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Hello there, Dave
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest
Thank you for entering our November Quotation Prompt! *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:


Prompt chosen: “Gratitude is the inward feeling of kindness received. Thankfulness is the natural impulse to express that feeling. Thanksgiving is the following of that impulse.”
— Henry Van Dyke

I love that you chose one of the quotes not often used. Giving thanks and Thanksgiving is indeed what November represents to us in the US.

Further Thoughts:

Your poem was spot on with the quote's true meaning. It's about the love of family, sharing, food, hugs and memories built to last a lifetime.

I could picture in my mind and almost smell the scent of roasted turkey and Grammy's dressing as it sits majestically on a large platter at the table surrounded by sides, rolls and smiling faces.

Parting Thoughts:

Nicely done poem with a right amount of rhyme so as to keep a melodious flow without any forced reaching into the sing-song type of rhyme. The return/repeat line as the first line of each cinquaine made the main ingredient of the poem stand out ... being thankful.

Conclusion:

Nicely done and unique choice of quotations offered. *Cornucopia*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*








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Rated: E | (4.5)
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest
Thank You for entering our Quotation Prompt contest in November. *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

I see you chose the quote "Some people are always grumbling because roses have thorns; I am thankful that thorns have roses."
__ Alphonse Karr

Your poem reflects that quotation. *Thumbsup*

Further Thoughts:

I love how you use that quote to show the rose with all its beauty is surrounded by thorns. One part is so sweet, so gentle and is a constant trinket of love in a relationship. Thorns represent the hardships that appear on the road of life. I believe it's how a person characterizes it that makes the rose that much more beautiful thing. If one can get past the difficult pain of the thorns, the prize of the rose is that much more cherished.

Thus, these lines paint the picture handily: "To be given hope, or just a jab,
It is the individual who shall determine."

Parting Thoughts:

I enjoyed the philosophical thought that went into the lines of the poem.

Nice job! *Rose*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*






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Review of I am Thankful  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch




Hello there Simply Me
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest
Thank you for entering our November Quotation Prompt contest. *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

You've chosen this quotation to use: “This is the month of nuts and nutty thoughts — that November whose name sounds so bleak and cheerless — perhaps its harvest of thought is worth more than all the other crops of the year.”
— Henry David Thoreau

It is an interesting choice. I was anxious to read your poem's version of its interpretation. *PaintO*

Further Thoughts:

Indeed, November can be a somewhat bleak month to many, yet a very creative month for the muse. This is especially true since it's NaNo month, and writers are fueling their muse ferociously! *Ha*

Parting Thoughts:


I like how you wove these lines and the November prompt around life, activity and comradery. (more commonly spelled camaraderie) It is the essence of this wonderful site.

Loved this part, "Where half-baked words
are overly spiced,
reviewed
chopped up, or sliced
then dished up
and served


Cleverly used recipe for the boosting of a muse. *DragonflyV*

Conclusion:

Nice job!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*










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Review of Rescue  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello there, Amethyst Angel🌸📝🪽
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest
Thank you for entering the November Quotation Prompt contest! *Bigsmile*

First Impressions:

I was intrigued with the title, "Rescue," and your brief description shows the time-line is in the Victorian Era.

Further Thoughts:


The backdrop is Norway during the month of November. Amelia misses her mother and father during this time of deep solitude where her muse has escaped her and she lost her interest in writing.

You chose the quote: “It is also November. The noons are more laconic and the sunsets sterner and Gibraltar lights make the village foreign. November always seems to me the Norway of the year.” by, Emily Dickinson.

It's a wonderful choice to go along with your poem about a Victorian woman who has shut herself off from the bleak weather of a November day in Norway.

Observation:

"Seeing the [a] boy lying on the icy sidewalk, she rushed to help."

"A boy" would better fit with this line since he is not identified as being known to her. Being a stranger when spotted it should be "a boy."

Parting Thoughts:

Loved this: "My heart spills over with observations of local beauty. See the wavering patterns of lace which the bare maple tree casts upon the moonlit snow?" Beautiful described scene which a reader could picture.

