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Review by janice39
Rated: E | (4.5)
Without faith, it is impossible to please God Hebrews 11:6

I loved the story line. You keep writing

Jan

I write under the name Janice Bumbalough Marler. Two publishers want to publish me. I have know Bob for several years. He is now in the publishing business and has written several books. When he found out Austin MaCauley from England wanted my manuscript, he told me he wanted to publish me. (If I can stay out of the hospital long enough)
Look at Bob's site: poeticaljournies.com
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Review by janice39
Rated: E | (5.0)
Absolutely amazing. Where in the world did you come across all of the above? I didn't know his birthday and mine fall on the same day, March 2nd

Several years ago, I was able to walk through the house where Edger Allen Poe lived. In fact, I have a picture of him on my refrigerator. It has a magnet on the back of it.

Jan
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Review by janice39
Rated: E | (3.5)
I understand loss. I love that you can write about your loss sharing with others who have gone through the same thing.

Janice
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Review of #444  
Review by janice39
Rated: E | (3.5)
Make sure you use your ;'s, It keeps it from becoming a run-on sentence.

That is irritating isn't it. You have great potential.

Jan
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Review of Words Have Power,  
Review by janice39
Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh my goodness. What an awesome write. I could visualize everything. Yes, words do make a difference.

Jan
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Review by janice39
Rated: E | (5.0)
"From where do the stories come from?" She asked her Grandfather.
"From the depths of despair. From the light of love. From the mists of mystery. From the hearts of imagination." He replied.
As she looked through the field of daisies, and into the trees beyond, she pondered the words of her Grandfather. Where does imagination come from?she thought to herself. She skipped through the flowers, hitting the stems of some as she merrily went on her way.

In the sentence just above 'skipped through the flowers' After the ? There needs to be a space.

If you are like me, I get carried away and overlook something. Here at Writing.com, I had so much help. It's like a family.
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Review by janice39
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love it, I love it, I love it. We can't see the wind, but we do feel the effects of it.

Jan
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Review by janice39
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I love it, This is picturesque.

Janice
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Review of MEMORIES  
Review by janice39
Rated: E | (4.5)
I really enjoyed reading about Mittens. Very good. Keep up the good work. I use www.wordweb.com when I am writing. If I want to use a word more than once, I use wordweb to help supply another word that means the same thing.+ Example 'excellent' I also use www.rhymezone.com Not only does it give you words that rhyme, but definitions, etc.

Jan
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Review of Frogs and toads.  
Review by janice39
Rated: E | (4.0)

There was the bedwetting stories, and eating in bed. Even one about where my milk-teeth went, yes, I was told. About rabbits, pink and blue, that leave chocolate eggs all over the show. Fairy and elves, those I have seen, even an ogre or two, ’cause I would not listen and ate too late. My dog could talk and tell me tales, of chasing cats, cars, and wagging tails. Many things have I heard; Cinderella; Snow White; Pinocchio; a Thousand and one tales.



There was the bed-wetting stories, and eating in bed. Even one about where my milk-teeth went, yes, I was told. About rabbits, pink and blue, that leave chocolate eggs all over the show. Fairy and elves, those I have seen, even an ogre or two, ’cause I would not listen and ate too late. My dog could talk and tell me tales, of chasing cats, cars, and wagging tails. Many things have I heard; Cinderella; Snow White; Pinocchio; a Thousand and one tales.

Then, a frog in my daughter’s bed, so she told, (was)very bold.



I love it. Bedwetting is one word. You could probably use a semicolon after the word
went' and if the sentence is a continuation you might want to remove the period after 'I was told (about rabbits, pink and blue (over the show?) After My dog could talk and tell me tales of chasing cats, cars and wagging tails. Many things I have heard (stories) I have heard, Cinderella, Snow White, Pinocchio, and A Thousand and One Tales. (Is that a story? or a comment?

I love the way you 'tell' this story. I have kissed a few frogs in my lifetime...They definitely did not turn into princes.

