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DISCLAIMER: Please keep in mind that any suggestions made are intended to help, and not to criticize your work in any way.
OVERALL THOUGHTS: The premise and rules are relayed in a way no participant can misunderstand and easy to follow for those interested. Having participated in the activity before, I found it enjoyable. I like the way politics and religion cannot be used, for that would take away from the fun because both are serious topics. I also like the fact that entries must be no more than a 13+ rating. Most of all, I like the way it is stressed that this is an activity meant for those who want to have fun. 
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} ERRORS/SUGGESTIONS: A comma should follow "dinner". Commas should also come after "Normally", "However", "be specific", "well", "only seven", "nine-thirty", and "all to bed". Others like these were noticed throughout the short story as well. I hope these examples have helped. 
WHAT I LIKED: I like the way a simple trip to the ice cream shop stopped the girls from squabbling. I also enjoyed the way the monologue is written from the heart. It is obvious that you are family oriented and enjoy every moment spent with them. Thank you for sharing a part of your heart with us. 
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WHAT I THOUGHT: The imagery and emotions drew me into the item from the first stanza to the last. The final stanza is my personal favorite, for it relays that where there is hope and faith that the darkest of things become brighter. 
ERRORS/SUGGESTIONS: No spelling, grammatical, or other errors were noticed. There are no suggestions for improvement. The parody is great! 
OVERALL OPINION: It was easy humming the words of the parody to "The Twelve Days Of Christmas". What a feast your "love" gave you, although a fattening one. 
I enjoyed every stanza of the poem. 
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MY THOUGHTS: You did a superb job of using the prompt. Like you, I do not question God. You did a magnificent job of expressing why you believe He should not be questioned. You say it best in the last two stanzas. His ways are direct and simple, and He is a loving and patient God. The poem is well written and uplifting. Thank you for sharing it with the community, Jaya. 
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FAVORITES: Let me begin by saying you did an awesome job using the prompt. 
WHAT I THOUGHT: I think you did a super job of relaying how close one can be3come to his/her vehicle. In your case, it is the Fiat. The image of the building is an additional plus. It gives readers a good look at what the setting is like, and as large as it is, why you fear elevators. Wow! You certainly have some wild dreams! 
TITLE: Is appropriate for the entry. 
SUGGESTIONS: I cannot think of anything I feel would improve the entry. 
OVERALL OPINION: The imagery is outstanding! I was drawn into the poem from beginning to end. It was easy envisioning the child bubbling with laughter when getting lost among the stars. I also liked the stanza about the holy seven and the ancient thinkers. The authors note following the entry is an additional plus in my opinion. The poem is well written and lovely. 