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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi James A. Osteen, Jr.,


I’m honored to read and review Yellow Mountain Rose for the Power Reviewers Puddle Jumping April Weekend Raid.

Title:Your title drew me in.

Description: You've enticed the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:Your poem reminds me of one of my grandma's friends in Tennessee. I can remember visiting Hasseltine and Rassy in their cabin growing up. Hasseltine always had a beautiful garden. They never had much. I honestly never understood how they survived in that little two room cabin on the side of the mountain. I think about her white hair, wrinkles and the sparkle in her eyes when we'd come to call.

Your poem flows well and opened the floodgates to the past.

Thumbs up:You've brought back a simpler time, and I enjoyed revisiting the precious memories.

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Happy WDC Anniversary!

Amay

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Review of Wee (Wee) Stairs  
Review by Amay
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi Maryann ,


I’m honored to read and review Wee (wee) Stairs for the Power Reviewers Puddle Jumping April Weekend Raid.

Title:Your title captured my imagination (especially since we're working on 'training' my mom again)

Description:I love limericks, so when I see one I try to stop in and read it.

Contents:Training puppies... oh my, the stories I'm sure we all could tell. I had one pup that loved books. She ate the bindings off of just about all of my cookbooks. Of course, it seemed like a whole year in trying to get her potty trained. Then just like us, when she got old, she began to be a leaky bitch again (pun intended).

Thumbs up:Cute pups!

Conventions:I didn't see any errors.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Happy WDC Anniversary!

Amay

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Review of My mistake  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Aidan P. Sullivan,


I’m honored to read and review My Mistake for the Power Reviewers Puddle Jumping April Weekend Raid.

Title:I must admit, your title made me curious enough to read.

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:I think we all hide behind our masks, being what we think others need us to be. There does come a time when removing that mask, and being our true selves become necessary to our own sanity.

I remember growing up... Bobbie's girl, the granddaughter, all roles played by following what I thought it meant to be each one. It takes time and experience to figure out who I really was.

Thumbs up:The first two lines show the insecurity... written perfectly to set up your poem.

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors grammatically.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Happy WDC Anniversary!

Amay

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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Darlin~Writer,


I’m honored to read and review Timothy Tallow Hugh for the Power Reviewers Puddle Jumping April Weekend Raid.

Title:Interesting title.

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:Poor Jessica Hugh, lost her shoe in the land of Seuss. What a vivid imaginative world to work in.

Your poem is creative and light hearted. It flows well and tells the story in a Seuss like way. I think tackling the master would be very challenging, indeed!

Conventions: I didn't notice any grammatical errors. There were places where the meter seemed a bit off.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Happy WDC Anniversary!

Amay

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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi KayLee,


I’m honored to read and review Mirror, Mirror on the Wall for the Power Reviewers Puddle Jumping April Weekend Raid.

Title:Love the reference to Maleficent

Description: Great tease to get your reader to open and come in to read your poem.

Contents:It struck me as I was reading how much pressure there is on girls and guys to have "the look". The media has created a world where the impossible is considered beautiful and the normal body is considered lacking. Even mirrors in store dressing rooms have been altered to make women look "better" in the store's clothing (imagine the shock when you get home!).

You've given that reality a good kick in the pants. Normal sized women (size 12-14)are considered plus sized in the world of fashion. No wonder girls have such a hard time accepting their bodies.

Thumbs up:In a creative way you've opened up and accepted being who you are, what's in the mirror is just an image, a reflection of what really is.

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Happy WDC Anniversary!

Amay

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Review of Complicated  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi AfricanbutAmerican,


I’m honored to read and review Complicated for the Power Reviewers Puddle Jumping April Weekend Raid.

Title:Your title reminds me of life in general... Complicated. Sad thing is, it gets more complicated as I get older. (Or maybe, that's just the way it's supposed to be).

Description: I love your description. Simple, but, oh so very true.

Contents:You've captured a moment in time. Youth, and friendship that sounded like it might have been a little bit more if things were left to progress.

I love the beach, the peace and calm I feel there are evident in your writing. It really feels like things are getting sorted out. I know there has to be more to go with this vignette. Maybe one day you'll decide to revisit and see what these two 'friends' are up to.

