Well done. Well written, with good rhyming and layout.
Emotional and descriptive. Your words portray the
comfort and the helping hand of a friend.
True friendship also means telling the truth even if
it hurts.
I get the feeling that some pride here is being shown.
I think this request a review space is a great opportunity to publicise one's writing.
I have used it frequently and find it gives people more space. It's sometimes hard to choose a piece to read out of so many authors.
I usually seek them out here or out of the various NLS
which point out the most outstanding pieces.
Continue the great work and thank you once again.
Take care AuntyNelly
Beautiful! Are you the next of kin to William Shakespeare? LOL No, seriously I found it really
amazing. You have a natural flair for writing sonnets.
Please continue doing so.
Perhaps you could also ask Will for a review! LOL
Well done, I really enjoyed reading this piece.
Very emotional, romantic and good rhyming.
Good Job!
This was a very interesting topic. Well written and
explained fully, thank you.
I often wondered why I had so many people reading my pieces but not rating them.
Sometimes I thought that they wanted to give a low
rating so they remained anonymous.
But even that isn't the answer.
I enjoyed reading this piece.
Well done. It was sad and emotional though.
Full of regrets. I think one should not have any regrets for the past, because at the moment it's what you wanted to do.
The nostalgia of having a close family and losing out
on all the special occasions was portrayed fully in
your words.
Take care and keep writing, it does wonders for the mind!
Beautiful!
Well written with good rhyming and display.
Sad and emotion portrayed with intensity.
It's true, one must always learn to let go before
starting a new relationship.
Well done! I enjoyed reading this piece.
You chose quite a difficult topic to discuss but
you portrayed it very well.
Very meaningful words and emotions used.
I agree with you we are all part of the HUMAN RACE.
Well written and good rhyming and display.
Your words are descriptive and portray the wonder of the night, with its silence and fantasy.
Welcome creature of the night from another creature of the night!
Nice topic! Well written and good rhyming.
Very descriptive, your words express a slight nostalgia
for those days!
It's a pity it's no longer like the good old days.
It just gets a little more dangerous nowadays and people are more wary of picking hitchhikers up!
I remember a holiday in Ireland during the 80's and
the people there picked you up frome everywhere.
They even helped you by telling you to write on a piece
of cardboard where you were heading so that the people
knew which direction you were heading before they
stopped to pick you up.
The Irish really surprised me with their hospitality
and generosity!
Well done!
Congratulations for winning the first prize in the
Picky Poetry Contest. Well done.
Well written, good rhyming and descriptive.
The emotions portrayed were very much alive. A touch of reminiscence and nostalgia could be read along the lines.
It could almost be a ghost whispering!
Well done! Well written with good rhyming and good
display.
The emotion and ode to eternal love is portrayed
with intensity and passion.
You expressed romance and tenderness in your words.
I hope you succeed in your intent to capture a yearning heart!
Well done. Well written and good display.
The words you used were descriptive and flowed well.
The emotions of this love just found and then immediately lost,leaves you feeling desperate.
You are left with the memory which will remain within you forever!
I found a few typos which I will list here for you:
Shawn instead of Shaun or Sean.
Hope we can (could)meet again after today.
As I felt embarassed talking about it to my parents.
And that (hat) was why
made us feel (felt)
One of her smiles grown familiar with (of)
Sent (send) shivers down my spine.
That she liked (like) me as well.
Why? I wonder, would God want to take.
But what I wanted to say was.
I noticed then (than)
I could feel the life draining out of her. You don't need to repeat hand as you've already
mentioned it.
Short but to the point and descriptive.
Your emotions were well portrayed.
Well written and good outlay.
I understand that this was your daughter's wedding day!
Children never really grow up for the parents.
At 47 my mum still covers me with attention and considers my brother and I still babies! I don't mind though. She lets us get on with our lives but shows us
she's always there for us.
Well done.
AuntyNelly
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Shawn instead of Shaun or Sean.
Hope we can (could)meet again after today.
As I felt embarassed talking about it to my parents.
And that (hat) was why
made us feel (felt)
One of her smiles grown familiar with (of)
Sent (send) shivers down my spine.
That she liked (like) me as well.
Why? I wonder, would God want to take.
But what I wanted to say was.
I noticed then (than)
I could feel the life draining out of her. You don't need to repeat hand as you've already