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DISCLAIMER: I am an author just like you. My suggestions are just that... suggestions. You need not to follow them.
PUNCTUATION AND GRAMMAR: I found no grammar or punctuation mistakes. As far as that is concerned it is perfect.
FLOW: It flowed real nice. I like how you divided it up with pictures. This not only made it easier to read but added something to the story.
OVERALL THOUGHTS: I really like this piece especially as a science person myself.Science is very neat. I remember going and entering science fairs myself as a teenager. I encourage you to continue to write your experiences. It's a great way to share them.
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A very good poem. I own a cat myself and can't imagine your pain. We, as humans get real attached to our animals.
The only suggestion I may make is making the font a little brighter. It's kinda hard on the eyes. This is only a suggestion and you need not to follow it.
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Very nice poem. It's hard to tell someone how you feel especially when so many things are running through your mind. You ended it well by saying the one thing that needed to be said "I love you". I found no mistakes in this. I would suggest that you add some punctuation. This will help it flow better. That is just a suggestion and need not to be followed.
I encourage you to continue to write. It's a great way to get those feelings out.
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A very good read indeed. Sometimes those three words are hard to say. We all long for that special someone. Everything seems to be in order with this poem including grammar, punctuation and flow. I wouldn't change a thing about it.
I encourage you to continue writing. It's a great way to express ourselves. When we have a hard time saying something, sometimes it comes out better on paper. So, keep it up.
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This is a very good read. Your wording choice is excellent. The only thing I would add is some end line punctuation. This is the only thing that I would change and by no means do you have to. It's only a suggestion.
I encourage you to keep writing. You are very good at it. Hope to see more of your work.
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A very nice write. Kids can be so cruel at times. I know how hard it is to grow up being different. I am a lesbian and came out a very young age. Of course I was teased then I learned to fight and that all stopped.
I wouldn't change a thing about this poem. It's very nice. I hope that the trials have made you stronger.
I encourage you to keep writing as it's a great way to release those feelings that we hold inside.
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Hi, I'm JPowell from The Knights of the Review Table and I am here to review your poem.
It was perfect. Punctuation was in order and it flowed very well. You tell a real story in this. I really like it.
I think more people need to ask themselves those questions at the end. As far as who is running this "crazy" race... well God is my friend. He has a plan.
I encourage you to keep writing. You have talent and it shows.
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Hi, I'm JPowell from The Knights of the Review Table and I am here to review your poem.
A very good piece indeed. I really like your word choosing as it fits the poem well. May I suggest some punctuation in it? This is only a suggestion and need not to be done. I really like this piece and the title fits it well.
I encourage you to continue to write. It's a great way to relieve the feelings that we keep bottled up.
Hi, I'm JPowell from The Knights of the Review Table and I am here to review your poem.
That was a tragic day for the world. I really like this poem. Seems all the punctuation and grammar are in place. The only suggestion I have is to break it up into two stanzas. This is only a suggestion and you need not to follow it.
Hi, I'm JPowell from The Knights of the Review Table and I am here to review your poem.
I really like this. You bring up some points in this poem. Also, you choose the right words to get your point across. Your punctuation seems to be in order and I found no spelling or grammar mistakes.
Hi, I am JPowell from The Knights of the Review Table and I am here to review your poem.
This is an excellent poem. You used the correct words to truly express how you feel. I found no spelling or grammar errors and the punctuation is in order.
On a personal note: I am a believer myself and this really touched me. We are saved by Him and thats an awesome thing.
Hi, I'm JPowell from The Knights of the Review Table and I am here to review your poem.
I really like it. You get your point across. I do have a couple of suggestions. These are only suggestions and you need not to follow them.
First I would break up your lines a little. Like the first line can be broken up into two lines. Second, I would add some punctuation to this. Once again these are only suggestions and you need not to follow.
I encourage you to keep writing. It's a great way to get feelings out.
Hi, I am JPowell from The Knights of the Review Table and I am here to review your poem.
Very well written indeed. Sometimes not saying anything tells all. Your punctuation seems to be in order and same with your grammar and spelling. I really like this poem.
I woulod encourage you to keep writing. It's a great way to get those feelings and thoughts out that we cannot say.
Hi, I am JPowell from The Knights of the Review Table and I am here to review your poem.
A very good one indeed. I like the flow it and how you repeat certain lines to get your point across. Your punctuation seems to be in order. I found no spelling or grammar mistakes in your piece.
I encourage you to keep writing. It's a great way to get feeling out. Keep it up!!!
Hi, I am JPowell from The Knights of the Review Table and I am here to review your poem.
I really like it. You have a lot of emotions in it. I suffer from depression and bi-polar so I know how it feels to be suicidal.
I do have some suggestions for you though and they are only suggestions and you may do with them with what you wish. First, I would add some more punctuation to it. Second, I would separate the stanzas. These are just suggestions like I said.
Please keep on writing. It's a great way to get out those feelings.
Hi, I am JPowell from The Knights of the Review Table and I am here to review your poem.
Its a great read. I see the feelings you have in it. It's hard when someone breaks your heart and then goes to their "perfect life". I would encourage you to take a look at this piece and maybe make it longer. This is only a suggestion and you need not to follow it.
I can see you have talent so please keep it up. i encourage you to keep writing. It's a great way to release those feelings and thoughts.
Hi, I am JPowell from The Knights of the Review Table and I am here to review your poem.
This is a very good read. Easy to follow. The punctuation is in order and it flows very nicely.
I can see where the confusion could be. Life if full of paths and sometimes it's hard to decide which way to go.
I encourage you to keep writing. It's a great way to express your feelings and thoughts and get them out. Also, it's a great way to put things in perspective.
Hi, I'm JPowell from The Rainbow Writers and I am here to review your poem.
A very good poem indeed. I really like it. You can see the love you have for this person. The only thing I might suggest is capitalizing "He" when speaking of God. This is just proper. Of course this is just a suggestion and need not to be followed.
I really like this and I encourage you to continue to write. Keep it up!!!
Hi, I'm JPowell from The Knights of the Review Table and I am here to review your poem.
Very good write. I think we would all love to get away from it all at some point. It would be nice for sure to get away from this crazy world we live in.
I found no mistakes in this poem. Punctuation seems to be in order. I encourage you to keep writing. I see a lot of talent just in this poem.
Hi, I am JPowell from The Knights of the Review Table and I am here to review your piece.
First, let me say THANK YOU for your service. Also thank you for honoring those who fought with this poem. It truly touched my heart.
I would change a thing about it. Seems like you got the punctuation in order and the wording fits it well. I can truly feel your feelings in this piece.
I encourage you to continue to write. You truly have a talent.
Hi, I'm JPowell and I am here to review your poem.
First, I never thought of writing about bowling but I must say you did a great job. You really had me there bowling in my younger days, of course.
The only thing I might suggest is that you break it up a little. Put some spaces in between thoughts. This is just a suggestion and you need not to follow it.
Please keep writing. I really like this piece. Keep it up.
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