Thumbs up:

Conventions:In writing dialog, each persons' quotes start a new paragraph.

EX. You wrote "I guess I'm not a true friend, then." She wiped her eyes and got up. She started walking towards the beach houses, carrying her blanket with her. "Wait!" I called out, catching up with her. She kept walking. "I said, wait." I took her shoulders and spun her around. Her face was stained with tears. "C-could you ever forgive me?" she asked. I let go of her shoulders. "I don't know," I replied.

"I guess I'm not a true friend then." She wiped her eyes....

"Wait!" I called out, catching up with her.....

"Could you forgive me?" she asked.

I let go of her shoulders. "I don't know," I replied.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Happy WDC Anniversary!

Amay

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Review of Who Am I?  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Ann Marie Patson,


I’m honored to read and review Who am I? for the Power Reviewers Puddle Jumping April Weekend Raid.

Title:This is the second piece I've read this weekend entitled Who am I? Interesting, I normally don't run across the same title in two different ports on the same day.

Description: You've enticed the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:I hope you entered this piece in the veteran's contest. I'm sure it would do well.

I love poetry that honors our veteran's and those who continue to serve. Without their efforts, it would all be for naught. Your piece flows well and leaves the reader feeling very honored to be a Navy mom.

Thumbs up:For honoring those who serve... past, present and future.

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

Amay

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Review of Heart  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi Chaos,


I’m honored to read and review Heart for the Power Reviewers Puddle Jumping April Weekend Raid.

Title:Your title works well with your poem.

Description:A long time ago, someone gave me this advice. Your description is like a tease. Its job is to entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work. That's a pretty important job, just as important as what you've taken your time to write. So always, treat your description with just as much care and respect as you do your poetry. Make sure every word is spelled correctly, your punctuation shines. That will show someone looking over your port that you care about what you've done. That will make them want to read your words.

Contents:Opening up and making one's self vulnerable in love is a complex thing to do. There are so many ways to get hurt, but the reality is that love, true love will outshine them all.

I feel like your poem captures that hopeful feeling, that sense of excitement and realization that you've really put yourself out there and it's not to bad.

Thumbs up:
"Days of cold
are at an end now (period)
my dear heart (comma)
I wont defend now" (won't)

Conventions: typo- won't
There are a couple of places where a comma would reinforce the natural pause. Thankfully, ...
Your... should be you're

So near--- I wondered if so dear would be a better word choice.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Happy WDC Anniversary!

Amay

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Review of Who Am I?  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi SamScrewtape,


I’m honored to read and review "Who am I? for the Power Reviewers Puddle Jumping April Weekend Raid.

Title:Your title pulled me in to read

Description: You've enticed the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work. Who hasn't tried and failed? The challenge is to get back up and try again.

Contents:I love how you used the question format in the opening line of each stanza. Some of your questions end in the second line though. But it is an interesting challenge that you've set up for yourself in writing this piece.

Thumbs up:My favorite stanza-- I care, but I can't help you. I can't change you, But I care. I think that is the mantra for every good teacher. I can open the door, present the material. The ultimate choice is the student's, will they take it, make it theirs, and change their reality?

Conventions:You might want to go back and look at where you have question marks, and make sure they are where the question ends. The first stanza has too many question marks.

"Who am I?
When I wonder at night?>> phrase, doesn't need a ?
When no one is around?>> phrase, doesn't need a ?
Who am I?"

Same thing in the third stanza.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Happy WDC Anniversary!

Amay

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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Mac,


I’m honored to read and review Gone but Not Forgotten for the Power Reviewers Puddle Jumping April Weekend Raid.

Title:Your title is what pulled me in to read.

Description: You've enticed the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:First and foremost, I'm sorry for your loss. Your grandmother must have been a special lady. I think this was written for me to read today. I was contemplating how life moves on. How much my father has missed, even though I keep him close in my heart and mind.

You've created a stream of consciousness poem. Your thoughts flowed from your heart and you wrote them as such. I hope you found peace in what you've written. I also hope, you've kept your memories of the good times alive in your heart. Don't hesitate to talk to your grandmother, I'm sure she's still watching over you.

