I feel your grief. The hurt is expressed emotionally.You are disappointed with your wife but wait for the sake of your children. Here I am. I have given you a review. Nevertheless you can't expect all your items to be reviewed because this is a vast web site and some times you need luck to have all your writing to be reviewed and people expect the same from you.
It's a nice poem. Giving reasons for being with her. You show through your poem that you care for her more than anything else in the world. Poet is even ready to go to hell to be with her. The rating went from 4.5 to 4 because there were some spelling mistakes which could be avoided. but I like it very much. Good luck with your writing.
Very moving poem. I n a very few words you describe all your feelings about the person in your mind. it's A SIMPLE DICTION AND WORDS ARE HIGHLY ECONOMICAL.The length of the lines indicate your varying feelings and the poem is full of inference. Especially the last line gives out a very positive feeling and radiates happiness in your heart.
Very interesting. I have browsed your other work also and it shows your deep attachment and interest in fishing. The article tells us many things that I don't know.I am not sure what fly fishing is but it sure shows your deep attachment to fishing. I will read your other article and send you a review.
Here I found you again.I like your poem very much and it's rhyming scheme.I am not an expert of poems but I enjoyed your poem thoroughly. You describe how it is to be young and to enjoy all the blessings of youth but that is temporary and we all know that.Your responsibilities wait for you though sometimes they are depressive.
I think it is good though you say that you are not sure about it. You have conveyed that though the wolf is a hunter his only purpose of his killing is survival.He too have enemies and he should take precautions to be protected from his enemies. H is both the hunter and hunted. Am I right?
How sad I felt like crying when I read it. The anticipation of the child is vividly described here. The sudden change of things reminds us we all are vulnerable in the hands of destiny. You can't bring back your brother to life but you feel guilty when you watch T.V every time. The writer's anger and frustration clearly portrays in the story. Good piece of work. Congratulations.
How courageous you are! Your achievements have made me ashamed myself. I easily give up things and you are a very great example of endurance and perseverance. I am glad to read at the end of your writing that u are trying to each your goals and gong to publish a book. I sincerely wish you all the best in your life and may God will bless u with more chances in life.
It is scary even to read about it. Where I live we don't have tornadoes except thunder storms.but I have seen so many tornadoes on T.V and they are frightening. seeing is one thing and watching is another thing. You have narratd the story making us see the incident as we are there.
It is good poem for a start. I too can enjoy poems but not too experienced to give advice on how to write them. I enjoyed your poem.Keep on writing. When you gain experience in writing you automatically know how to do changes to your text to produce more effect. Good luck with your writing.
Yes. It's very funny and enjoyable to observe the behavior of the drunk, when sober who are decent and well-mannered. I have seen so many respectable people who make themselves fools after taking few drinks making those who have come with them embarrassed. They are greatly humiliated by their unintelligent behavior and sad to say whether you are a professor or a labor you behave in the same manner once drunk. So beware!
Actually I was ashamed to read your poem because that is exactly we will do in the future. There 's nobody to take the responsibility of the futile attempts humans do to tame the nature.You say that u are armed with the most sophisticated gadgets and modern technology but nothing can protect you from the angry mother of nature as long as you live. So why retaliate her without coming to terms with her ways?
I haven't tasted the dish but it seems to be very easy after reading it. I enjoyed our narrative as well as the recipe you produced. Very simple, interesting and educational piece of writing. You have revealed some of your intimate moments in the past and you take us to your world where we feel home sick together with you. Good luck and wish you get more reviews like this.
You have expressed your inner feelings and shown us how vulnerable you are. Only a mother can understand how happy one is to see one's children. So your reunion with your son brings back memories all of us keep deep down in our hearts.Your resolutions make us understand how courageous u are and how you cannot be beaten by anything until you reach your goal.
What a beautiful poem! I enjoyed it very much. The poetess says how lifelong love affects us We are told how Ed feels after his wife passed away last year.'Ed presses his nose to the window' The nostalgic feelings of the past are crowded in the mind of Ed making him to act like a ghost who has lost interest in anything.He had come to the point that he doesnot care any more.
".People had rung the doorbell.
He remains glued to her chair.
Telephone rings but no one answers.".
Yet how you try to bring solace to the man dying from loneliness!
"Darling, it's warm on the other side."
Thank you for sharing your poem with us.
What a beautiful poem! I have no words to say because I too can relate to it personally since I too am a teacher.The form the writer has used is highly appropriate to describe a meeting between a teacher and one of his insignificant, average past pupil.Most of the time we remember only the bright and the weak students.The ones like 'willy' are erased from our memories.When we are proud of the achievements of our genius students other less significant ones are faded from our minds, but when we meet them in later life it gives a pang in our hearts to think that we could have done better for them. Here the writer is relieved because he had at least listened to the woes of the desolate child and he can leave with a guilty free conciseness.
In the midst of the harsh jungle she bravely faces the challenges of life. You show us stamina is something each individual has. It doesn't matter you are a male or a female. The whole village depends on one brave woman and it tickles me because I am a woman too.
How awesome!You seem to be a very courageous person indeed. A one in million I say. The determination, endurance,strong will can be seen throughout your essay. It's wisdom you are sharing us with because I think we all feel the way you felt at least once in our lives.So I salute you brave soldier!
Yes. We have to look at life that way.Good. but the catch is can we do it all the time?I too suffer from depression from time to time due to hormonal imbalance. I take medication but when it becomes a bother I stop it. I never give up and engage in various activities. but it is a constant inner struggle and needs lot of endurance and courage.
The love we feel for some one is not determined by outside factors.I respective of that person's whereabouts and background and social behavior we deeply love. The sadness caused by the separation is strongly felt. but we see that you have let it go.
Yes, very true indeed! How frustrated we are when we are let down by others whom we trust. but that is life. It is not smooth and cosy always with its bumps and thumps we push our way forward. Your grief is very pathetic. You ask 'why" but you don't get any answers.Your reflection on what you did to help your friends and how they treated you when you needed help is nicely compared but to me the last line seemed too long when compared with the length of the other lines.
This is a very common occurrence everywhere. Adults try to take advantage of innocent and helpless girls.The repulsion that act caused is clearly expressed through your writing.You feel helpless because they tend to take the adult 's side due to many reasons like saving his family from divorce or to protect him from being disgraced. but nobody think about the victim and how she copes with the situation. It is sad and disgusting.
Nobody knows what happens to us when we die though here are various theories to it. The narrator gives his experience of death and compared to breeze that took him to where he thinks is heaven.
A lot of effort has gone into your work. You have described tree in its every perspective. What the tree feels about it is smoothlydescribes and I salute to your patient 'ode' to tree.
When I began to read your story I thought that you were going to describe how you looked after your father. but it turned out to be completely different from what I thought and your creativity is clearly visible there and it helps a newbie like me to learn how to twist a plot. The first part describes exactly how I felt when I cared for my father-in- law who died 4 months ago. How I hated it sometimes because with my job I had very little free time and I had to sacrifice all of it for him.But now when he is gone I regret my thoughts and I feel that I should have more enduring and your story is an eye opener for all the people who feel that they are burdened with things that they don't like.
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