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Review of Rundown  
Review by CREEK
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
The description of the story attrcted me to read it. I was curious to know what happened next. While reading. I anticipated several versions of my own of your story, but you haven't stopped at any of those endings. You were able to build suspense in each line, gradually revealing what is happening next.Though the word count was a mere 299, you have produced a story with a surprise ending without ruining the smooth flow of the writing. It was artistically done and I enjoyed it thougrougly. Good luck with your writing.
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Review by CREEK
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
It's scary. Thinking of attending one's own funeral. How would you feel if you have to face that situation? That's what drew me to read it. I was curious to read how the story was developed and ended.

The writer make it more exciting by adding another character who faces the same problem with the protagonist, her husband. It's an unusual coincidence to happen at the same place, same time.
But I am sad to say that I couldn't grasp the ending properly. It ruined my pleasure of reading this extraordinary and beautiful story. Anyway, thanks for letting me read this wonderful tale. Wish you all the best in future.


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Review of Lost Girl  
Review by CREEK
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a part of your shower from SAJ Grroup.


Wow! It's like reading a short story by a famous author. It's really fascinating. Your description of actions and word usage is excellent. I am highly impressed. I read your profile and it says you are trying to be a writer. To me, actually , you are a good writer. giving precise details of the actions and cleverly building scene by scene without any unnecessary details which we all do most of the time. To the end it was full of suspense and I read it at one breath as I was curious to find out what makes the girl so confident and whether she is a thief or not.I like the story very much and congratulations with your writing. I think you have come to the right place to brush up your writing.

Unfortunately, I was unable to find any errors in your writing, though I read it like a hawk.*BigSmile*


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Review of Ringing  
Review by CREEK
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I am giving this for the SAJ Group as a part of your shower.

I browsed your port and the title drew me to read it. You took me to my old days where I spent with my grand mother. She told me stories and we did so many things together. All those fond and sad memories were awakened by your poem. Even when I type this review I can visualize how you and your grandma used to sit together on that bench, pouring your hearts out to each other, drawing consolation from each other. This poem is very emotional and and I felt it through my core. Thank you very much for letting me read it.


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Review of I Can't Tell You  
Review by CREEK
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
What loving words! The deep love for one's lover is avidly depicted in the lines.The examples the poet take are infinite.His loving, caring and heart felt words make us feel his deep attachment for his spouse.I love the poem very much. It's very rhythmic and musical.

but I prefer if you can change the word 'smile' in the line

"How many smiles have I seen you smile?".such as "How many smiles have I seen in you". It's just a suggestion.


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Review by CREEK
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
How pathetic. I have listened to news and read about the situation iN Zimbabwe but you have painted a very accurate picture of the affairs in your country. It is very unusual to read that people live without so many things that we take for granted.The very basic things such as flour, milk, meat, gas, electricity etc.... are dwindling and the writer depicts a very pathetic picture of the situation in her country.

The article is very interesting though it is lengthy and I have read it without boredom. I think that we will be able to enjoy more, if the narrator has given a hint of her age and the family .

There are some words and phrases which are not clear and I think they are the specific terms used in her country. I like the article and enjoyed a lot. Happy writing.


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Review by CREEK
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)

Oh, my, what a frightening experience! It was really scary to read your poem. As you were narrating real events, you were successful to convince the reader your obstacles on that day.

The poem begins giving the reader a bad omen. ""Snow's on the way," the email said." So, we know that some bad thing is going to happen.

but then, the poet presents a resolution. "I will leave early – not get caught. "

but as soon as the car is driven out of the garage, a new obstacle appears.

"into the snow – a white barrage."

The optimism dies and the poet regrets his decision.
"hung my head and almost cried"

Poem describes the determination of the narrator. How he continues his journey though he regrets his decision. It was fearful to read how the snow builds up on the way and how slow he is going. The words create vivid images.
"snow built up in towering piles."
"Cars were abandoned in the road"
"All was quiet. The house was dark."

I visualize how the narrator reaches his home tired, scared yet relieved to see the sweet home again.

I like this poem very much as free verse is my favorite. It's like reading a story. The poem is precise, interesting and makes the reader bound to it while reading. Thank you for letting me read it.

I am giving this as a part of the shower from SAJ Group. If my review does not express your views on the poem, please feel free to ignore them.


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Review by CREEK
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)

I am giving this review on behalf of Showering Acts of Joy Group.Diana is a famous character of mine and I wanted to read more about her.She was and still is a very famous woman in my country, a Commonwealth country and we all still carry her cherished memories.

Your article has given me a glimpse of her childhood. I like the phrase "She had a pretty cream bedroom on the first floor nursery, enjoyed cattle, open fields, silver birch, pine and yew trees"... as it has created a fairy tale picture before my eyes. You make us feel sympethetic towords her by hinting her early bouts of anxiety as a result of her parents' devorce. It clarifies her late behaviour and the reason for her little flirtings if I take the liberty to say so.

