Beautiful.. The poem clearly describes your pain. I loved the line " I saw your face when you saw hers".
But I was unable to understand the meaning of the line "She will not come cheaply to you". I mean in what context have you written it?? Could you please describe the meaning in your net mail, if you don't mind..
Wow!!! this poem is awesome.. How deeply it describes a mother's feelings while she sends her son to the war!!
The last para is heart touching. I loved this poem like anything.
And it is so true that mothers are made like this.
Lovely...
Beautiful poem Tim.. I personally love poems which have an element of love, romance or relationships in them..
And this poem is full of feelings. So I really enjoyed reading it. In most of the cases love dies out with increasing distance.
But your poem shows how true is your love.
It is a wonderful poem. I am sure the princes in your life is very beautiful. Great imagination is used in the poem. I loved the third para. The title of the poem is appropriate and the poem has a nice beginning.
This fact is so true Tim. And you have put your views in the form of a beautiful poem. I liked the poem and the idea behind it.
It is a very nice rhyming poem. I enjoyed reading it.
ha ha!! very nice.. The poem has element of fun in it and anyone would enjoy reading it. It's a short and sweet poem overall.
By the way!! How can a great poet like you get bored?? You always have an option to write. isn't it?? I am sure, Writing doesn't make you feel bored..
Wow!!! I got lost in it while reading.. The last para is ultimate. I can easily relate to it because I have been through such a situation once. It was a minor surgery though. But I could't think so deeply as you did.. Amazing work!!
I appreciate your great imagination which is reflected in the lines,
"I look for that thin vein, that hidden secret wire, which connects all the messages and commands generated in this corner to the whole body. I look at it without remorse or regret and in one single moment, I cut it!! I sever it forever, making it impossible for anyone who tries to repair it because I know it takes more than seven minutes to repair that wire."
It's awesome Gypsy... I loved it... It reminded me of one of my favorite movies.. I actually started imagining a beautiful girl in white dress with a yellow flower in her hair and a handsome guy exchanging smiles with each other...
Overall, It was a beautiful read, full of emotions..
The ending is really different and brings a smile on the face of the reader, when he realizes that it was just the author's beautiful imagination which made his eyes wet. In reality, there was no separation. I am a very emotional person, so your composition touched my heart. Keep it up!!
Very nice Poem.. I am glad that finally You have started thinking about your prince. I wish you all the happiness of this world. May you get your prince charming very soon.
Well, even I have joined this site a few days ago. And I have just one item in my profile. I would love it if you review my work and give me a feedback.
This composition of yours is very nice and i think you have come up with a very different concept of having an imaginary lover. This is an excellent way to come out of your loneliness when you have no one to share your thoughts and feelings with. I will advise you to pay a little attention on the grammar part as I came across a few mistakes while going through your work. I am not an expert though. Out of your three composition, I opened this one as I love reading about Love, relationships and feelings. And even the poems I write are mostly related to such topics. Over all, your work is nice. Keep it up and come up with more new compositions.
Very nice Ananya. I am an Indian and I know the place of Rani Lakshmi Bai in our History. This poem reflects the feeling of Patriotism in your heart. I am really impressed. A very few people pick up such topics for their compositions. Keep it up!!
Nice thoughts Neha. I liked the formation of the poem and the idea behind this composition. But you need to pay a little attention on the uses of punctuation marks. Like, in the second line of every para, you have asked a question to the readers. So every second line should end with a question mark. Also, in the first line of the fourth para, there is a grammatical error. It should be " when losses give us pain". Over all its a nice composition. Keep It up!!
This poem is heart touching. I liked the title of the poem and the way it is included in the poem. The concept is nice. The fourth para is really nice. keep it up!!
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