Your reflections about the daily realities of life are hundred per cent veracious. The world in which we are living consists of people with different mentalities .We are living in a society which is degrading continuously .The young generation has no respect for the elderly. Every where there is absence of discipline- on the roads, at schools and public places. There is chaos all over. Who cares?
Your poem reflects the state of mind in which the poet is. It has partial rhyming and is straightforward to the point. In fact the sun rises for everybody but only the fortunate ones benefit from it .It's the wish of everyone to see the sun shining in his/ her life but at times it does rain
Indeed this poem dedicated to you father arises straight form your heart .It shows the immeasurable paternal love concealed in your heart.By using simple words you have conveyed the message to your dad. I like the straightforward style which you have adopted. you have clearly expressed your profound feelings
A realistic poem about the creatures living along us within our environment. You have portrayed a vivid activities of the ants .Here we realize the importance of these insects. There is good rhyming but the number of lines is different in each stanza.
The poem written in blank verse is well built in continuous lines. But it will look better if rewritten in stanzas. Indeed, the journey of life is full of ups and downs. Sometimes there is happiness and sometimes sadness. The poem exhorts man to live with better hopes but for some people life is just a complete failure
A good poem with alternate rhyming and useful wordings. It depicts how the poet must search for words to write the best item. Indeed, it requires much pondering before actually writing the poem. People must live in the present but sometimes a leap in the past can decide about the future.
A lyrics written in five stanzas with constant rhyming .But what about the content ?From beginning to the end it is full of filth and foul things. It looks like a dedication to dirty people lacking hygiene. Being straightforward it brings forth the crude reality about the hygienic condition of certain people. It needs some refining
Your poem is presented in continuous lines in blank verse It is a vibrant dedication to friendship. Throughout the lines there is the prevalence of this sudden deprivation of powerful feelings. You have outlined the special relationship well but it lacks the poetic touch to make it feel real. It needs some polishing
The poem built in four stanzas has no apparent rhyming Evoking of tragedy in love it has a morose taint. Written in simple language it is easily interpreted .The style also looks straightforward. Very often unsuccessful love has a tragic ending . It seems that nature is sympathizing with the lovers when you say nothing grows near the tree.
A very emotional poem build in many stanzas and constant rhyming. The story of Stan is lamentable where he does not assume his responsibility as a husband and father. The style seems too direct with a story pattern. it lacks the poetic approach which beautifies a poem. It needs some refining.
The poem constructed in four stanzas has few rhyming. Written in simple language, it makes us realize the importance and effect of nature on humanity. Indeed feeling the fresh air on the skin has a soothing effect. An escapism into nature. However, the use of different colours is not a good idea
A poem written in very short stanzas with consistent rhyming. Being very straightforward it can be easily understood. Based on the topic of arts it points out how art is being destroyed nowadays. The value of painting is being downgraded. But why have you mentioned Mozart who was a musician?
A poem constructed in prose style and continuous lines with no apparent rhyming. You have
tried to personify the island which expresses its feeling of loneliness. Just like a human being the island is fond of company. It is appealing for an animated environment. It will be better if the lines can be grouped in stanzas
Written in continuous lines the poem has some form of rhyming. It is full of negative emotions throughout the lines. Unfortunately these are the harsh realities of life. But you have not analysed the counter struggle to fight for life. The style also looks somehow too direct with the sequence of overflowing words
A poem written in continuous lines with some rhyming lines. Being very short and straightforward it is easily understood. You have depicted times of hardship from the very beginning which have been overcome after much struggle and efforts. The last line is very significant about the beginning of a new era. However, it needs some polishing
A poem constructed in continuous lines written in free verse. It flows easily and is straightforward in simple words allowing a quick comprehension. It depicts the fragility of life. Indeed many persons are not strong enough to face the harsh realities of life. Here the girl attempts to reach another world deep beneath the ocean. But we do not know her real disappointment
A poem written in various stanzas without any real rhyming .Here you have put emphasis on the negative course of life by attracting the attention of the reader on the downs side of it. But you have not analysed the practical aspect of life .May be you have seen it only from your point of view.I have also written a poem on the same topic but it is more philosophical
An interesting poem with only two stanzas but very significant and consistent rhyming .The message behind it is very clear and it is obvious that love cannot exist if there is separation .Will the leaf remain green after leaving the tree? Indeed you have made a good analogy of the attachment in love. The style fits well.
A poem written in a conversational style with emphasis on the opposing characters of he and she .Although the style looks a little different it is still interesting. The interaction between the two persons throw light about their close relationship.The title fits well the poem.
With six stanzas and good rhyming the poem seems to have been carefully constructed. You have projected the image of daily routine in life from morning till evening.A good analysis of the journey made by the employee to his work site.One important thing which you have mentioned is about stress.Indeed hard work is well remunerated.
The poem constructed in a single stanza has consistent rhyming. It flows well in continuous lines.You have pointed out the physical aspect of life. Indeed life is a mission which everyone must accomplish in his /her own way.With ups and downs sometimes we are on the top of the wheel and sometimes down.Whether joys or sorrows we have to face all situations
You have portrayed a real image of the desert. It's not fun going out through it. Even the strongest travelers find it cumbersome to make a journey over there .One must be bold enough to walk under the scorching sun and have skin burns. You have also pointed out about dehydration which implies the need for plenty amount of water. And above all those dangerous creatures ever ready to attack.Indeed it's a nasty experience
A poem written in a few stanzas with constant rhyming. You have painted the life of a superstar describing the daily hustle bustle .Just like other human beings the basket ball player has to perform well to remain atop. Eating, drinking and merry making also form part of his life
A story entirely connected with science fiction.Where does Mitch come from ?There is only information about his hypersleep.For how many years was he slumbering?The dialogue between him and the computer announces the imminence of a great scientific event.But for some reason or another it was a failure
The poem written in a different style with a combination of short and long sentences looks somewhat odd.The free verse is suitable for such type of poem.On going through the lines the feeling of solitude is prevalent.I like the line'Freedom is illusion' because there is no absolute freedom in life.However, it needs a good refining.
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