Thumbs up:"Even though you are gone,

You will never be forgotten." So very, very true!

Conventions:No errors noted. Since some time has passed, maybe it would be a good time to go back and read your words and work on the flow.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Happy WDC Anniversary!

Amay

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Review of My Story  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi LittleJohn,


I’m honored to read and review My Story for the Power Reviewers Puddle Jumping April Weekend Raid.

Title:My Story... makes me curious.

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:Some time has passed since you wrote this piece. I bet if you read it now, the memories would come flooding back. Go back and read this sentence by sentence out loud. Do a little editing, add some details that you might have skipped over. Tell how scary it was. I can't imagine having the principal driving the bus, but holy cow, bless him for taking care of all of you.

I always lived too close to the school to ride the bus. Within 2 miles, you had to make your own arrangements. The neighborhood I would have had to walk through to get home wasn't the best (a XXX theater was one block over from the house).

Your piece has brought back memories of days gone by. Memories of accidents, like yours, play a part in our lives and help form good habits to live by.

Thumbs up:Thumbs up for your principal. Thumbs up for your neighbor taking you to school. I must say thumbs down for Mr. Phillips. (Hope it wasn't a relative of mine!).

Conventions:
"One stormy friday morning we were getting ready for school." >> comma after stormy and capitalize Friday

"When it started raining." is a phrase, add it to the next sentence. When it started raining we decided to stay inside and wait for the bus to come. Just before it came, I ran over to....


Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Happy WDC Anniversary!

Amay

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Review of Vampirised  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Holmberg,


I’m honored to read and review Vampirised for the Power Reviewers Puddle Jumping April Weekend Raid.

Title:The title you've created, drew me in to read your poem.

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:While I was reading your poem, my mind floated back to high school days reading Brams Stoker. Then later enjoying Ann Rice. I've been amazed at how vampires have changed in the last (cough, cough, mumbling a very disturbing number into my hand) few years. Very nicely done, cold and creepy, dark and lost all rolled into one.

Thumbs up:I love how you used the short lines and rhyme. The flow is marvelous!

Conventions:I did not notice any errors in convention.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Happy WDC Anniversary!

Amay

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Review of Cat Nap  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Gail S,


I’m honored to read and review Cat Nap for the Power Reviewers Puddle Jumping April Weekend Raid.

Title:I love the title! It's why I chose to pop in and read this piece.

Description:You've enticed the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:First, let me say that I'm not a cat person but I've had neighbors with cats and I loved them all dearly (Kind of like grandkids, you love them to pieces and spoil them rotten, but they can go home with their parents). If that wasn't enough, they give me hives so I have to be careful where the cat sits and where I don't sit (Hives on the bum is not a wonderful experience!)

What I love about cats is their regal air. They know they're the alpha in charge and we humans are their minions. I love the way their tail twitches when they're asleep. I could have been a much better cat person, if they didn't make me itch. Oh well!

Insomnia is such a pain, watching someone peacefully sleeping when you're struggling to get to sleep is so annoying. (Take your cat out, put in my husband- he could sleep through anything). I totally get what your poem is saying!

Thumbs up:I love the beginning lines of your poem. You've painted a picture so beautifully with your choice of words.

Conventions:No errors noted, but the flow at the end is a little choppy for me.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Happy WDC Anniversary!

Amay

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Review of Eagle  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi ShiShad,


I’m honored to read and review for the Power Reviewers Puddle Jumping April Weekend Raid.

Title:Your title fits beautifully with your photograph.

Description: Since this is a photo and you've already added the thumbnail so that it can be seen from your portfolio page,I don't think you need any further description.

Contents:Wow! What an amazing photograph. It takes me back to the days when my uncle and his family was stationed in Adak, Alaska. Several things popped into my mind- all of the glorious photos of bald eagles that he brought back, the coffee embargo, and how he traveled all the way across country with a full eagle decal on his back window of his car and here in his home state- the highway patrol made him scrape it off because it was hindering his view out the rear view mirror.

