The writing style looks a little odd.There is no coherence between the stanzas. The absence of rhyming is conspicuous.And the theme also is not quite well defined.It seems that the poet is looking for some sort of recognition for his work.Are you in quest of honour so that you are not left in the obscurity?
Your writing style seems to be different .The poem is presented directly without any stanza. It flows in a continuous manner.You have started with trees perhaps to emphasize about the age of the world.The element of time is well defined.But I can't understand the relationship with the son and the absence of maternal love.There is no clear cut theme.
A well structured poem presented in two lines stanzas.The words are clear and straightforward.You have shown your descriptive capacities by portraying the beautiful seaside scenes. With the natural things going on the beach there is complete serenity.One feel relaxed and refreshed in such a salubrious environment. Indeed, it is a tribute to nature.
A beautiful poem based on the real meaning of life.The second and third stanzas are longer that the introductory one .However, they shed much light on the theme of the poem.Your reflections about the correct use of our five senses are well expressed. Nowadays , people with handicaps are breaking records in several fields like sports and other professions.I note that you evoke the presence of a super power in the creations of these senses( Gifts of God).
The setting of the story is amid the road portraying the boy who encounters his mother in a confused state. As it unravels we learn why she's in such condition, probably upset with some bad news.There is the element of suspense from the beginning.With the description of the boy the reader gets a better picture of his personality.The relationship with his father was poor which accounts for the indifference after his dad's death.
It seems that he had a difficult time.
A good reflection about life and death. You have beautifully described the Seine and the adjacent activities going on. Indeed it must be a wonderful scenery with so many types of people. It is a great contrast when compared to the state of mind in which Maggie finds herself.She's fighting for life but at the same time faces death which is imminent.Finally, she realises that there are people with worse conditions still struggling to live.
The poem is well presented with several stanzas and occasional rhyming. You have good descriptive and appreciative qualities as far as women are concerned. You have painted her beauty from top to bottom. But as you mention in the title it is only ephemeral.Obviously all credits go to the Creator who is a unique artist.
Your story is indeed hilarious and full of inconsistencies.I think it 's better to read it in the evening when we are back home from work just to get rid of stress after a hectic day at work. With all the comedies and abnormalities it attracts the reader to know more about your journey.And you have chosen a good name Mr Handicap. Indeed, it is completely out of ordinary writing. I think your neighbours were waiting for you to kill the cat for a good meal!
The poem is well presented with four stanzas and good rhyming.You have managed to write equal number of lines in each line.It deals with the seasonal change which is apparent after with the end of summer.The changes are vividly described not only physically but also morally. The alteration in mood is conspicuous.
A long piece of writing which does not bear the qualities of a real poem .There is no line of demarcation and the absence of stanzas and rhyming construe the work as a poem.But the topic seems quite interesting..You have used many synonyms to define darkness like solitude,dismay, etc..Indeed, darkness is an impediment in life preventing progression. With this negative aspect of life it becomes difficult to perceive light.As you have rightly pointed out both of them go in pairs.
The writing style looks different with no poetic form. You have praised the beauty of the woman in only two stanzas without any rhyming.Indeed she must be very beautiful when you say'Skin as smooth as silk'. All the lines indicate that she;s a perfect creature.But all these qualities are only ethereal.
The poem depicts the dire impacts of stress on humanity.Well presented in four stanzas, there is also relevant rhyming.The individual is overwhelmed by the engulfing power of stress.The person has become a victim of the conjecture with all the burden of stress.In fact, we are all subject to this condition whether we want it or not.
A long poem written in six stanzas and decorated with a few rhyming here and there. The topic deals with the prevalence of frustration which is engendered by the rejection of the beloved.It depicts the effects of desertion on the individual.All the stanzas evoke the feeling of emptiness .Moreover, whatever was left has been discarded as bad souvenirs.
A very short and touching poem describing the endless efforts of a mom to save her son.The stanzas are irregular and the rhyming also not continuous.She moves heaven and earth to get back her little darling .There is also the presence of pain due to the separation.Only a mother can feel it but has no words to explain the suffering. However, she is determined to get back her son at any cost.
A brief poem with well structured stanzas and good rhyming.The man who is in search of his identity is lost in the big world.He looks disorientated while trying to know from where he comes.But as per his history we learn that he was once living in companionship and due to some personal blunders he is now in solitude.However, it's difficult to live again that blissful period.
The short poem is well presented with only five stanzas with a few rhymes here and there.With the return to the past the poet has portrayed lots of emotions which makes the reader sensitive to the conjectures.However the word' ex-asshole'' seems a bit vulgar spoiling its emotional
aspect.I think it needs a little polishing
Your poem is well structured with adequate lines and rhyming.The individual is lost in the world of the supernatural.Since the very beginning the writer tries to create an atmosphere of the unknown life.The element of fear is prevalent throughout the lines.It seems that the fellow is easily adapted to his environment.
The story of the chair is well linked with the clock symbolizing time.We learn that a carpenter can make a chair but will sit only temporarily on it..It implies that whatever be your position or post one day or other with the passing of time you will have to vacate it.The element of time is well depicted in the writing with particular emphasis on our temporary mission in life.
The poem is evocative of the playful attitudes of children .The stanzas are well structured with four lines in each one but the rhyming is not regular.it paints the story of the pumpkin which wants to be freed from the vine.It uses all sorts of tricks on the kids to get rid of its bondage.it reflects the habit of false promises by men to achieve his target..But as soon as he gets what he wanted he simply disappears.
A beautiful poem dedicated to the greatest symbol of love, the Taj Mahal. In just a few stanzas you have been able to describe this magnificent monument with great skills.There is good rhyming although it is lacking in some lines.It sounds like an invitation to visit this wonderful site of your country..I had been to India but unfortunately couldn't go there.
A very touching poem relating the story of Scab or Todd described in poetic form. The writing style looks modern with direct access on the topic. You have used the same number of verses in each stanza with occasional rhyming. The deplorable condition in which the former DJ finds himself has a coherent link with his past life. Having lost his family in the fire, he is no longer interested with life.He dies out of depression and sorrow.
A long fairy story describing the routine activities in a rustic setting. We see the aspirations of the villagers and how they struggle to survive. Only agriculture and farming are their main livelihood. Out of all this emerges Hild, the village girl who dreams of a charming prince to come and asks for her hand.She is confident that her dream will realise one day considering the story of the milkmaid as example.Finally, she is able to seduce the king.It is good sometimes to escape in the world of fairies
A poem based on the qualities of real love. It analyses the shortcomings in love.it is well balanced with equal lines in each stanza and good rhyming.Love should be something concrete.It should not only be felt but also tasted.It must contain all the ingredients to be complete. Love without a kiss is like a meal without salt
A piece if fiction depicting the anxiety of a ghost to get a new body. The characters are well depicted with the appropriate attribution of specific roles. But it is somehow odd to learn that the actual resident in Hagadorn does not look for a body himself. It's a sort of punishment for the guy to transfer Master to another person..At a certain point the reader seems confused about the characters.
An interesting anecdote illustrating how with your intervention you relieved the soldier from the overwhelming crowds. Even if I was in this situation it would have been difficult to avoid the people. You are the saviour of the corporal in the sense that you brought him closer to his family.Being a previous soldier you must have felt the delight of returning home after such a long time
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