You've covered everything well, and attaching it to the story you're writing is a great idea.
I saw in your lesson 2 assignment a place where 'she dreamed of being crushed within his embrace' might have worked even though it would be early in the story for that phrase.
I agree with your reasoning for 'his body ached for her touch.' In his life, Silverbolt wouldn't have much opportunity for relationships.
Virile isn't used often, but in a story where there are older characters, it would be appropriate.
Eye contact can reflect all sorts of emotions, and very often tell a suitor whether the answer is yes or no.
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