Janice
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Review of Nocturne  
Review by janice39
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is interesting. I always love learning different ways to write

Jan
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Review of Keep me safe  
Review by janice39
Rated: E | (5.0)
Absolutely wonderful. My mother was struck with this disease in the late nineties. At first the changes were subtle. They were overt. I had no idea what Alzheimer's was, that is until one of the deans at Duke University in Durham, North Carolina, broke it down to me. Duke had opened a new facility to study Alzheimer's/Dementia on Science Drive. Her father had succumbed to this thief. He had donated his brain for research and I escorted her to the ER to sign papers giving the university permission for the for the study. Never, in a million years, would I realize this villain would attack my immediate family.

I wrote the following poem about Alzheimer's

At Sea

One can see the fog rolling in,
but only God can lift it;
She sits in silence as if she knows her fate;
I see fear in her eyes; she can't talk.
There was a time when the skies were clear;
We heard the thunder of laughter in the distance,
Then there was peace and quiet;
She smiles.
She is in her own world now;
We carry on conversations without words;
I see a tear in her eye;
I rub her forehead and hold her hand;
Her eyes search my face as she reaches out to me
For answers;
On the morn she will drift out to sea;
When she awakens the fog will be lifted.

© Janice Bumbalough Marler
March of 2004
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Review of Tory's Story  
Review by janice39
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wonderful story. What a brave young lady.

Jan
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Review by janice39
Rated: E | (5.0)
Lovingly written. My mother had this dreaded disease and I watched as she slipped further and further away from me. Finally, the time came when she could not talk any longer, but she as able to laugh at a joke I had told my sister. We were shocked she understood it. Eventually, the time came when we had to remove life support from her so she could go to meet my father and our God.

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Review by janice39
Rated: E | (4.0)
Filled with pain. Great poetry sometimes is filled with pain. Good job.

Jan
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Review by janice39
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I love it. I can picture this happening.

Good job.

Jan
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Review of Tuning in  
Review by janice39
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I am impressed. I love it.

Jan
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Review of New Bloods  
Review by janice39
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Check your spelling....of Thim while he said that. [of them while he said that.]
Be cautious of using capital letters where they are not supposed to be. [to my Quarters.] I don't understand this sentence: CalCain was seated a couple of men down from Noriam.

If you go to www.grammerbook.com it might help you.

Jan
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Review by janice39
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love it. It reminds me of a time long, long ago when my grandmother and aunts quilted.
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Review of Writing.Com 101  
for entry "The Review Mixer" 
Review by janice39
Rated: E | (5.0)
My pleasure
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Review by janice39
Rated: E | (5.0)
Okay..break it down to me and tell me what you are talking about. I write and I write poetry, sometimes I have to break it down so people will know what I am trying to say.

Very good write.

Janice
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Review by janice39
Rated: E | (4.0)
Very good. Nice poem...I grew up listening to crowing
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Review of The Waitress  
Review by janice39
Rated: E | (4.5)
on as I can. (") ight, if that is ok. (?)
"Sure, I don't mind. I'll get the order right in. We're open 24 hours...and you can stay as long as you need. (") There was (noone) (no one)else (levelheaded) is two words, not one. and know what she is doing. (know should be knew)

coming out of the dishwasher in the kitchen were (was) heard,

sat (seated) the customers,

What happened to the waitress? When did you leave the diner? What was she doing just before you left?

Janice
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Review by janice39
Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh my goodness; what a wonderfully written piece. I loved it.

Janice
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Review by janice39
Rated: E | (4.5)
I have a question about this sentence: eat. In. this. House." eat; In. This. House!"

Ya there is there is. (Ya there is, there is.) ?

Look at all this food in here. You can eat this and this and thi..." I say as I point and show him all the containers full of food we have.

Over lettuce.(should this be a (?) mark?) I slowly pivoted around on my crutches back to the fridge to cover up my face almost bursting into laughter. "Well okay...I guess you can just eat

This is a great piece and I loved it.
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