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220 Public Reviews Given
221 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
My review style is informal and encouraging of writer's development.
Favorite Genres
I enjoy Realistic Fiction, Thrillers and love a good plot twist.
Least Favorite Genres
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Favorite Item Types
Short Stories, Essays, Scripts, Letters
Public Reviews
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Review by H❀pe
Rated: E | (5.0)
I was so happy to read of your long lasting marriage, despite not doing something grand for your anniversary this year. Following your profile I came to stalk who your enduring sweet heart was? Perchance another member of WDC? So was further delighted with this tale above and your Humble Poet poem.

I don't know about iambic pentameter, nor how many verses is right or wrong. I measure a poem solely on how it flows with my mind's voice and how it settles in my heart. On this, my uncalibrated yard stick, I found your midnight inspired verse to meet the mark. And would thank you for thanking Bren with it so sweetly.

Happy Anniversary weekend to you both

Hope
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Review of Unleashed Rage  
Review by H❀pe
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Maalik
I read a couple of your pieces yesterday, this is my favourite thus far.

I appreciate the level of detail you lead the reader thru: enough to bring a person to mind, not too much so as to rule them out.

The threes stages of your poem are expressed with empathy... A POV from which, a person like myself (who lives with someone who has temper issues) can really relate.

Though the line 'someone must die' made me laugh ( a well timed comedy break.)

The third stage, the regretful lessons/questions, feel like well wishes presented. Hopeful thoughts. Because we know there will be a next time.

Very well done


Hope
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Review of Under This Tree  
Review by H❀pe
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi BMF
I love your poem so very much, it speaks to the heart and mind also. I enjoy how there are deep thoughts expressed simply, inviting one to linger upon each thought. Each sentace flows, is not laboured.

It is beautiful.

*HeartP*

Hope
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Review by H❀pe
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi Henry
I saw your request for feedback, and so here is my thoughts on your short story.

I liked the topic, archery is something I once tried when I was about 11. (A loooong time ago!). So I appreciated the stubbornness of your hero, trying over and over again.

I'd have liked to read more of what he actually did, what techniques he tried, adjustments he made. It's an interesting topic after all!

I did get confused a little as his locations, that aren't actually described changed. Such as how he 'walked back' after lunch, when I'd thought he was still at the range. Expanding into some description of his surroundings would provide greater backdrop for your dialogue (which was fun to read).

You've made me want to have another go at archery again, I remember the string being so hard to pull. I think I only tried half a dozen times... no blue nor yellow for me, 100% grass green.

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Review by H❀pe
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi K
Your short story moved my mind with interest this way then that, which I very much enjoyed, on a swift wonderance to what was really going on here?
The possibility of fairies, even if some optical illusion, was enticing!

You brought a warm smile to my face with the revelation that the little miss was fibbing... and yet with admiration too. The treasure of the story is the little girls adlibbing-creativity.

I felt a mental hiccup with the use of the words tiredly and precariously, which while explanatory didn't flow as softly. But that might just be me.

Otherwise I loved this snippet of homelife, and the sweet feeling it gifted.
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Review of The Sunglasses  
Review by H❀pe
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi KimE

I liked your plug in the story link, you made me curious to see how your story 'spoke for itself'.

The discription of your lady was a little halting, but interesting, and as you mentioned it's yet to be refined.

I was just getting into learning more about the strange sports loving lady, when a dramatic turn, the accident, was writ! You caught me by surprise. And then poignant sadness. And I suddenly realised why her description, the mess of her hair etc, was as it was.

Well done. I think your outline very worth future finessing/refinement.




Hope
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