Conclusion:


Good job with the prompt! *TeaO*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*








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Review of November...  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, WriterRick
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I'm also reviewing this item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest
Thank you for entering our November Prompt contest. *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

Your opening paragraph is very captivating. You pull your reader in with your well-chosen descriptive words. Good job, there!

Further Thoughts:

You painted a picture of Amelia and the solitariness of November by the shore. I can see how the vivid palette of colors would awaken her muse. Even if only in her mind's eye, for that is where the muse spins sights and sounds and thoughts into literature.


Observation:


"They, too, felt the allure of November through her words, experiencing the laconic noons, the sterner sunsets, and the foreignness of the village."


Helpful hint, I think ... Perhaps place a period after "her words" and cutting out the repetitiveness of repeating very similar words from the quote. You have established a close relationship in your story to that particular quote. The quote needs only to inspire you. It doesn't have to be repeated again since it was handily established. You've already captured the reader's heart with your own descriptive passages that make the reader very keen of the relationship to the poem.

Otherwise, The story is solid. *Smile*

Parting Thoughts:

You cleverly use picturesque words that have a very lyrical quality to them. It brings beauty to the story that a reader wants to read out loud just to feel the quality of words on the lips as they are being read. *PaintBrush*

Conclusion:

Excellent use of the quotation prompt chosen. *TeaO*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*






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Review of Bus Stop  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, Zehzeh
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest
Thank you for entering our November Quotation contest. *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

Interesting Title and brief description. "Some people are always grumbling because roses have thorns; I am thankful that thorns have roses."
__ Alphonse Karr

I was anxious to see the connection to the quote you chose! *Cool*

Further Thoughts:

Well-constructed word use.

*AsteriskP* Moisture makes diamonds
*AsteriskB* Fingers of frosty wetness
*AsteriskV* Grumbling warnings, unseen.

And my favorite word for the day ... "Beside a cold, mizzled* road" *Ha*

Parting Thoughts:

I loved the whole bus use! Who'd have thought? It was a unique interpretation of the quote chosen.

Conclusion:

The poem flowed smoothly and kept the reader intrigued.

Great ending! *TorchL*

Conclusion:

Good job! *Web1**Web2*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*








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Review of Thorns  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hello there, Kåre Enga in Montana

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Review! *Bigsmile*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest
Thank you for entering our November Quotation Prompt, contest. *Bigsmile*

My First Impressions:

*CheckGr* Crisp
*CheckY* Clean
*CheckP* Humorus!

Further Thoughts:

The poetic flow is smooth with rhythm and rhyme. It made me chuckle.

Parting Thoughts:


You chose the "Some people are always grumbling because roses have thorns; I am thankful that thorns have roses."
__ Alphonse Karr

Excellent quote choice to highlight your poem. Indeed the poem is quirky and gives the reader a full picture of this thorny relationship. *Ha*

Well done! *Rose*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*






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Review of Grandpa  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
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I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our Something Horror Contest in October! *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

Love the brief description about the grandpa telling scary Halloween stories to the grandkids. I could sense the scariness and the fun as children, all 3 boys, sit down to hear spooky tales from their grandfather while Mom and Dad had to leave for the evening to attend something urgent.

Further Thoughts:

Grandpa surely knew how to keep three boys' attention while keeping them company for Halloween eve. The reader could feel the boys' eyes widen while listening to the creepy tales. Nothing like the love and nurturing of a grandparent when the parents are away.

The grandpa had to leave and knew the parents would soon be home. The kids went off to bed.


Observations:

"Whatever caused the loose fitting *Right* [chandelier] saved your sons' lives."

Rules and Prompts followed?

Yes, all parts including the highlighted prompt words. Word count given.

Some punctuation checks are in order and there are grammar issues with tenses.


Parting Thoughts:
There was a twist of events after the grandpa left that could have put the children in mortal danger. Thankfully, some other wist worked to prevent that. *Smirk*

The ending sent chills up my spine. *Ghost* I like that! Mom and dad arrive home in the wee hours faced with a body on the floor. *Shock2*

Conclusion:


Not to give too much away to the reader ... all the answers to mysterious body will be found by reading your entry. *Spider*


Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*









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Rated: E | (4.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, WriterRick
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our Something Horror contest in October! *Bigsmile*

First Impression:

Love the title and brief descriptions. A manor that chooses its guests looks intriguing, so I was ready for the tale to begin.