Anyhow, There are some lines which are not clear to me and I would like to pinpoint them if you don't mind.but if you have purposely put them there r if I am wrong, please ignore my remarks.
" What good was a poor girl good for this? " - meaning is not clear

"One, was she wanted to be a dancer, " - is a comma needed after 'one' ? 'one was that she wanted to be a dancer' or 'one was, she wanted to be a dancer' - I don't know. I may be wrong there.

Other than that tour story is interesting. Good luck with your writing.

P.S.
I am hoping to go through your portfolio later.


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Review of Hide & Seek  
Review by CREEK
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: ASR | (3.5)

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Dear MM:volcanic hobbit,

This is a part of your shower and here I have given my opinions for your story and if they don't agree with your ideas please feel free to ignore them.

The topic drew me to your story.I wanted to read what you have described. You have written it for a given prompt and I assume that the word limit was given too.I read it in one breath and it was comfortable to read. The story begins with a children's game and they have found a vampire. Then the writer develops an argument on the existence of vampires through the discussion of children. The writer shows how the mind of a child works. They fill their minds with what they hear from their adults and assume that they are always true.The development of the story is good and it ends giving the reader an idea what happens when a child is preoccupied with assumptions in the society.

I would like to draw your attention to grammar in the story. I don't know whether you have purposely used it as you are assuming a character of a child.but I felt uncomfortable to read "We was playing in the barn" ,"cos it was dirty and nasty". "Tanya said we was to leave it" ,"said why didn’t it drink its own blood" . If you have read your story a second time you would have able to correct those lines.

Any way good luck with your writing and I enjoyed the story.


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Review by CREEK
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)

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Dear Fran,

I am giving you this review as a part of your shower. The ideas I express here does not tally with what you wrote, you have every right to reject.

Your unparalleled performances have drawn me to your port and I am impressed with your work.I selected this poem for reviewing as it has received only one review so far.

Form - I like the uniformity of the lines and repeatition of first two lines in each verse. It felt like a ballad when read aloud.

Theme - The words "all rise" and do not criticize" suggest the theme. The poem tells us how hard it is to achieve something and it should be appreciated instead of criticizing.I assume that you have meant the Olympic Games when you say that"games are coming" but it can be taken as a general statement in which every game is a mixture of hard work, ambition, dedication and commitment.

The poem delivers a message too.In today's world where everything is taken as face value, the true good qualities which are hidden behind a rough face or a body is ignored and they are not given recognition. People tend to look for just physical beauty in a person and when doing that they miss the real beauty. So, that's why the poet says "Do not criticize their appearances."

I think that the poet is able to look deep into the lives of athletes due to her or his own experiences and the attempt has been succesful as it's message is very clear to the reader. Hats off to your brave life and strong determination. Good luck.


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Review of Spring is here...  
Review by CREEK
In affiliation with RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)

I imagined the fragrance flowers, gushing rivers and the warm sun when I read your poem. I felt the warmth of the sun too. I t brought me beautiful feelings of a happy spring which brings forth life to all beings on this planet.
After a long and difficult period of winter people are anxious to go out and and enjoy;to get their bodies moving in the sun; to release the tension builds up during the sad winter days. Your lines
" Ice is no more,
So step out and dance." summarizes that feeling in every human being who experience winter.

The words are very musical and creates a very gay mood in the reader. Actually you have brought the Spring with your cleverly crafted words. Thank you very much for allowing me to read your poem. I enjoyed it immensely.



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Review by CREEK
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Oh, it's very heart warming! The reunion of a strayed daughter and the frustrated parents. You have set the background nicely to narrate this emotional story. I felt that I was reading one of my own experiences, though I have no daughters. The description of the river and the woods heightens the beauty of your writing. The beautiful similes, metaphors and imagery used here are very appropriate.

Though offended at first for neglecting him for a lover, father forgives the daughter when he sees the deer with the fawn. I like the symbolism there.Though I can't exactly express how I feel your story I enjoyed it immensely It's a beautiful piece of prose..


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Review by CREEK
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like the beginning of the poem.When we wake up in the morning we are not yet fully awake and it takes some time to adjust to one's surroundings. You have explained that feeling nicely.

"The morning was cold and dark,
And I sleepy-eyed when I woke up;
Yes, everything looked dark and grey,
To me, who had cobwebs in her eye."

The everlasting sun, bright and warm brings warmth to our hearts and minds and without doubt breaks all the cobwebs in our minds. It's nice to read and comment a fellow Sri Lankan in this site. Keep up writing.


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Review by CREEK
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I take my hats off to your bravery. Even after facing with all those problems you are sane enough to withstand them and pick up life where you have left it. Many others would find it difficult to rebuild and reorganize life if they faced problems similar to yours. What matters is determination and courage and I think you have both more than enough. I am awed by your sincerity and honesty and I wish you good luck with your future life.


