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Review of How I Became Sum1  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Sum1,

Happy Third WDC Anniversary!(again, again)

I’m honored to read and review 'How I Became Sum1'

Title:Sum 1 lol, Silver?

Description: Very nicely described.

Contents:I remember reading this when you first wrote it. Silver? hummmm, I didn't realize that's what it was for... he he he.

I think my idea is better, enough said.

Thumbs up:I don't remember how it did in the contest. Remind me, please.

Conventions: No errors noted.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Letter To GOD  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Sum1,

Happy Third WDC Anniversary! (again)

I’m honored to read and review 'Letter to God'

Title:Simple and to the point.

Description: You've succinctly given a reader a hint of what is to come.

Contents:We've talked about this piece before. I know some people 'have giving you down the road' about it. Personally, knowing you as I do, I see it as a plea from the heart. You've hit on the major problems of society. Things that humans are going to have to fix. Godly leadership, intervention certainly would be appreciated as our children start to take over.

Thumbs up: for seeing the problem for what it really is, for realizing that the ideas for fixing it have to come from somewhere, for being a wonderful human being.


Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Wu Lang,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'The Greatest Person in the World'

Title: Your title and description pulled me into your port to read this poem.

Description: You've enticed the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work. Nicely done.

Contents:You never know a parents love until you're a parent yourself. Your parents gave you all they could, but the most important thing is that you realize the reasons and worth of their 'gifts'.

Thumbs up:Well done!


Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi AmpsM,

Happy first WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Lucid Nightmare Package'

Title:Interesting title.

Description: You've enticed the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work. Nicely done.

Contents:WOW! That about sums it up.

Thumbs up:Suspense filled! I hope it did well in the contest.

Conventions:Go back through, you have a lot of smaller case I, that should be capitalized. You also are missing a lot of apostrophes in your contractions.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Boxed In  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Palaver,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Boxed In'

Title:Your title drew me in. I know that boxed in feeling quite well at times.

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents: I like the flow of your poem, but I kind of got confused as I read it. My mind was very scattered as I tried to put the lines together. It's probably just me!

Conventions:No errors noted

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Siras,

Happy first WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review "The Periodic Table of the Elements'

Title: I saw that this was a campfire, and I was curious as to what kind of twists and turns your 'story' would bring.

Description: You've enticed the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work, although I don't think it's really a campfire but more of an essay.

Contents:You've created a pretty generic formula essay. Opening paragraph- what you're trying to prove, the next three are your reasons, and a summary paragraph. You know your material, but it is a report, not really a story like you'd tell around a campfire.

Your presentation, and sources in your bibliography- (Looks like APA style)are appropriate. I'd make a few suggestions noted below.

I had one professor that literally would count the spaces, commas and all of that stuff on the bibliography and deduct points. I'd go blind trying to keep track of all of that. I still use it though when doing research.


Conventions:
typo second paragraph> When recting
typo second paragraph> isnt enough (apostrophe in isn't)

redundant > That is another reason why alkine metals react so violently with water. > You've already stated this in the first sentence of the paragraph.
In fact, you've done that with all three of your reason paragraphs.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Viksta,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'I am Nothing, if not Worthy'

Title:Your title intrigued me, so I decided to open it up and read.

Description: Your description disturbed me. I'm not going to lie frankly, abuse of any child of any kind sends my blood boiling.

Contents:What a powerful poem of strength and perseverance. Marvelous job in capturing the pain and frustration.

Thumbs up:Your first verse is so very powerful!

Conventions: Just a couple of suggestions:

learnt>> learned

"My back I chose to turn on you
And I grew stronger with every day" I'd suggest I chose to turn my back on you...

The last line is a little on the gruesome side...

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of White Beaches  
Review by Amay
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Jan,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'White Beaches'

Title:Your title brings me back to vacations at Destin, FL. Lovely, pristine white beaches.

Description: Your description is what pulled me into your port to read. So well done, that's what a description is supposed to do... entice the readership at large.

Contents:While I was reading your sentences, that truly were very descriptive, I wondered if the flow would be more poetic if you used phrases instead. It was a simple thought that I tried with a few lines just to get a feel for what I was thinking. It worked well, but I have to say, your words made me want to feel the sand between my toes, the waves rolling over my feet, the wind blowing in my hair once again.

Thumbs up: You've constructed a very enticing piece that would make anyone want to go back to the beach!

Conventions: No glaring errors noted.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'The Joker (Returned)'

Title: How delightful!

Description: Interesting, needs a little spark of that Joker.