Further Impressions:


Your opening and keen choice of words works to hold the interest of the reader. The descriptions give a clear vision of the Manor and the spirits that dwell within.

"In an instant, an icy gust extinguished the candles. Amidst the darkness, an undeniable but faint ghostly whisper reached their ears—a child's voice, carrying an otherworldly chill." Chilling, indeed! *Ghost*

Observations:


I love the characters Henry and James, who got together to bring music to the old manor by Henry being devoted to finishing the music piece started by the former occupant who had long since passed away.

What threw me off a little:


The time travel to the present day, 50 years later. There should be some clarity of how Henry is tied to the present day from things learned in the past from the manor. If he was one of the children investigating the house fifty years ago, it can be assumed but really should be tied together in some way so the reader is left with no question about it.


Prompt Followed?

Yes, so far as the Horror/ Scary genre, a Victorian Mansion, and including the prompt words:
Music box
Hairbrush
Dollhouse
Silver tea service
Chandelier


However, this part was missing and made it difficult to see the prompt words.
*Down*

"(Highlight/bold/color whatever, for ease of finding the words in the story.)"

That was part of the prompt to make our job easier and pops out more to any reader to get a true picture of their part in the story. *Drop*

Word count given and within the 2000 word limit. *CheckO*

Parting Thoughts:

This was really a fine haunted manor story. I was entertained and enjoyed the characters working together to bring peace to that ancient house.

Your clever use of descriptive words bring the reader right into the story. It would have been so much better if there was a smoother transition between part 1 and 2.

Conclusion:

Spooky and creepy, yet heart warming all folded into one story. I liked that! *WitchHat*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*






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Rated: E | (4.0)
Angel&Witch




Hello there, WriterRick
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering the Cop Shop Mystery in September. *Bigsmile*


First Impression:



"After rigorous investigation, it became clear that the flickering lights and shadows at the old Price House were not the workings of a ghost but a confluence of human intentions."


This is your opening sentence which actually sounds more like a conclusion, so I had to see what lie ahead and how the story would unfold. *Magnify*

Further Impressions:


You gather several characters to be part of what was causing the mysterious lights coming from the Price House, and continue to breakdown the reasons for their being on the property. Some for benign reasons, some not.

The mystery writer seeking to find what was needed for her next novel.*Books2*

Mr. Beanz was searching for a codicil to Vincentia's will that could affect the Historical Society where he sat as president to see if the Society would be cut-out. *Rpsscissors*

The real estate developer, same codicil, developing reasons. *Shovel*

The jail-bird musician Arlo Guffy, searching for his guitar. *Guitar*



Parting Thoughts and Suggestions:

You followed the rules and solved the mystery in exactly 23 sentences. That is a remarkable feat! *BadgePolice*

Suggestion:
Perhaps addition of descriptions that would flesh out the scenes and characters, more. Use of punctuation to stretch a sentence a bit in this type of contest may be helpful. Also, descriptions that are succinctly used within the scenes as well as the character appearance would help bring the reader into the story rather than being told what's happening. I want to picture myself in the old Price house seeing those characters in action.



Conclusion:

As the first line states, there was no haunting at Price House, but a lot of hunting by folks looking for something. *Web4*


Well done! *Police*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*







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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello there, Joseph
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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering the Cop Shop Mystery contest in September. *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

Hmmm, a house built on a witch's crypt is said to be haunted. *Smirk* You caught my attention! *Laugh*

Further Thoughts:

*PoliceCar* Poor Deputy Fife! However, he held his ground and gathered the courage to enter the house claimed to be haunted. Why does The Ghost and Mr. Chicken, pop into my mind at this moment? *Rolling*

Observations:

“O K Sarah," [Okay]

“Barney, Marcy wouldn’t writing [write or be writing] about the price house, now you just get on over there like you told Sarah.”

"leaving Barney in pitch black darkness.
Barnie's heart is about to pound out of his chest" You changed the spelling of Barney within 2 consecutive lines.

