Good evening. I have gone on the "read and review" and passed this story. I planned on skipping this story, but thought better of it, but I was glad I didn't skip. I have never read something this good before. It is a great starting scene for a story that could turn out great, and I would be glad to read other things that you write. I love mythology, which is part of the reason I liked it so much. My mind was blown, and I was glad that I didn't skip it.
However, there was one mistake. At the beginning, 'speech was spelt wrong. Apeart from that it was good. Keep Posting.
It was a good scene, but there were a few mistakes that stood out. Instead of saying 'by' you said 'bye'. Still it was a good start for the story and I liked it. There was also no paragraphs, but it would do you good if you put a few. Apart from that I liked it. Keep posting.
I loved it! It seems like I'm going to be reviewing mostly poems today, but this is perfect! I loved it even more, because it was about a troll, and I love fantasy. There was no mistakes from what I read, And I hope that it won the contest. Keep writing!
Wow! That was so emotional. I feel sorry for you. It's sad that they died, but your poetry was amazing. I loved it. Usually, I don't click on poetry, but I'm glad I did today. You've got a skill for poems, I can see, and I would read more. Keep posting.
Amazing! I loved that! Bronn actually died of greyscale, but this was still a perfect scene. I loved the fact that it was a direwolf chasing him, and I have read the Game of Thrones books. This was almost as good as them. Keep writing! , .
That sounded like a great story. I loved it. He must've been petrified when the witch stood there, but at least he didn't die, or get turned into anything. Instead he got a whole lot of sweets. , , . Keep writing.
I loved the story. I guessed that the creatures were ants and the guardians were flying ants. It was a great story and I loved it.
There was no mistakes that stood out, and I don't want to go into detail, since I'm not going to act like that. Keep writing.
Amazing . I loved it, and I'd want to know what happened to him. It made it realistic, because people do commit suicide if they lose a big amount of money, (obviously, I don't know if he committed suicide, but it's what I guess happened. Great story. Keep writing.
That was quite sad that she was scared of herself. I feel very sorry for her, but I really liked the story and thought that it was excellent. It's sad that her husband had to find her there, dying on the floor, and I feel sorry for him.
From what I read, there were no mistakes, so I'll give it a five-star. Keep posting. , .
Wow! I wasn't expecting that. I just thought their son had died by natural causes and was being sent away. I didn't expect anything out of the ordinary until that last sentence. That was a great starting scene for a story and I would be glad to read more. Keep writing.
I think that was a very true and good article. I liked it, and wouldn't mind reading more of those things. It's as if you went online and did quite a fair bit of research on it, before writing. When I saw the size of the words, I thought that it might be bad, but I'm glad that I clicked on it. Keep writing.
At first I didn't understand, so I read through again, and a smile spread across my face. That was a funny joke, but I don't think that it was a horror/scary. Still, I liked it nevertheless. It was a perfect combination of words and I wouldn't mind reading more. Keep writing.
That was great for a short prompt. I liked the fact that he was alert, when most stories, the people only become alert if something happens to them. However, i don't think that it was an action and adventure, as nothing actually happened. Still, I liked the story. Keep writing.
I'm afraid to say that I didn't like the way the story was written. There was multiple mistakes, but I'm not going to go into detail, as I am sure that you will find them.
However, not all of it was bad. I liked the story plot, and the dialogue, and if you went back through and edited, I'd be glad to go and review it again. Keep writing.
I'm afraid to say that the story wasn't that good. There were too many mistakes: forgotten spaces, grammar problems, and spelling issues. I also don't know where the story is going, but if you could keep writing it, I will come back and review it. Until next time.
I thought that was great. That should've been added to a contest. It might've been classed as the best one. I loved it, and I there were no mistakes that stood out. I don't have to go into detail with that though. I'll read more of your stories, but keep posting.
That was an outstanding story! I wasn't expecting it to end like that. I feel sorry for her because of the way she got treated, but at least she had a happy ending. However, you did repeat a lot of words. Still, I liked the story and would be glad to read more. Keep posting.
I'm speechless. That was a great scene of dialogue and if it was put in a contest, I'd have high hopes that it would win. It was quite good and I would be glad to read more.
However, there was one mistake that stood out. "What is is it that you do again?". The extra 'is' should be removed. Apart from that, there was no other mistakes.
I wasn't expecting that. I thought that the imagination was excellent, and the story was intriguing. I loved the fact that you created a whole new world, and made Earth a fantasy planet.
There was one thing that could be changed, though. "As Jaren watched the dragon family fly away". That could be changed to "As Jaren watched the dragons fly away".
It was a great story, and I'll definitely read more.. Keep writing.
I thought that it was great. I liked the fact that the last story he wrote was about him getting killed by Henry and how the computer continued to write the story on its own. I cannot think of anything else to say except it is great.
I would give you gift points, but I don't have any, but it was excellent. Keep writing.
I don't know what the shadow people did to Timmy, but I thought it was scary. I'd definitely be scared if I was in his situation. It was a good story, though and I really liked it.
When you were mentioning their ages, you could've have said "Timmy was twelve", since you'd already said that Henry was two years younger. Apart from that, everything else was good.
This sad story was great. I don't really read emotional things, but I'm glad that I clicked on this. I was curious by how, the wife had lost seven of her lives, and I wouldn't mind knowing. I cannot think of any mistakes, which is a good thing, and if you wrote more things like this, I'd read them.
I thought that the story was quite good, and that you should keep writing. I liked the fact that the hat was alive, and when he burned it, the owner appeared at the door. He sounded mad when he unlocked the door and started laughing when he saw a man. but that didn't last long, since he realised what was looking at him.
I think that "Then" could be removed, but from what I read, it was all I thought could be switched around.
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. I loved it, and I'd want to know what happened to him. It made it realistic, because people do commit suicide if they lose a big amount of money, (obviously, I don't know if he committed suicide, but it's what I guess happened. Great story. Keep writing.