The poem is presented in one stanza with partial rhyming. But the title does not correspond with the poem.The theme is about the coming of the new year. You have mentioned about sufferings and pain which you had to bear during the year. It would be better to talk about the good times which surrounded you.Let's hope in the forthcoming year life will be better.
Your poem is written in four stanzas with equal number of lines in each one.Presented in free verse, it has a philosophical connotation.You have questioned about the purpose of life. I would say it is an opportunity to express yourself in terms of achievement.We are here to accomplish a mission.It is a journey full of ups and downs.The question of legacy does not arise because each one has must stand on his own feet.
The poem is constructed in five stanzas with equal lines in each one.You have preferred to use free verse. The idea of expressing your love in the rainy season in autumn is genial.Indeed, Indeed, it's the appropriate season for such feelings.Using this moment as background for your poem you have painted the environment conducive to love. But don' t you think Spring is the ideal time for it?
The poem is well constructed with four stanzas with four lines in each one.The rhyming is also constant. You have chosen a pertinent theme by writing about the wall.It symbolises individualism and segregation as far as human relationships are concerned. Probably you are referring to the Wall of shame which existed in Berlin between East and West Germany.Now with globalisation the world is becoming a village.What's the function of the wall?
The poem is illustrated in six stanzas and more or less with the same number of lines.The rhyming is constant throughout. The topic of loneliness is well exploited with the presentation of a character who loves to be alone.In fact, with all the worries in life sometimes man prefers solitude. Here, the author is exhorting other persons to develop indifference, carelessness and hatred for him.But, he/she regrets of having landed in this world
The story is centered around the journey of Austin to school.Since morning something goes wrong with the chap.He does not look well with bruises on his face and the swollen eye.There is nobody at home to help him. Nevertheless he makes his way to school.On reaching there he meets his friend Ryan. Had it not been the intervention of the monitor the tussle would have become serious.In the class also he cannot concentrate on his studies.Indeed it was a bad day for Austin.
It's a nice poem that you have written here.It was a good idea to illustrate thanksgiving day in poetic form.Constructed in continuous lines form the rhyming is appropriate.Every alphabet has been tactfully described and a meaning ascribed to it.But what about the' intimate talk between chairs?'Anyway you have created a good alphabetic game.
Your story seems to be inspiring. In the attempt to cure yourself you visited the heights of the mountains. The tranquility and beauty of the spot motivated to become health conscious. You discovered a natural way to treat your ailment-yoga. Indeed , it 's something superb and many diseases can be cured by this therapy. Even your doctor couldn't believe this sudden improvement.I am also an adept of yoga and I feel sick if I miss it a day. Really it is very beneficial for health..Keep it up.
The poem is well portrayed with equal lines in each stanza and occasional rhyming.. It shows the reaction of insomniacs who cannot tolerate normal people to sleep.Indeed,it must be very frustrating to see others asleep when you can't. But why should you deprive your friends of sleep when it is a natural right?Instead you must find the cause of the insomnia and seek treatment.
A well structured poem presented in four balanced stanzas.The rhyming fits well.It is making an appeal towards the restoring of peace in love.Although there might be differences in character and thinking pattern a couple must be one. As we grow mature in life our altercations should be left aside to settle down peacefully in life.The line about fighting and dying is eye catching.
The story starts well with the presentation of the setting and the psychological state of the character. From the description it is gathered that the person is awaiting for the arrival of an important letter and he is preparing himself morally for that.But hardly has he got the letter another person pops in.-Mr Urawa .Through their conversation the reader learns that it is about the letter.But there is complete suspense till the end about the contents of the letter.
The story portrays a conversation between a creature and the educator. He makes him realise the very essence of life. The creature is unaware about its existence..You have described the theme of violence from very far. Kai, who has just been born is very naive and inexperienced.From the dialogues the reader gets a glimpse of the characters of both interlocutors.
The story starts well portraying the profound love between Robert and Christy. We learn that she's his fiance and they plan to get married.But it tales another turn with the mention of the first wife of Robert who has passed away.At this point it becomes ridiculous about asking permission with his first wife to marry Christy. With the help of Edith Robert is now convinced that Sandra is jealous but proceeds for the wedding.
A poem written at one stretch in continuous lines.There is not any rhyming as well.It sounds like a violent homage paid to someone who was not well esteemed.There are signs of relief from bondage.From the last line the reader gets an a hint about the difficult relationship between the two persons.It seems that the lover has become apathetic and bitter in his passion.
A well built poem with continuous lines and good rhyming.The ideas are well maintained .The description of the beast is well portrayed..All the evil deeds of the beast are exposed.It is quite clear that many persons are victims of the beast. It was necessary to save many lives which accounts for the killing of the animal
Your reflections about yourself make the reader perplexed and wonder who really you are.You exist only by name.You are neither a plant nor a human being..Are you the muse of poets and writers?Although you exist you do not live.Only the Creator knows who you are.This theory of nonenity looks very absurd.Know thyself first before others know you..
Your poem is presented in continuous lines quite different from the usual ones. There is no apparent rhyming.The character has been gifted with special powers so that it looks peculiar . With its outstanding qualities the reader gets the impression of meeting with a superman.It is a real world of fiction.The poem seems to be somewhat far from reality.You must bring the character back to earth.
A straightforward poem written continuously without any break of lines.There is no visible rhyming.. You have emphasized on the origin of pain and how it affects humanity. Ever since the creation of the world it has existed and will continue to harass man till his death.Sometimes we feel tortured by it but it can also be positive for life.Life is not made of a bed of roses.There are thorns as well.It's only after suffering that we can understand other persons.
The story starts by evoking the difficult childhood of Katie.It depicts how she has been deprived of maternal love and grown like an abandoned child. Her parents never cared for her and were not at home most of the time.When she changes abode there is the usual problem of adaptation in the new big house.In her quest for friendship she makes the acquaintance of Theo. At the beginning Katie considers him as a good companion.But only when she grows up she realises about his real identity.Having missed her childhood, she feels lonely.
The story takes a good start but as it unravels it flow sin another direction.There are very little signs of winter. It looks rather some good moments spent with the family.With the approach of winter there are many changes in the environment which are have not been mentioned here
For your first attempt at writing the facts are somehow irrelevant.You must stick to the topic.
The poem is well illustrated with three stanzas and some occasional rhyming.The theme is straightforward portraying the effects of love. The kiss symbolises the profound sense of sentimentalism which dominates the poem.It is considered as the essence of love and reflects the emotional impacts on the lover. The one and only kiss remains as a strong souvenir of love.
Your poem is well balanced with enough stanzas and each one consisting of three lines.With your free verse writing style it is certainly well painted. The theme itself is well depicted paying a tribute to nature.You have vividly described the elements of nature with particular emphasis on the emotional aspect.
The poem is presented in only two stanzas with occasional rhyming.All the ideas are exposed in the first one.The tiger is portrayed as the powerful animal hunting for its prey-the lamb.The game between the tiger and the lamb is amply visible.There is good inter action but finally the tiger has an upper hand on the lamb when the latter becomes the victim
The writing style looks a little odd.There is no coherence between the stanzas. The absence of rhyming is conspicuous.And the theme also is not quite well defined.It seems that the poet is looking for some sort of recognition for his work.Are you in quest of honour so that you are not left in the obscurity?
Your writing style seems to be different .The poem is presented directly without any stanza. It flows in a continuous manner.You have started with trees perhaps to emphasize about the age of the world.The element of time is well defined.But I can't understand the relationship with the son and the absence of maternal love.There is no clear cut theme.
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