and I feel that you can take this into a very good direction if you work on it some more. Make some additions and give more detail. You have a great start already. Nice job! Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of The Wind  
Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi and welcome to WDC

Here are my thoughts about,"The Wind." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

This is a lovely poem written using some nice imagery. My favorite part is; "She makes falling leaves, blow way up high, like shards of amber, dazzling the sky." You made the words dance on the page with these lines. Nice job!



Structure:

You used some good rhyme and I thought that the rhythm and flow of this poem was also good.


Suggestions:

I would try and be consistent with the use of your caps. Some lines you use them and others you don't. Also, in my opinion, I would separate the lines into four line stanzas. I think it makes for an easier read and much nicer presentation. Just my personal taste though.



Overall:

a very nice read

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi

Here are my thoughts about,"Find a Locked Door break It Down To Find." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

Nice piece. I thought that you have executed the use of the prompt very well and it had a nice smooth word flow. My favorite lines; “Time moves on and continues to pass, as silence in the wind brushes over the grass.” Nice job! Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of Bad Lands  
Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi and welcome to WDC

Here are my thoughts about,"Bad Lands." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:


You bring up a lot of good points in this piece, and your frustration about war and the world condition is evident throughout this writing. War, unfortunately, is an institution, and it will always be around. Man is a totally depraved creature, and without God, can never change. Good vs. evil is an ageless conflict which started long before there was our great planet. Awesome stuff when you start thinking about it all. You wrote,” Religion at its best, can only bring us desires.” Religion, as fine as its teachings is concerned, may be good. However, it is useless to an individual if that person is not experiencing a true relationship with God. Then prayer is not falling on deaf ears. The answer to our prayers is not always the answer we would like to hear, but who then is in the position to question God. We should do our best to live peacefully with each other, pray for peace, work toward peace. This is all very good, but remember, the world as a whole will never experience true total peace; not until Gods divine plan reaches His competition.





Overall:

A good read

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of Musician's Time  
Review by Boston
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Jim,

Here are my thoughts about,"Musician's Time." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

You have a good poem going on here. It is very relatable to me as a musician who once experienced the many detours off of the road while traveling with the band. One of my favorite parts of this poem is the ninth verse. I often wonder if my music has left some sort of mark on anyone, that they will remember me when I am no more.


Structure:

Although your poem is good I felt that there were some parts of it that could use some tweaking. It seems you started out using a syllable count of four each per line, but then broke that pattern in some of the verses. This is an easy fix, by just changing some words around, and it would make for a nice constant rhythm throughout; if that is indeed what you were going for. I also had some problem with lines one and two in the eight verse. I am not quite sure what you are trying to say here. “When I strings I strum.” Maybe you meant; when the strings I strum. At any rate, I thought it needed a little clarity there.


Suggestions:

Take another look at this piece and see where you can make some of the changes. You have a good poem. It just needs a little polish in some areas. Nice job!



Overall:

A good read

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review by Boston
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi and welcome to WDC

Here are my thoughts about,"I Can't Write Poetry." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:

Your title contradicts the poem because you have just written a poem and a pretty good one at that. I like your first verse. I can relate to that. I have had this feeling many times before, but I keep trying hoping that someday I’ll put something good down on paper. I think you’ll find that a lot of people can relate to this poem.


Structure:

This piece has a nice rhythm and it flows along nicely. The rhyme is also good




Overall:

A good read

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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Review of My Secret Love  
Review by Boston
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi and welcome to WDC

Here are my thoughts about,"My Secret Love." Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish.

Content:


Your poem kind of reminds me of an old song. The name of the composer escapes me, but the song is “Secret Love.” Your probably much too young or wouldn’t listen to that musical genre anyway. At any rate, i’ll move along. You express a lot of emotion throughout this poem and do it well. The subject is seeking- waiting, for her ideal love to come along. She already loves him (this ideal man who is known only in her heart) because he possesses all that she is longing for. She is waiting to experience love.
What I like is the fact that you used words to tell about this man; which can make him be pictured in many different ways to many different people. All women have their ideal in mind, or at least I think they do. I can’t understand them; I’m a man.



Structure:

A free form poem which You used both anaphora and Epistrophe repetition in the piece which gives it a nice effect. Your word choices were very good also.


Suggestions:

I can't think of anything.



Overall:

A good read

Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
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