Contents: What a wonderful poem! It flows with the greatest ease, and tells a story to boot. Sensational!

Thumbs up: 'When I remembered my true calling' Finding your calling the first time is wonderful.... remembering your calling later, even better!

Conventions: No errors noted!

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of "Steps"  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Nancy B,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Steps'

Title: What a great title for your story!

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:I hope you're entry did well in the flash fiction. I know that I really enjoyed writing for the Daily Flash, and Writer's Cramp when I first joined WDC. It is a great way to meet new people and get those creative juices flowing.

Your story touched my heart. My son just had a horrible crash, several months ago now. As a parent, going back into the emergency room to pick him up was a nightmare. I can't imagine what it would be like to know my child couldn't walk again. Heartbreaking! But, You turned the story around and it had an uplifting ending.

Twists and unexpected endings are what wins in the flash contests!

Thumbs up:Excellent read!


Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi M Krysti Velasco,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Red Spider Lillies'

Title:I love lilies, so this was a natural draw. I think lily is the flower though.

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work. Try to make the Description as correct as possible. Using capital letters where they belong might help draw someone in to read your work.

Contents:You've created a campfire, but people have to be invited to participate. If you're not familiar with several people on WDC, an interactive story might be a better choice.

Thumbs up: I've never tried a campfire here on WDC. Congratulations on trying something new and exciting.

Conventions: I think you have a good premise, you do need break this into several paragraphs. There are a lot of capital letters missing that start sentences. You have different people talking all in the same paragraph.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Photograph  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Victoria Mills,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Photograph'.

Title: Your title is perfect for your piece. I couldn't imagine anything else coming close to fitting.

Description: You've made me curious, what exactly is 'pre-arts award writing' mean? I'm so glad I looked to see.

Contents: You've captured in so few words the essence of what a great photograph does. It's purpose. I'm sitting here looking up at the photographs of my family. Memories, love, all empowering and supportive just to have around.

Thumbs up: I so get why my best friend always wants to take pictures... thank you for the insight.

Conventions: No errors noted. Lovely work!

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Drop by drop  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi SophieMoon,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Drop by Drop'

Title: Your title fits your piece perfectly, as it comes from your first stanza.

Description: You've enticed the readership, because everyone does have feelings like these from time to time.

Contents:You've captured the essence of depression and being trapped in a cycle. It really calls to me as I am stuck in a situation that I cannot walk away from.

Thumbs up:I love the last stanza, it gives your poem a timeless feel. I totally understand the feeling and impact you're reaching for.

Conventions:No errors noted.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review

Title:The title would draw a person into reading.

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents: You have such a great start, a great beginning. It needs a little editing, but nothing that major. From this point, you really need to plan out your plot. Create the scenery and characters that will fascinate your readers. I've read novels that didn't have beginnings that captured my imagination like this short piece has...

Thumbs up:Awesome start... now continue!

Conventions: typo- cloths- should be clothes

Break the following sentence into two- I could feel the storm getting stronger, the wind ripping at my cloths (clothes).
I could see the trees swaying so harder (hard) they look (looked) as if they are (were) about to topple (at) any second.

not believing what I see>> (was seeing)

She smiles (smiled) grimly

I saw lightning flash>> lightning flashed,

You have a sentence with two conjunctions> you could break this into two sentences as well...

I tried to get to her, but the wind was too strong,(Period here, drop the and) and I felt a burning, white hot sensation before everything turned black.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of as the days pass  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi KaciLou1998,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'As the Days Pass'

Title:

Description: This is where people decided if they even want to bother opening up a piece. You've enticed the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work and offer their advice. Nicely done.

Contents:From your piece, one would think you've been through a hard time with someone that was supposedly special. It leads the reader to think that you were used, and have somehow lost a part of yourself in the hurt of the situation and time.

Thumbs up: As an introspective piece, you've reached a questioning stage. Now what am I to do?

Conventions: No errors noted.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Molly Rasche,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Special Delivery'

Title:Perfect title!

Description: Punch up your description. All of your poems start with 'This is a poem,.." Pull from your creativity. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work. Make them curious!

Contents: How sweet to write a poem announcing something so special to the father of your baby. Very endearing. I wish you all the best!

Thumbs up:
"Inside my body grows a little child
For me to love and to hold
And hope they’re not wild" I hope your child is happy, healthy and just as creative as its mother!

Conventions:No glaring errors.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Escaping the pain  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Falling Rain,

Happy first WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Escaping the Pain'

Title: Your title fits wonderfully with your poem.