*NoteY* Also, it would be better to break up the paragraphs by hitting "enter" a couple times. It makes it easier to read on WDC without it looking like one wall of words. *Wink*

There are some punctuation issues, and grammatical errors ("witches Crypt. “) [witch's] but you got the job done. You brought the reader into the haunted house*ThumbsUpL*

Parting Thoughts:

Rules were followed. You solved the mystery in exactly 23 sentences.

Deputy Fife finds out what the mystery was with flickering lights at the Price mansion making the ending a fine twist of events! *BadgePolice*

Conclusion:

Well done! *Police*

Until next time--write on!

Regards, WebWitch *Witch*





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Rated: E | (3.5)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, WriterRick
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our August Alternate Reality contest! *Bigsmile*

Initial Impressions:


Wow, The Bard's Alternate Reality. You got my attention. Now I need to find what this contest has to do with it. Good way to hook in the judges! *Ha*

Further Thoughts:


I like this descriptive passage. *Down*


"Crystaline (Crystalline)cities stretch towards the sky, adorned with iridescent flora that glow like stars. Yet, beneath this surface beauty simmers an undercurrent of danger."


Strong words that make me picture crystals sparkling and iridescence glowing, yet with such beauty to the eyes there is an undercurrent of danger. *Scared*

See below:


Observations/Suggestions:


The above description only takes the reader so far. You want to pull your reader into the alternate reality, to experience the crystalline cities as if ambling through it. I as a reader want to have the hair tingling as I approach the danger. The reader wants to see and feel all the emotions that a simple passage above describes but leaves us wanting for more.

"The player's journey is a rollercoaster of emotions and challenges that tests their wit, resilience, and adaptability. In the face of uncertainty, they form unlikely alliances and uncover hidden strengths within themselves. Take us through those challenges, let us feel the player's emotions from what he as well as the reader should experience reading it.

Suggestions:

You have a lovely way with words. They are pleasing to "hear" while reading them. That's a wonderful talent. I only suggest you use that talent to bring your story alive.

The Prompt states: A “Player” is enjoying the challenges in a virtual reality game. And, AI takes over and entraps the player in “its” alternate world. And, Be descriptive as to the character (the player) And any characters met in the “new world.”

That was not done here. There was no character that the reader could relate to on this amazing, yet scary journey, just a narration about.

Parting Thoughts:


As I stated above, you have a fine way with words. You can weave a wonderful story by applying a more active voice and by pulling your reader into the sights and sounds and scents that are experienced in life. A story is a way to make the reader picture themselves right there into the scenarios created.

Conclusion:

Using some of the suggested tools, you will create some fabulous entries for various contests. *Delight* I hope to see more of your entries in The Bard's Hall contests.

Enjoy the WDC 23rd birthday festivities! *Party*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*












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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello there, Joseph
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering the August Sci-fi alternate reality contest. *Bigsmile*

Initial Observations:

You captured my attention introducing Becca as a true game enthusiast trying to capture the highest score. I knew this would be an interesting ride through an alternate reality. *GameBall*

Further Observations:

You did a good job following the guidelines shown in the prompt.

Described the scenes so the reader is brought into this world alongside the player? *BoxCheckB*

Be descriptive as to the character (the player) in the “new world?” *BoxCheckR*

The reader is taken into the world of the player and "sees" the scenes described.


Observations:


I enjoyed the descriptions of the styles of buildings and surroundings. An observation I have to share is that there is a little bit of repetitiveness in a couple descriptions.

Example:

"The landscapes within Virtual Quest are a testament to the game's advanced graphics. Lush, sprawling forests, towering mountain ranges, cascading waterfalls, and bustling futuristic cityscapes are just a few examples of the diverse environments you'll encounter.
Each one is painstakingly designed to transport you to a different realm entirely. As you explore, you may experience the warmth of a gentle breeze, the chill of a snowstorm, or the refreshing mist of a tropical rainforest."


Previous Paragraph:

"The architecture inside the game world varies from medieval castles with intricate stone carvings to futuristic skyscrapers with sleek, reflective surfaces. Every building and structure is meticulously designed, making you feel like you've stepped into different time periods and civilizations."


