FIRST IMPRESSIONS: Wonderful Part2 Short Story. You have God-given talent and it shows in your true inspiration and the way your stories unfold. I just love your stories. Enchanting, easy to read, well-informing, fairy tales of the heart. I think you have love on your lips. And it is captivating.
CRITICAL: No mistakes. Good.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Keep writing more, they are a real find for WDC members! You have a knack for relaying royalty well. And your details about them are almost flawless.
FIRST IMPRESSIONS: An absolutely viable piece. Such marvelous description! Well-formed stability in the measure of words. Being that you chose a complete description,and that was your preference, I feel that you deserve a high mark.
CRITICAL: You may want to begin a vampire story with more gore. But this was not as such. Vampire stories are not my forte, but I recently wrote one and still did not get blood-and-gore into it enough. I attempted a different take on one too. I liked your surreal message of love between the two however it may be that the word is" vampire" and it has to be viable.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I really think you know what you are doing. You begin and end with finesse. And the romantic element of pieces is always a good quest and very praiseworthy.
IMPRESSIONS: Excellently vibrant as different points were proposed in this. Very on-target. Back-on-track statements. A very candid last paragraph that is something I too believe in. You did not smear a political attitude on us, you were down-to-earth and methodical and it came across as a piece of good quality writing.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I liked your mentioning the current President Obama in it. The venture into healthcare was well-taken as your debating point. More to this than meets the eye. Informational. Detailed.
This point: Brilliant sixth paragraph.
SPELLING AND GRAMMAR: No mistakes I could see. Good quality in your style. It hums along with effort. I realy liked your piece.
THANKS FOR PLUGGING IT>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
IMPRESSIONS: At first glance there is more description than dialogue, and then half-way down the page it swtiches and the description is replaced by main-line dialogue. So there must have been a reason. No matter. What ever the anesthetic was behind the words, it was collectively a heavenly cloud that hovered above Mort and Sarah. I was very impressed with the detailed knowledge of the author, nothing easy about this piece other than it speaks well and flows well and has understandable dialogue. It placed wisdom at places, I liked that.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I felt an excellent mentalist attitude this piece. Things out of the ordinary and hard-to-explain. All in all, with the innuendos considered in the piece, I liked mostly the thought of a a near-death statement seconded by what it was was a death or afterlife experience that was trying to surface? Things surfaced in a subconscious way after I thought about it. I even acknowledged the terms without feeling offended, when it was stronger and might be complaining it was all the more brilliant in its meaning. To make a long story short, it has many directions. Again I must rely on part-intuition that isn't discussed with the author {/i}and{/i reader.
SPELLING AND GRAMMAR*star3*: You used a free grammar form with this piece when you use a line like:
BUT MORT AND SARAH [/i}KNEW.{/i}
This is very acceptable in fact I have read the better hip books with a contemp style that do this.
IMPRESSIONS: Good managed poem for a spiritual one. Good young lines that find a solution by the end of the poem. It starts as mysterious with the line "before my birth" which makes you read into the poem and its meaning. Good as a field of morality that is questioned perhaps with words of family unity and decisions under God. A daily-like prayer poem, it values life I think.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: A "knowing" poem, it is intelligent, spiritually careful with its lines, valuable with its lines. It sounded like time was spent on it. It was crisp when thought about it in the aloud sense and as a utopian type position, gives a solution that the last stanza asks for. What kind of spiritual being returns and finds this family? I think I understand it. It has a surreal cloud above this poem. Much is said without saying. Something is hiding behind the words.
I thought the crux of a theme pointed to the lines:
But it wasn't long before 'twas clear
We were not struggling year by year.
and then:
"Do not waste your family years.
Struggle with each other every day!
Help each other find your way!"
Great lines.
SPELLING AND GRAMMAR: Mistake as a typo only. lwe'd to we'd in 8th stanza, 3rd line.
IMPRESSIONS: Candid and beautiful, I liked the theme here. Almost like a song, is the way this poem read. I liked your questions and the turn of phrase at the end that "you" were the one that was going to light a candle, doing something about the situation, A kind of moral poem it fits well as a feature in the last Spiritual Newsletter.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Knowing that you shared "good times" with the person in question in the poem, it is a love poem that extends itself to the spirit and that is always the most admirable. Spiritual poems without question can last an eternity as an eternal question. I like those poems that address the eternal question of being one with perhaps a lonely spirit without one's partner are the best, but that is just my opinion. And finally, each line was a flow into the next, more questions, at the end an answer. When a witness talks about love in a poem, the progress of the poem goes well which it really did in the poem.
SPELLING AND GRAMMAR: Nice jargonized placement of simple words turning into a good picture of a spiritual witness. No mistakes in spelling or grammar that I can see. Correct in its form, it sounds like a song.