Darrell had amazing close ups of the eagles since they would perch right outside their office. They wouldn't even move when the sailors would come and go. I guess they knew it was their island, and sooner or later the sailors would leave.

Thumbs up:Thank you for sharing this glorious photo with those of us here on WDC, and bringing back such fond memories.

Conventions:Since it is a photo... no issues with conventions.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Happy WDC Anniversary!

Amay

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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Santiago Ryan,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'The Little Yellow Ball'

Title:Your title is very appropriate for your poem.

Description: You've written a wonderful description, it entices the reader to come in and take a look.

Contents:While I was reading your poem and rereading your poem, my mind wondered back to my teacher days. This is a poem every child could relate to. I'm sure it would be a great way to open many discussions on how to handle playground situations.

Thumbs up:I really enjoyed reading your poem.
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Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Someday  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Kitt,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Someday'

Title:Your title is a nice fit for your poem.

Description: Now that's an interesting description, but now that I've read the short version... I'd like to read the long version.

Contents:Someday, a day when men can walk this planet in peace and harmony. Someday, when honor and respect inspire behavior and greed and avarice are seen as detrimental. Someday!

Thumbs up:I hope that Someday will be coming soon!

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors in conventions.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Fairy Tales  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Meg,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Fairy Tales'

Title:I think your title captures the innocence of your poem.

Description: Life's lessons well learned it seems.

Contents:You've created a poem that captures the innocence of youth, and inspires those that read it to emulate what you've learned at your mother's knee.

Very well written, your poem flows well. I really enjoyed it.

Thumbs up:I love how you honor your mother with the "You're the one... portion. It sounds like my own mother.

Conventions:I know there are two camps when it comes to poetry- the punctuate as in prose, or it doesn't really matter. I usually bow to the whims of the poet.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Spirit Watcher  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Soulful Sadness,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Spirit Watcher'

Title:I love the title. It fits with your poem beautifully.

Description: Your description made me curious to see what was going to unfold. That is what a good description in supposed to do.

Contents:Your poem is soulful, a sense of humbleness, complete and total immersion in love.

Thumbs up:Your love burns with a heat uncontained...

Conventions:The only suggestion I would make would be the repetition of the word bare/ bared. When I read it,they just seemed too close together. Maybe the second could be 'exposed' or something like that.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Ravi,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Turn Every Situation to Your Favor.'

Title:Interesting title, it piqued my interest.

Description: Your description is pretty much a reiteration of your title. Could you punch it up? Make it more of an enticement for readers to come in and take a peek?

Contents:Your article reads as a formula piece. It is interesting, but it gives me pause. To read it without knowing more, well it left me to my own perceptions.

The perception that I'm feeling is that this system seems pretty fake. It feels like observation is used, to determine actions that will be beneficial to you.

Observation can lead interesting points of enlightenment. How we perceive those observations and our own life experiences create the bias of our own interpretations.

If you make your decisions based upon doing what would be beneficial for just you, you're over looking the whole. Our own actions need to reflect what is for the best of all. Sometimes, what is best for just us, is self centered and selfish.

This is probably not what you've intended when you wrote this piece. It does tend to over simplify the process of making decisions, looking at the goal of making a favorable outcome for one person, bending like the willow in the wind.

Thumbs up:Delve further, dig deeper there are more avenues to explore.

Conventions:No errors noted.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Am I a Writer?  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Magdalena,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Am I a Writer?'

Title:I love your title. It's a question I ask myself quite often, particularly after a harsh review.

Description: Personally, I find writing an obsession, in a good way. It's a whole lot better for you than many things you could obsess over (as I'm sitting in my sewing room, looking at all the toy cars my husband has obsessed over!

Contents:First and foremost... Yes you are a writer, and author, a poet! I love the whimsical feel of your poem. It flows with and easy, pleasing rhythm and meter. It's totally enjoyable!

Thumbs up:Great piece of introspection.

Conventions:I didn't notice any technical errors.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Thoughts  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Gracie,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Thoughts.'

Title:Thoughts....Wow,that could lead in so many different directions.

Description: Interesting description, put with your title, it does make me want to read further. But, I'm and old lower elementary teacher.

