The story begins with a long description of Simian's workplace..We get a an idea about his profession and his relationships with other colleagues.It seems that he works in a sordid building as medico legal officer .Then it mentions about class system involving the labourers-something irrelevant to the main story.I suggest that after a brief description of the doctor you go directly to the investigation and autopsy of Margaret Fischer
The poem made of three stanzas consists of the appropriate rhyming.You have described the wolves beginning their journey in excellent form and with great enthusiasm. The determination is clearly visible in the lines.But I don't know why they are angry. By using the word 'she' you are trying to say that the leader is female.Certain aspects need clarification.What I don't like is the habit of writing in between the lines.
The piece of writing illustrates the state of John's mind after multiple failures in life.Suicide was his last hope due to self hatred. However,he assessed if all the conditions were propitious for a painless death. You have underlined a good point by emphasising that even death is not a solution to failures.John couldn 't even die peacefully.
The 'deja vu 'theory is quite explicit.As life itself is a repetition of actions it is very obvious that in every day life we encounter events which we have lived before.In fact, from childhood to adulthood many things happen in our life which rewinds our memory for a flashback.However, some events remain indelible whether good or bad moments.Checkpoints are important as they help us to learn from our previous mistakes.
The short poem of three stanzas has consistent rhyming.The theme depicts the journey of a traveler who tries to explain his role in life.with no fixed abode he roams about in the country.You have given the reader a picture about those tramps who live on the road without any family or stable life.What I like is that you have put yourself in the shoes of the wanderer
The story depicts how Andrew was attracted by the precious treasure trying to protect and comfort it.The suspense is maintained till the end about the identity of the content of the basket. Even in his dream Andrew is fond of children and takes all the precautions for the security of the baby..But the question in the last paragraph makes the reader doubt about the reality of the event.
The poem built in six stanzas has free verse. It is some kind of tribute to writers who use their imagination to create something which will delight and impress the readers.But not always he attains success. With the ups and downs the writer must struggle to present his/her writings.With his pen the he can create miracles and change the world.
Your poem built in seven stanzas has very little or no rhyming..The theme is centred around a personality who is wandering about looking for a better life.The love which he tries to express for the girl is hardly visible. his girlfriend seems to have abandoned him to his fate but he isi still searching in vain.The poem needs some clarification about the characters otherwise the presentation is good
The style of writing looks well as it begins from far to narrate the story of the victims of 11th September at the World Trade Centre,.New York City must have undergone terrible shock during the crash of the planes against the world's greatest building.We see the streets of city bustling with activities and how Elizabeth was stressed to reach in time for the meeting not knowing what's in store for her. Fortunately her husband was saved due to his lateness.But who could have predicted this catastrophe?
A short poem constructed in long stanzas but no rhyming.The description of the travel looks vivid with the projection of various images and activities.You have exposed all that you can see from the train..With different kinds of passengers on board there are many things happening during the course of the voyage.Some persons are sleeping while others are admiring the landscape..However, the reader cannot find any sign of Christmas
The poem has been constructed in many stanzas most of which have rhyming lines.The theme is well developed and structured beginning from childhood to oldness; form a girl to a grandma. Most of the lines are tainted with nostalgia where the little girl questions herself about her best days. Now that she's alone she misses her husband and family for Christmas.But this is part and parcel of life.It's everyone's wish to go back to childhood
Through the dairy we can learn many secrets about the writer.But here Sandy is moaning over her lot comparing her friend's Michelle situation which is better according to her.She is envious of her and her boyfriend.The diary reveals various traits of her character.She wants to enjoy freedom like her friend.But luck does not smile to all of us.So, it's better not to use the dairy
The poem built in eight stanzas i s well described with consistent rhyming.The mentor figures throughout the poem starting from giving the reader a true picture.He is omnipresent and his odd behaviour is conspicuous.His physical appearance also looks funny which tempts you to say''Is the guy like this all the time or just on the air?''Only at the end we learn about his depression and the sudden death
The story portrays the intimate relationship between two persons who had been so close to each other that they were tempted to express the feelings actively.Indeed, it happens that sometimes an individual gets attracted by a new face without realising what is he or she doing.But human beings have weakness and are infallible.The question of sin only arises from a guilty conscience.