IMPRESSIONS: My first impressions of your writing is that you are very excellent. I just love your description, it is vivid, quick, fascinating,scintilating, and active. Using that active voice is such a better thing than being passive. Something I myself must dearly work on. I find this a bit of magic, with the mug of chocolate in a wintry setting. The value I get from it is it is a definitive profile from a WDC member. I luckily have some thoughts of this yet your speed and rapidity of being verbal is a grand slam here. Very nice, summer.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE:I'm no coach but I think you have a world of talent as I said before. You can utilize this with great strides with more pieces on WDC.
SPELLING AND GRAMMAR: No mistakes, dear. Just maybe indent your paragraphs. A fun item to contemplate.
IMPRESSIONS: Again, you are always at the core of WDC. A major presence for us, I feel. Your contests and your duty to good form and versification makes us riffle through masterpieces you may have had a part of whether you realize it or not. I care for things like this. And I liked the poem immensely with its deep consequences and major decisions.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Very excellent advice in poetic form. Again, good things come from faithfulness,,what we can do with nature, and our inspirations. You must have felt that way when you wrote it for its original purpose. I think I know what you are trying to say, it's awesome, really.
IMPRESSIONS: This must be a city-poem. I realized this after reading it and then reading it for the second time carefully as I noted the next to the last stanza. It might have even been the gold nugget in the poem. To have looked at it this way, while I lived in a city, I find it an amazing poem. Ironic, candid, full of detail.
PRAiSE AND APPLAUSE: Whatever kind of poem you wanted it to be, it was just fine. I liked the last line as well. It speaks for itself.
GRAMMAR, SPELLING: No mistakes.
Feather Duster
Twilight Rain My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
IMPRESSIONS: As a comedic sense of word-play with using talking potatoes, this works. I find a comedic piece a nice slice of WDC. Off-the-cuff gem.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Original, funny.
ANYTHING GO WRONG?: If you wanted to be a little silly, you suceeded. I don't think there is anything wrong with that. I like features in the Noticiing Newbies Newsletter. Yours was featured and for a good reason, something different from you guys. Nice. No spelling, grammar mistakes to speak of.
Feather Duster
Twilight Rain
IMPRESSIONS: Just had to read another. I am a fan. This was featured in the Poetry Newsletter this week and I have noted your talent well in the Simply Positive Group as a choice of a feature. With this particular poem, it is a bit serious for you. You usually leave a small note of honesty that comes through ryely however this piece is just out and out interestingly sad. Death is the hardest subject to talk about. Some don't want to touch it.
I like the line:
"Yet others must have been loved quite widely, for their graves are piled high with grief from mourners, right up past the tombstone toward the sky." What a line! How catchy! Noteable! Exemplary!
LOVE AND DEATH. It is a reality for most. Your words want to move toward the subject of love before death. This is so admirable.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: As in all your work, it is by far WDC's most original work amongst the others as a whole. I delineated a logical question with this piece. And then solved it. It was most fitting. For those I mourned, in my own world, I would love to keep these words in mind.
GRAMMAR AND SPELLING: No spelling mistakes. You have arranged your poems in such a way that their style is "rebellious" to the norm and stands out as something noone can actually copy. In different instances, they are wild and free. In this instance, more contained, however, never normal.
IMPRESSIONS: I get the feeling you have read alot of detective novels? Your take on the "Windy City" detective here is quite clever, has good humor, and many details. I liked your substance to the detective Lou. Gloria was a type-cast take-off I think you wanted to keep as comic relief and I felt that went well. You told a real story here with crime circuit buddies. It was original and fast-paced. It took me a second reading and I understood the blow-by-blow details and took it all in. Good sense of imagination here. Nicely engineered.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Congrats that it received an award. I think it was award-material. Applause to your characters from Chicago in the '30's. They were dynamite. Nicely lengthy with out a short-out. Good, select dialogue. Sensible, coy description.
SPELLING AND GRAMMAR: I didn't see any spelling mistakes. Your grammar appeared fine.
I enjoyed reviewing you for First Peoples as they shine light on Mods.
IMPRESSIONS: I commend you for working on a Vampire novel. I hope it is going well for you. I got a brief notion of your work here with this piece for ACE reviews and am very impressed. I liked your descriptions and your subject. Your knowledge of the subject of vampires must be vast. Do
you read alot of Vampire material? It sounds like you do. Your next to the last paragraph in this piece was well done and interesting for us as detail to what you spoke of.
IMPRESSIONS: I liked your title immediately with this poem. It invades the poem with lots of meaning behind your deeper thoughts. As a spiritual statement, the poem goes further than meek words. It is based on something much better than that. It has a strong sense of stanzas and gives us something to the imagination as well. To resound in His Glory is a very honorable thing. You did this masterfully.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I always love to contemplate spiritual poetry. I breathe with this kind of poem and really get something good out of it. I found myself placing myself in the "I" personna and felt just the way the poem did. Examination of soul is a great mentalist exercise. Good job!