Either one or the other paragraph could be removed since the reader gets the vision from one descriptive paragraph. Perhaps take one descriptive paragraph and bring a particular level action Becca wades through in the rain forest or mountains so the reader is more involved with the game by showing the action experienced.


*ButtonForward* Some of the spacing format needs a little tweak. *Smile*



Parting Thoughts:


Will the player get back to reality or be stuck in the alternate reality forever?

You gave us the answer to that. I loved that you ended with a moral to the story that Becca has decided to spend more time in reality rather than chasing a game. There's more to life, indeed! *Crown*

Conclusion:

*Web1**Web2* Good job with the prompt. Suggestions as listed above.

Enjoy the festivities of WDC's 23rd Birthday! *Party*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*





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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello there, AmyJo- only 2 steps behind -
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our July Dialogue Only Contest! *Bigsmile*

First Impressions:

The title "Cold Feet" brings on the tension. The reader wonders, will they or won't they walk down the aisle?

Further Thoughts:

The dialogue gets right to the point with a shocking opening line: "What do you mean, it's over?" *Laugh* Of course no one knows at this point just how far those cold feet will keep.

Upon further reading the reader finds out what kind of person this poor groom-to-be got engaged to. He says it's love, she doesn't agree.

Parting Thoughts:

I felt sad and elated for the groom at the same time, because it's better to find out now then the nuptials.

Fine use of the dialogue prompt. Although, I thought it was kind of abrupt. There was room to introduce the characters. And yet, this marriage was doomed and it's better not to drag that out. *Laugh*

Conclusion:

I loved the ending! Making her pay for the coffee ... priceless.

P.S. I'm glad he got his grandmother's diamond engagement ring back!


Well done! *Owl1*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*





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Review of Jack and Claire  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello there, Lorelei
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our JUly Dialogue Only contest. *Bigsmile*

First Impressions:

Touchy subject is about to unfold from what I gleaned from the brief description. *Laugh*

Further Thoughts:

What a pickle an in-law can get a couple into with a simple overriding of the wedding invitation etiquette.

I have to agree with the bride in theory, if her relatives were told not to bring kids, then his relatives should be treated equally.

*FlagBl* That's where it ends. The travel with an infant, is difficult enough. At least they went through the trouble and expense to celebrate the couple's wedding day.

*PaintY* You made it clear for the reader through their dialogue what was truly important to them. I mean what were her relatives going to do when they saw a baby, there? Make a scene? She could have put out that fire with a simple "I didn't know they were bringing a baby. Everybody got the same restriction written on their invitations."

I guess, like her future husband, I could see a reasonable way out. *Ha*


Parting Thoughts:


The dialogue reached escalation points of no return. How sad to watch the woman he intended to marry turn into a Bridezilla! *Laugh*

Oh, no! Not the fine china!!! *Shock2*

Yup, doomed! *Vamp*


Conclusion:

She is certainly a piece of work. So happy with the ending! *TorchR*

Well done! *Sword2L*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*





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Review of Emilia and Sepet  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello there, J.R. PETE
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing this item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering July's Dialogue Only contest. *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

When I looked at the genres and saw "supernatural" and "paranormal," I knew I was going to enjoy this ride. *ThumbsUpGreen*

Further Thoughts:

The future bride and groom discuss their upcoming nuptials. The bride seems to be having a case of cold feet. The groom, ever the gentleman tries to relieve her doubts and stress.

Parting Thoughts:

Nowhere does it actually come out and mention it, but I caught a bit of a picture of her future husband in my mind's eye, with pointed fangs and a need to feed his appetite at night. *Vamp* Of course that could just be my very active imagination at work.

Conclusion:


It looks like he was quite convincing. The wedding went on without a hitch! Or, should I say with a hitch? *Think* *Laugh*

There may need to be a sequel to this story. What will his bride discover after the wedding? Inquiring minds want to know.*Shock*

Dialogue well done! *Vignette4*

Until next time--write on!

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Initial Impressions:

Jen and Ben are having a bit of a disagreement about where the happy couple should reside following their wedding. I have to say, I don't blame Jen for feeling a bit awkward about living with the Mom and sisters after marriage.

Newlyweds need time to themselves as they take on the reins of life together.