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Review of Blackberries  
Review by CREEK
In affiliation with RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Joy, I am amazed at your craftsmanship of this poem!.Using a very difficult form you are able to create such a tender, and heart felt poem reminiscing on your past. I like both the experience and the way you have turned it into a beautiful poem. Nice to read a poem of yours after a long time. I think you are the "Joy" I met at PUNCTUATION CLASS. Congratulations. It was really heart warming.


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Review of Loving You.  
Review by CREEK
In affiliation with RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Thoughts of a contented wife for her dear and loving husband. What else do you need? If you are blessed with such a husband definitely you too are a blessed one. The majority of marriages suffer as many men are ignorant of the mentality of their wives and dominate them until the end making the woman living in utter hell. Your poem is filled with love and affection you have for him and I enjoyed the poem to the fullest.Thank u for sharing it with us.


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Review of Port Mayaca  
Review by CREEK
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I was drawn to the beautiful scenery and serenity of it. Really, it is a place to relieve one's problems and heart aches. The photo highlights the theme in the poem. When you have your problems and don't want anyone to know about it the best thing to do is to find solitude and that is what the poet does. The poet describes his or her pain

to let tears flow and emotions be freed
while no one is watching.
with the above lines. IT MAKES ME FEEL MELANCHOLY AND SAD TO READ THE POEM AND i LIKE IT VERY MUCH.
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Review by CREEK
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
How horrifying. The unfaithful husband tries to kill the wife. A story narrated by thousand and more people but this one is different from all of them because of the twist in it.Until the last moment the reader is made to feel that Mary's soul is speaking.But when it came to the last paragraph, we see the horrifying truth that the woman is not dead but made numb with a medicine. An innocent woman dies and the reader is unable to do something about it and the story is over keeping the reader frustrated and angry at the same time for being unable to catch the murderer and help the innocent victim. A nicely crafted story. The plot is well developed and I like it very much.
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Review of Clowns  
Review by CREEK
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
It is shattering for any child to hear that their parents are going to be divorced no matter what the problem is. I think it do them great harm psychologically and physiologically. It leaves an reversible scar in their minds forever. So a father who understands that fact tries to explain the situation to his lonely daughter. From the lines

I'd bring you what I thought you always wanted
but I know she wouldn't think so
or think as much of me even if I did.

we can gather that the parents are in different opinions even on the raising of their own daughter and they don't understand that they both are harming their own daughter. A very appropriate thought to reflex on.
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Review by CREEK
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is a random review and I was curious to read it because of the title of the story. It is a very nice literary piece full of imagery and descriptive words. I like the flow of the story and organisation of paragraphs. Not a single word is used uselessly. Every word counts to the story. It's very nice and honestly I enjoyed it a lot. Congratulations for your writing.
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Review of Chocolate Kisses  
Review by CREEK
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)

The poem reminded me of my time spent with my grandmother. She too used to bring mr sweete when she visited my mother. (not chocolates of course. other sweets.) I like these lines very much. They bring me an image of little children kissing their grandmother and smear chocolate on her face.

She laughs as I finally escape
Hands me a napkin for my face
Little brown kisses had found their way
Chocolate smiles of creamy delights
On their innocent faces

Creating strong emotions in the reader's heart, the poet is able to make our childhoods come alive again.
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Review of At the Diner  
Review by CREEK
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
How sarcastic! Though they are the people who should maintain law and order, they take it easy and enjoy. The society is full of people who could not identify the responsibilities and duties of one's job. Whether it is a law enforcing officer, or a doctor or a teacher, we all have our share for the betterment of mankind. but majority is not concerned and that is the result of a disrupted society. The poem discusses a very wide theme with a very few words. Highly effective poem. Congratulations.


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Review by CREEK
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
What a nice story! It is usual for couples to quarrel over trivial things.but this is really entertaining. With just 698 words you were able to create a beautiful and hilarious short story showing your craftsman ship of a writer.I know how difficult to write a short story after writing my only one short story. I received so many comments showing places where to correct I was scared to begin another one. It was not the fault of those who sent me reviews but mine as I had just narrated an incident and had thought it was a short story. So with ease you have narrated a simple tale of two loving but stubborn husband and wife and finally it was resolved bringing a smile to lips of reader. To be honest, I detest lengthy stories but yours was comfortable enough to read at one breath without that extra effort and finally the reader is rewarded with the satisfaction of reading some thing which remains in his mind to be shared with his or her spouse. I have no negative things to say so I will give you hundred marks.
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Review of Going Home  
Review by CREEK
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Your poem reminded me the poem'stopping by woods in a winter evening' by Robert Frost. I experienced the same gloomy and melancholy feeling when I read yours. Your mention of a travel which ends one day makes me ponder about the destiny of mankind. Whatever we do, we have to die one day, and that is the eternal truth.
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Review by CREEK
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Though this is the second part it can be enjoyed seperately The words flow smoothly like water and I enjoyed the story of the kid brother. The author leads us from one event to another very cleverly and he ends the story but letting room for another episode without harming the content in it. I enjoyed it very much and waiting to read another episode.


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