A macabre little tale, this one! What a variety of stories I've seen in "Invalid Item" ~ it proves that writers here can certainly pack a punch into their stories, each little micro-bite a delicious morsel!
Very nice work here - you know 'what it takes' to write micro fiction.
While it appears that many people can write within the word limit, it takes a special kind of talent to create a well rounded story.
Well done!
... this has a somewhat sad end, well worth a look...
This was a perfect case of ‘love at first sight.’ He waited for the inamorata to detrain, as he mustered up courage to follow her and strike up a conversation when opportunity showed. Finally, she rose, with some trouble, and gripped her crutch ...
Well there are a few of us who could learn something from your style - to be able to create convincing and sincere worlds like yours, leaving the dull and pragmatic' behind.
If only we could live in your world, where you fashion marvels of existence on planes wished and hoped for!
A well written short story, I've made a note of the contest.
Very engaging - all the way through. A glimpse, a snapshot of someone's life or a scene from somewhere - you have captured the very essence of good, short story writing.
A satirical essay on people and events in the Bible.
by: KURT
Excerpt: Preamble
...the most significant scroll was destroyed through human error, before it was deciphered. This scroll contained the answer to the meaning of life, along with a cure for cancer and AIDS. They left it unguarded in a museum, and some redneck walked in and mistook it for a roll of toilet paper.
What we do affects others along the time line very far into the future.
by: scifib
Comments
This is a very interesting concept and I'm particularly interested in the Karmic influences at present
Never the less, as interesting as your monologue/opinion are, they could be more so - if some definition between paragraphs were evident.
Of particular note in current times:
Excerpt:
What if you made a pact with yourself that starting tomorrow you would never let an unkind word leave your lips? If everthing you spoke was kindness instead of harshness, just think what effect those words would have on the world.
Poem written when I felt far from God and unsure of His direction for my life.
by: Demitria Ibanez
Comments
This poem could benefit with some separation to mark stanza's - and to make it more visually appealing to an online readership.
Lovely words
Excerpt:
Every thought, every word
is held back, tainted
by doubt, by fear.
I know Your strong, unfailing arms
are always ready to catch me...
but what if I won't let you?
I wish that I could leap into the sky
with the confidence of a bird,
unintimidated by the distance of the ground below,
and that I could see (clearly)
Your love,
Your plan and how I am supposed to fit into it.
A story about a kid's visit to a barbershop
by: SHENG
Many funny turns of speech in this story such as:
*Frankly, I could not fathom the reason he chose to aggravate the hideous hairstyle he bore.
*Unlike her amiable and approachable personality, Miss
Marie possessed a poor and insufficient hair-cutting skill.
*The situation aggravated when my demanding and authoritative mother, who palpably had a
strong craving for distasteful haircuts, indefatigably insisted me go to Miss Marie whenever my hair began to thrive
*Occasionally, I let out a stream of bellow to express my exasperation but to no avail as she relished the moment very fondly
*Miss Marie loomed up abruptly, assessing my wavy hair with a salivating complexion.
*Frustration engulfed me as I gaped at my staggeringly repulsive reflection in utter shock.
Natalie is alone in the haunted hallway! It's dark and scary and there are monsters!
by: Captain Colossal
ExCeRpT
Natalie crept down the dark, dusty hallway. It smelled of old wood and dog hair.
The flashlight gave a treacherous flicker. Her breath trembled and her heart pounded. A menacing creak sounded behind her, and she waved her feeble light in its direction,
....but nothing was there...
Comments
Another example of dynamic Flash Fiction
Flash Fiction offers the writer the opportunity to think on their feet, after all you need a character, a plot a beginning, middle and end and quickly ! This is a Daily Flash Fiction Contest!
I Was Bad So My Teacher Sent Me to the Thinking Chair
by: THiNG (4Ps)
Who wrote
"Throughout my life I have a habit of getting into embarrassing and/or ridiculous situations. At this point I've accepted this as my fate. I deal with it by writing about it and laughing at it."
Comments
... Well, I thought we were Kindred Spirits and now I'm convinced.
I love this story - what a great memory, ... he became a Police-man, Huh !
I hope the writer will take consolation in their life's direction from the time of this account... some great stories have evolved as a result
... I mean to say, Who would you rather read about... (no disrespect intended, but the truth is..) Mother Theresa? or the latest Devil-ish account of ...(Your Favourite Sinner)
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Stanza 2 could be the chorus
Quite simply, a lovely poem 