IMPRESSIONS : Nice flash-fiction. It was suspenseful and in general a nice puzzle to work with. I liked your subject about climbing, it made for an interesting mystery of the task being done and the two of you doing what you were doing during climbing. The personna had a level of a love-tap that superceded the piece. It was as if I wanted these these two to manage their climbing because they cared for each other so much.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Your dialogue was excellent. It went with the territory. Then the mystery of the words, they fit so well. I really liked this.
SPELLNG AND GRAMMAR: Didn't see any mistakes in that.
Glad you were chosen for a feature in Simply Postiive Forum.
IMPRESSIONS: I know that you find vampires interesting in stories, Megan. I like to see that you have a comprehensive list of vampires in stories that you like. Your list was filled with tidbits about vampires I am interested in as well. The best thing about this list is it wasn't boring.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I liked your women vampires, "Rosalie" --I identify with her. Maybe I will write something like this. Thank you for helping me with vampires. I've been going through WDC browsing through vampire stories for several months. All of the ones you emailed me with are great. I have a few of my own that I found too!
MISTAKES: No spelling mistakes in your presentation.
Hail to the group for Simply Positive Forum. What a massive amount of royal reviews have come out of this. The names of these people are the very best on WDC and I'm proud to be associated with this group.
Then, too, the amount of sigs were a testimony like the long list of credits at the end of a movie. This is an ongoing one and I hope it lasts! Thanks Sherri Gibson and Kelly and Stephanie Grace and Vikki and the rest for being so dearly detailed and caring. I love you all.
IMPRESSIONS I love to read your poetry. Forgive me if I sound repetitive. I will try to come up with one opinion amongst many and try to be original. It's funny but every bird you mentioned in the first stanza I recognized either in my yard or my Mum's yard. Then it was all about the pigeons and it was just mind-blowing. If a person were to seek advice and logic behind poetry, I would place you as a Seer.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I haven't seen one of your poems go down without a fight. And this one here, well it's a lesson yes.
MISTAKES IN SPELLING OR GRAMMAR: Nothing I could see.
IMPRESSIONS: I noted Bradley, Timmy, Mrs. Lipscome, Mum and Dad, Enid, Tandor, Tabitha--to name most--to be a real team. You have all the elements of a sci-fi extravaganz. Your characters bounce around a bit, but that is to be expected with lots of dialogue. I tried not to get lost and found myself clinging to the ending. Do you suppose more description in further pieces would help the knowledge of where we must go to understand "Timmy at the end of the dinosaur's tail" ?
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: Good job! You came across.
MISTAKES: Saw no spelling errors and your knowledge on grammar was sufficient.
Glad it was featured in this week's NOTICING NEWBIES NEWSLETTER.
IMPRESSIONS: Slated as a medical calendar of days in May over a basically Alzheimer's patient, this was instant "vintage-stew" for me since I had a clinic novel in the early seventies I wrote, and what one calls "mixed stew" to the Editor this week of the Mystery Newsletter where this item was featured. I found this not just hemlock- humorous, but ironic and flat-out interesting as an incident. Detailed nurses' charts are of course going to run this way.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE "For Hauser to think someone is trying to kill him gives me the impression I am in a Kurt Vongegut book somewhere." Otherwise, Hauser is very ill and not able to handle this problems without steady daily nursing problems. In any case, Ativan was probably not the problem. And Lipitor could only save your life, unless you have developed back pain or any muscular pain from it. No wonder "no deficiencies were found regarding this incident". Yes, overdoses happen. How to trust the Medical Staff is up to you and is the only way going.
MISTAKES: Written up it sounds like there are no spelling mistakes.
IMPRESSIONS: I found your story life-giving and wonderful. It was a well-written story. Everything fit in detail and it claimed a real-life presence that few can override for a beautiful place to catch hold of. To say that it was wet and wild would be silly and sound like I was reviewing a poem however when you write like you do, the words on a beach setting with a lighthouse{one of my favorite subjects} involved, the setting and scene is very exciting. Your roll of words was a virtual dice of active bait. I like your twists and turns as if you really really worked on this when you might expect me to figure it was a quick run.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE When you spoke of the lighthouse named Barnegat and then in the same piece admitted to being a tax accountant and also added a touch of irony with an obituary, I was delighted. Such is life. We see these things even as we vacation or as we admire things on our journeys and jaunts. Last of all, you have a great style. And that is the epitomy of envy for all writers. You cannot but be a great success in writing, when your style rises above all else.
SPELLING AND GRAMMAR: Somehow this was a masterpiece of grammar. Saw no spelling mistakes.