Contents:I started reading your piece and wondered why this was written in prose form. It seems to lend itself to a more poetic flow, so I thought free verse, then I thought stream of consciousness. Thank you for waking up my brain this morning.

Charlemagne and Alcuin. Now you're probably wondering why those two popped into my head. In the history of writing lessons, Charlemagne wanted to be able to communicate with all the tribes in his domain. Since each had their own version of spelling. Punctuation was inconsistent. Paper or velum was so expensive, there weren't any margins, fill up the page as best you could type of situation. It made written communication difficult. As one of his teachers, Alcuin was charged with making it happen (more or less). My kids would complain about spelling and punctuation lessons... I'd just reply "Take it up with Charlemagne and Alcuin."

Thumbs up:I've always wondered why English has to be so hard. Punctuation rules seem to just skim the surface of my brain and not remain there. Commas will always be my downfall! I have reviewers say I use them too much, and others say I don't use them enough. I need my own personal comma cop!

Conventions:I really enjoyed reading your piece. It made memories of teaching little ones about the history behind the process of writing. It also reminded me of the importance of the stream of consciousness form that I used so much in my own classroom. I didn't notice any glaring errors.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Dear Mommy  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Derek Tan,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Dear Mommy'.

Title:I love the title! Your title fits perfectly with your poem.

Description: I don't know any way to make your description better. You've enticed the readership to come in and take a peek, to see how you really felt about your mother.

Contents:Your poem brought back a lot of memories, not of my mom but of my dad. He smoked a lot when I was little, spent a lot of time in the hospital for long periods of time with pleurisy, pneumonia, etc. I remember him missing my birthday party and being so mad that he wasn't there that I couldn't enjoy the moment.

It brought back memories of when my boys were small and their papa passed. Poor Mike wanted to go to that place and wake up Papa and bring him home.

I think you've captured moments that so many people can relate to. You've captured that innocence, and the longing to have what was lost back. And you've made me cry, on my first review of the morning. Oh my!

Thumbs up:You've called forth a lot of emotions and that's what really good poetry should do!

Conventions:I didn't notice anything that would pull me out of the moment.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi ZukoRocks30,

I’m honored to read and review 'Christmas Letter 2012- Humble Service' for the Power Reviewers Movies and Music Themed November Raid.

Title:Looks like I'm a year behind. *Wink*

Description: Your description pulled me in. My son, did a series of blogs for his church last summer on traditional hymns... where they came from, Biblical references and implications.

Contents:I've often pondered Mary and her journey in life. The song, "Mary, Did You Know?" inspired one of my Christmas stories several years ago. I love how you've focused on her humility.

Thumbs up:Thank you for sharing, even if I am a year late, I appreciate your message.

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Come find me  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi SWPoet,

I’m honored to read and review 'Come Find Me' for the Power Reviewers Movies and Music Themed November Raid.

Title:Your title works well with your lyrics

Description: Glad you had something handy, but it has little to do with your lyrics.

Contents:You've captured a story lyrically. The cycle of life, mother nature in concert. It's very interesting and it makes me curious about the tune.

Thumbs up:I love the symbiotic relationship between the forces of nature. Pretty cool set up...

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of First drum set  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi ,

I’m honored to read and review for the Power Reviewers Movies and Music Themed November Raid.

Title:When I read the title I immediately thought of two of my younger cousins that had drum sets (in their teens).

Description: Very nice description. It snapped me right out of beginning practice lessons to ut oh, a two year old? It made me want to read.

Contents:You brought back memories, of listening to Martin and Dennis practice (on real drums), but more than that of my own two boys that would empty my cabinet of pots and pans and with wooden spoons and serenade me while I cooked dinner or baked. It brought a smile to my face.

I could see a teacher being able to use this poem on a lesson about onomatopoeia, and children being able to grasp the concept to add to their own writing repertoire.

The poem flows well and the use of repetition is something that children will truly enjoy.

Thumbs up:You've created a poem for a moment in time that was special to you, but in its message you've created a poem that will bring back memories for many mothers... that didn't think about ear plugs!

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors, and I love how you've formatted the poem.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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