Your voyage looks very exploring and in your adventure to discover the sea and the new island you came across many things and creatures in that particular environment. You have dared to explore the marine life around the island and found out many interesting facets about it. Indeed , you have good descriptive talents which are conspicuous in your writing.
The story depicts how a family who was living happily was haunted by the past of the husband. Brent , his wife and their baby were having a nice time in the family environment .The only thing which affected him was about his baby who resembled an elf. But he was unaware about the worse thing to come when the Brotherhood men came to attack his family.He devotes body and soul to defend them.This is seen upon as a heroic deed.Finally he has no alternative than to kill
A long poem with eight stanzas .It is obvious that you have respected your own opinion about rhyming.Although there is no hard and fast rule about it yet rhyming contributes much to the beauty of the poem making it flow smoothly .The poet is just like a sculptor carving each word and line scrupulously so that he creates a good image of his writing.But as noting is perfect it's the job of the reviewer to suggest improvement.
Your poem constructed in six stanzas has rhyming in only a few lines.Form your point of view your are trying to justify the behaviour of today's adults.The problem is that youngsters cannot understand the old generation and vice versa. In fact, many adults endeavour to escape reality by involving in fictitious pleasures.Perhaps they are trying to postpone the real problems.But of course adults need guidance and advice from the elderly.As rightly pointed out by Victor Hugo'' Youth is the light and oldness is the cinder.''
The story transposes the reader in a world of mysticism.In quest of his identity through his ancestors the man enters into the realm of the unknown. You have transcended the world of existence and landed into a period of transition with the end of life and the beginning of a new era..But will all the sufferings end with the advent of the new civilisation? Is the theory of reincarnation justified? Indeed we are at the crossroads of life not knowing which is the best and safest way
This piece of writing pushes the reader directly into the picture out of nowhere. The characters force themselves in the writing.Without any proper introduction we don't know who is who.Only the dog has a name .From the dialogues it is difficult to differentiate between the interlocutors.The only interesting we learn is that the main character is a writer
Your reflections about love give the impression that you were inquisitive about it at that period of life like many persons of your age . But unfortunately you learned about love in the wrong way through research in books and from personal experiences.You wanted to acquire all the knowledge about the subject before embarking upon it.That's your greatest mistake.In fact love is felt and not seen..Probably you have lost the girl because you tried to impress her with your bookish knowledge.
You have taken a new turn to start your story starting from the introduction of the child who was admiring the toys in the shop. John who was passing by was able to read the mind the child . Just to go back into his childhood he offered the game to the tot.From here on wards the story takes another twist by mentioning about the amnesia of John.However, was it necessary to divert into the world of fiction through the aliens?.Surely, there is another way to celebrate Christmas
The story begins slowly by telling about the reflections of the man and giving the reader a retrospective about his life.Throughout his existence
he was involved in wrongful deeds and the element of drug dealing is mentioned many times.At the end of his life he has remorse for his conduct on earth.The only solace comes from his daughter.He is relieved on thinking about her being his only saviour.Indeed, we reap what we sow.
Written in four stanzas the poem is constructed in free verse.You have tried to illustrate the forces of nature and justify the ebb and tides. The waxing and waning of the moon definitely has an effect on the sea.The word 'Nature's dance is self explanatory. Indeed, the image is well described to convey the message.However, the poem needs some elaboration
The poem ,constructed in seven stanzas, is well written with regular rhyming.Indeed with the approach of the New Year there is a change of mood every where.People start to prepare for celebrations.There is great hustle bustle for the season's greetings. But why should we adopt a new attitude for only one day?After all it is just a change in the calendar.Every thing else remains the same.
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