Further Thoughts:

I love how they talked things out about Jen's concerns for privacy and Ben's concerns for his mother who needs support financially.

Parting Thoughts:

I can see both sides of the conflict. I liked the way they both came up with a workable solution. It's when only one person in a relationship can't bend at all that the marriage is probably doomed if they decided to through with it. *RingsGold*


Conclusion:


Well done on the dialogue and the conflict control so that the couple may live happily ever after. *Bigsmile*

Until next time--write on!

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Initial Thoughts:


You set out the prompt and WC at the top of the item. Thank you for showing the prompt and highlighting the Bard's Hall contest. I like that. *Angelic*

Further Thoughts:

The dialogue between the couple was good. It captured my interest, let me actually picture them at that time and understand why there was a pre-nuptial cold-feet moment.


Observation:

"She just want [wants]to help, Mia. What's the harm in that?"


Parting Thoughts:


I love how the couple resolved their huge issues. I also like they agreed to separate married life from in-laws' interference. Sending the mom to another continent could be helpful for them. *Laugh*

Good use of the dialogue prompt. It was an amusing read and wove in some heavy reality in many couples' marriages. *Ha*


Conclusion:

Did you use small font to tease my new lenses? *Laugh*
I can read it without reading glasses, but decided to zoom it a bit for my sanity. *Smirk2*

I sure hope this couple works out the in-law woes. For sure, busy body in-laws can put a strain on a marriage.

Good job with the entry! *Web3*

Until next time--write on!

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Initial Thoughts:


"A different kind of wedding story"
Catchy brief description. I was very curious and anxious to read the story and watch how it all unfolds.

Further Thoughts:

Indeed, it was not a disappointment. I love the humor and the "I dare you" type of dialogue. This couple were meant for each other. *Laugh*

Parting Thoughts:

I don't know how Rick ever thought he could push his mother's wedding dress upon the bride, Christine, especially since she already spent money purchasing her own choice of wedding dress. Usually that's done some time before the wedding. *Ha*

Christine's got spunk. She'll probably end up getting her money's worth during the marriage. *Rolling*

Love that Rick promised to "obey" in the marriage vows. That dude got duped just fine. *Smirk*

Conclusion:

This was a fun read and very good use of the prompt of dialogue between the future bride and groom having an argument the day before the wedding, and making the decision of whether they go through with the wedding the next day. *Jester*


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


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Initial Thoughts:

Your brief description lets the reader know that the story will be about love and deep sadness. I have said my good byes to a loved one in hospice.

This is a very emotional story of a Robert's love for his dying brother Jacky, in hospice.


Further Thoughts:

I loved the opening and closing lyrics. The reader is introduced to the song trapped in Jacky's brain. He would hum it over and over again. It brings part of that being stuck-within one's brain to the point of it being maddening. But the reader understood Jacky's suffering more through this addition of the lyrics.

I admired Robert for continuing to visit Jacky even though his brother struggled to be coherent. Robert is a very brave person. He wished he could get his brother the help he needed to end his misery and suffering.

I loved that there was a coherent moment from Jacky. He reached out to Robert with his thoughts and hopes. Although Robert couldn't do what was requested due to the family's objections, he did appreciate hearing his brother making sense when he spoke.


Parting Thoughts:

Robert's love for his brother would give him the strength to research options that would help Jacky rest in peace ... no matter how much the family would object.


Conclusion:



You did a great job turning the Quotation Prompt into both a heartwarming and heart wrenching story that touches the reader profoundly.


Until next time--write on!

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Initial Thoughts:

Interesting pull for the reader. Indeed, are we really in control of our destiny? I know I wanted to find out what was doing the controlling, so I was eager to read on! *Bigsmile*


Further Thoughts:

The story unfolds paragraph by paragraph. The readers could feel Lilia's loneliness, almost despair over the situation she was apparently thrust into by powers she could not explain. Then, she knew the dreams would be her personal nightmares.

The quotation was well interpreted and woven into the story to yield a creepy story that is not too impossible to believe in this day and age.

AI runs amok. It will enslave the populous whereby thoughts, plans, dreams and destinies are controlled.