Description: It's a little awkward, but it imparts what you're feeling, and poetry is all about feeling... I would fix the small i for a capital since it is the pronoun I.

Contents:I know everyone has times like the ones you are relating in your poem. Many people should be able to tap into that emotional upheaval.

Thumbs up:'It's time for a change.' Oh how true it is, sometimes we just need that swift kick in the rear to get over the pity party.

Conventions:It is your poem, you have to do what you want, but I would change the layout of the last two lines having each phrase as a line by itself.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of PK in LA  
Review by Amay
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi Blargh, Interesting name, btw

Happy Third WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'PK in LA'

Title: Ok, I must be dyslexic... I first glanced, I thought it was Pink in LA... DUH on me!

Description: Being a teenager sucks, more now than ever before.

Contents: And? I've found a great beginning. I hope you expound on it. I can easily see this turning into a novel. Go For IT!

Thumbs up: Had to laugh... teenaged boys and junky rooms! Had two of them! *Smile*

Conventions:No glaring errors.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Why????  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Jaimini,

Happy Second WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Why??'

Title:The question of choice of most children. I love to see what people have in mind when they tackle the all encompassing question... Why?

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents: I had difficulties following your article. There seemed to be a disconnect between the narrator and getting the point across. There was a choppiness to the flow of the passage that made it difficult to translate to my mind.

Conventions:There are some grammar issues, and punctuation issues. Since it hasn't touched since you originally posted it, I'm not sure if you're interested in editing it. If you'd like to I'd be willing to help.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of The Mirror  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Solembum,

Happy Second WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'The Mirror'

Title:Your title perfectly fits your poem

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work. You've got something worth bragging about... brag a little!

Contents:I love your freestyle poem. It ambles along its path, flowing gently with its tale. Very creative, and I could easily see a story written from the same ideas.

Thumbs up: For a beautifully constructed freestyle poem.

Conventions:No glaring errors noted.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of our love  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Shelby-daughter of Lady Gypsy,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Our Love'

Title:Personally, I think if it's special enough to write about, it's special enough to use capital letters appropriately.

Description: Many readers will look at your description to decide whether or not they want to read your piece. It's important for your description to be as correct as possible. If you don't care enough about grammar, using capitals correctly, then why should they bother. Your description would be an easy fix- His love and mine, I love you sweetie! Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents: A love poem

Conventions:There are some easy fixes,and I'm sure if you read your poem aloud word for word, you'd catch just about all of them. We just don't take the time to go back and edit ourselves like we should. I'm guilty too.
You have to in your poem when it should be too,
The kind that---should have an 's' on the end The kind that's too tempting to resist.
for see, no need for a hyphen
unchanging through time, seems to contradict the jist of your poem.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Blue Russian  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tree,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Blue Russian'

Title:Interesting title, but I wasn't thinking cats when I came upon it.

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:I love haikus. The syllable count and form are correct, but two things that stuck out as I was reading... silk wool > silk is from a silkworm, wool is from sheep. You have soft in the first and second lines. It just needs a little tweaking.

Haikus usually don't use similes, but rely on adverbial phrases in the second line.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Boz,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Wall of Berlin- wall of shame'

Title: It's one of those days, like when Elvis died, you know where you were. I remember watching it fall.

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents: You have the question at the top of your piece, but in the middle it states that 'This quiz has no questions yet.' I've never made a quiz, but I'm pretty sure you're supposed to have a question to answer, and there isn't a place to answer.

Anyway here's what I think -9 November 1989 the beginnings of freer travel...then the official demolition 13 June 1990

I'm sorry, I have no idea how to make a quiz, but there might be a video around on the site if you're interested in finding out.


Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Locked Out  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Lorrielee Kelley,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Locked Out'

Title:I chose to read your piece based upon its title. I've been locked out before. Pain in the rear! So I could relate.

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:It seems like something is missing. You go from beautiful day to trying to get in 'again'... What were you trying to get in? the car? the house? Then all the sudden, you're locked out of your child's life? I'm really confused.

Is is a metaphor? Did I overlook something? I'm just confused.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Lights  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi M. J. Bourne,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Lights'

Title: I decided to read your poem because of the title. I was curious as to how you were going to use 'light' in your poem.

Description: Works well with your poem.

Contents: You've encapsulated a point in life where the reality of what was comes to terms with what could be. Interesting point of view. Very well written. Your poem flows delicately off the tongue with its powerful message.


Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

*Candleb*HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *Candlev*


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