IMPRESSIONS I value this piece. My own father died in a similar way and I found it unforgettable. He in fact was unforgettable. I know my nephew felt he lingered on and he was young when Dad passed on. You gave a sense of peace and comfort to a reader. Your discussion of death was tender and life-giving to others. I liked your dialogue that you proposed, it was civil and in touch with family which is always nice. Not a line wasted.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: You have a gift for giving us an honesty here. I felt it to be a reality and it came across nicely. Family issues are sometimes the hardest but always the best to speak of in a piece. You have conquered an audience for this. Your Dad looked good as he looked up for a goodbye and you gave him dignity as you wrote I think.
SPELLING AND GRAMMAR: No mistakes I could catch.
Thanks for sharing this in the Spiritual Newsletter this time. I love features in that Newsletter.
IMPRESSIONS: What a delight to read such a poverty poem. There are comedic lines in this but for the most part, we have that "bum" in mind the whole way through the poem. Whoever the narrative is, he is captivating and essential to a poem about those unfortunates who find themselves at a loss for money. Now that Donald Trump has everyone talking money, what do the elderly need to live up to to see it happen? I like this poem. Off-the-cuff and intelligent.
PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: I think you suggested that there is an economy problem somewhere. I was just reading "Rolling Stone" today and there is an Obama article in there concerning his take on the economy. Hey. This poem might see us all in a tight squeeze if you like at it in a certain light. Good show.
MISTAKES: Couldn't see any spelling or grammar mistakes.
Thanks for letting me share my opinion with you. It doesn't reflect all, but myself. Hope that I said something you might key into. Saw this in the Poetry Newsletter as a feature. Excellent.
This poem is perfect for a summer read. I'll admit I noted the basic in it and just loved that and the logic behind it. Loved the grains of sand on that beach I might count or the time of day that made it perfect. It was easy to understand. Nice to note the flow of it. Love. If that doesnt beat all. Such a wonderful thing. How often we say it. And in good expression you have stayed true.
I like your form. I don't know exactly what pentameter it is but it really does have a nice gait. If it was in all honesty written in free verse consciousness then the gait was mastered well and never an easy task with free verse. Champagne free verse.
Good spelling, good grammar, I liked the pauses and the stops.
Thanks for sharing this in a recent Romance/Love Newsletter.
First of all, Princess Megan Rose is a most intriguing and wonderful writer. I love her books. I love to follow her adventures. I love to think about how she delves into history to find exciting and interesting characters. What she writes is, a kind of fantasy-level with a knock-out conversational style. We here at WDC can easily get into her portfolio and enjoy what she has to offer.
This item was chock full of lots of ideas. I like revisiting the past myself. I am writing a new novel and have taken the past again and revisited the characters in my first book that was set in the '50's in the pages of the new book. This item looks at all kinds of times. From caveman, to newer times. What kind of woman would I be like in those times?, asks Megan Rose. She would have been a powerful woman. I think, because I know her military background she is a powerful woman now living in these very times. To put her back in historical times, she would rise above. I'm sure of it. It's just in her make up.
I saw no real mistakes in her grammar or spelling. I love her storytelling. I love her attitude for psychology. And her need for detail. I will always reread at times things she has written because the complications are just all that more intriguing.
Don't let us down, Megan Rose. Continue on to write another fine novel. I'm sure all your fans await that.
Feather Duster
vicki
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: At first glance there is more description than dialogue, and then half-way down the page it swtiches and the description is replaced by main-line dialogue. So there must have been a reason. No matter. What ever the anesthetic was behind the words, it was collectively a heavenly cloud that hovered above Mort and Sarah. I was very impressed with the detailed knowledge of the author, nothing easy about this piece other than it speaks well and flows well and has understandable dialogue. It placed wisdom at places, I liked that.
: I felt an excellent mentalist attitude this piece. Things out of the ordinary and hard-to-explain. All in all, with the innuendos considered in the piece, I liked mostly the thought of a a near-death statement seconded by what it was was a death or afterlife experience that was trying to surface? Things surfaced in a subconscious way after I thought about it. I even acknowledged the terms without feeling offended, when it was stronger and might be complaining it was all the more brilliant in its meaning. To make a long story short, it has many directions. Again I must rely on part-intuition that isn't discussed with the author {/i}and{/i reader. 
: My first impressions of your writing is that you are very excellent. I just love your description, it is vivid, quick, fascinating,scintilating, and active. Using that active voice is such a better thing than being passive. Something I myself must dearly work on. I find this a bit of magic, with the mug of chocolate in a wintry setting. The value I get from it is it is a definitive profile from a WDC member. I luckily have some thoughts of this yet your speed and rapidity of being verbal is a grand slam here. Very nice, summer.