Observation:

"She even believed in her idea she maybe be in a sort of time warp, [when where] time discontinues for a while."


Parting Thoughts:

I felt exhausted for poor Lilia. What a traumatic event in time that she is forced to live. Might as well say she found herself trapped inside, with no possible way out ... of the Matrix. *Scared*


Conclusion:


Good job with the prompt! *Web3*

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Review of A Million Dreams  
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Rated: E | (4.5)


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Initial Thoughts:

A flight to Mars. Sounds like it would be a fun read. *Bigsmile*

Further Thoughts:

I guess that dream was not to be. Seriously, losing such a great opportunity for a possible $20 part?!!! How sad. It sucks the air right out of the reader's lungs. *Frown*

I like the realism of the voices in command with the instructions ordering the override to abort the mission. Good effects for added sci-fi presentation.


Observation:

"We will not for [fire] up the Merlin," I replied."


Parting Thoughts:

This was a relatively short story, but it did give the reader a clear picture of what was going on. Sadly, we readers will not be on this mission to get the Mars' landing experience with this crew.


Conclusion:


Good use of the quotation. Fast paced and vivid imagery!


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Initial Thoughts:

The brief description shows the reader that something magical may be happening in the story.

Further Thoughts:

Your story about a Cat Witch and the Biscuitville dogs, would be quite an appealing story for children. It's a unique interpretation of the quotation prompt. *Bigsmile*

"He couldn't sleep because a million dreams were keeping him awake. Quake would Dream of a land where dogs were inferior to humans" Oh, what a nightmare for a dog to dream -- a million times! The reader is feeling the dogs' painful existence of no relaxing sleep, but rather of dreaming of life where dogs are unloved and treated less that what they deserve. *Dog1*


Parting Thoughts:

It's a story of good Vs evil, dogs vs cats. Witches vs dogs? *Frown* Not all witches are dog haters. *Ha*

I like how the dogs got together and decided enough was enough. They sought their freedom from that wretched curse and got the cat-witch to reverse it. *Cat*


Conclusion:


Unique use of the quotation prompt -- a fine children's story!


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


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Initial Thoughts:

I love how the brief description pulled me into the story. A romance story with an unexpected ending, indeed!

Further Thoughts:

Adele and Will are a lovely couple getting past the awkwardness of meeting at a shared cafe table. There was shy, cynical attitude that could be noticed by the reader about Adele. She was not one to jump right into a romance. The fact that she's in her mid-forties shows her careful waiting for the person she would allow herself to fall in love with.

Will is a charming gentleman with an interest in getting to know Adele better. He was quite persuasive in getting her to converse while they partook of their meal. It wasn't long before Adele was able to relax around him and actually enjoy his company. And so the story begins. They would meet again and date and eventually marry.


Parting Thoughts:

It's a shocker that grabs the reader by the shoulders and shakes her to the core. *Shock2* Even upon learning the true age difference, my thoughts went toward the usual horror show characters that are over three hundred years old. *Laugh*

Happy to know this one had a different twist. *Wink*

The ending was bittersweet. *Cry* I felt sad for Will, but true love did enter Adele's life.


Conclusion:


Great use of the quotation prompt. *Tea*


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Hello there PureSciFiPlus
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Initial Thoughts:

"The Dream Recorder" Interesting title that got my attention. Personally I cringe at the idea of someone being able to record our dreams which may contain some of our most private thoughts. *Scared* That however, is the reason I was anxious to read this story to find out how this invention would work in the lab with real patients wanting remember or forget certain dreams.

Further Thoughts:

All of my nightmares over such an invention came true as I read the story. Wow, a Dream Recorder actually stealing others dreams? Things can get out of control when there's interference with the natural process of the human mind.

Observations:

"Walter kept following around Jason wherever he went too." A better sentence structure would be, Following Jason around.

“I’m not looking at porn. At not while I’m at work.” Not while I'm at work.

"Some pretested for Jason, but most weren’t." protested


Parting Thoughts:

This was quite an interesting read. It had some scary stuff in a world where AI is gaining ground. Do we really want our thoughts and dreams categorized?


Conclusion:


It's scary,yes! But, it's a good interpretation of the quotation prompt. *Film*


Until next time--write on!

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