This is really good. I really enjoyed reading this. But you should of put more past and present into the story then inthis short story would of been a little more interesting and deep and more excited to keep on reading. Even though I enjoyed reading this, I had to make myself read the whole thing. I suggesst you do more interesting topic from now on to make a more interesting story.
This is a great poem about moving forward in life. This poem tells about struggels and I like how you put in there like a blurry image, it was really really good. I'd be happy to read more poems like this on writing.com other than all the love poems up on here. Plus I can honestly relate to this poem so i think thats why I enjoyed this poem so much.
Awwwwwwh this is really adorable. But I feel like this is a little below grade level. Like i would really like to see some more useage of vocabulary to make it sound more educated. It does rhyme i will give you that much though. But this poem would be a sweet little poem to give to your boyfriend/girfriend. Just maybe a little more individuallity because it sees a little clicha to me,
This makes me really depressed when i read this. I had to re-read it a few times before I assensualy understood it. But over all it was great. I just wished instead of useing so much imagery you used more examles of what the title was about. Dont get me wrong imagery is always good, I just wish there was some more examples to make it a little longer.
This is just a darling little poem I absolutly loveeeee this!! I kinda want to set this as my facebook status right now. Thats how cute this is. I like the way this ryhmed because it was original and the rhymeing wasnt all corny like other ridels. Good job!
This reminds me of a certain person I can relate this to. I just loved this. This peice of writing must of came so naturally writen to you. You just put all your feelings out there. Adn thats what I personaly like to read about. I wish there was more writing things about this instead of sappy love poems. I really enjoyed this peice!! Nothing I personally would change about this at all. That is all :)
I think it was quite repetative with the whole "purr" and stuff. But awwwe it really was sweet c: personally i love black cats and yeah i like this little tribute. im sorry to hear about ninja!!
Wow. I didn't know what was he was refurring to as him being sick in the begigning. Which i liked because it kind of made it more of a mysterios kind of story which is different and is sort of cool in its own way. I really liked this. But I dont understand why she was lieing about him not being able to see Molly. I mean like why not? So what if hes a vampire. And how did he become one anyway?
Alright, this i belevie is kind of an opinion based writing? Because I for one disagree with you about how Mickey Mouse is not fantastic. I Mickey Mouse and Walt Disney movies. And I just love how like you put like old cartoons and stuff in here. I can relate which really caught my attention. Btw i love A Christmas story! And this guy named Jean that had the Saturday night show. Are you referring to Saturday night live?
Good Job. I really like this poem. Although it doesn't really make you think or anything. I liked it anyways. But if i was you i would try to make the reader think more. Plus the title kind of gives it away the whole rest of the poem.
Autumn is my favorite season and my favorite time of the year. So i completly adored this poem. I usualy don't really like rymeing. But this poem wasn't cheezy and lame. It was very short and sweet. But the negative to this poem is that it wasnt very original. Anybody could of sat down and thought about the season of autumn and write down this exact thing. You should of used more vocabulary in this poetic peice maybe it would of made it more out there and atand out more. I really like the last stanza though. Beautiful peice I must say.
i really did not like the ryhmeing part of this poetic peice. It just wasnt my favorite. I don't think it would have been that cheezy if it didn't ryhme. There wan't even a line or anything that really stuck out to me. And there was no use in vocabluary.
Nice twist. This was a very creative story and had good detials and disriptions. Even though it was about the toothbrush being the weapon you didnt nessicarily know what the end =ing was going to be about. This story wasn't predictible. Good job.
Whats with the ' ? Your supossed to use this ". What's the point of this story? I didn't undersatnd this story. I think there is too many errors in your writing. Practice makes perfect.
Okay, first of all I'm not really a big fan of ryhmeing. So this poem did not really stand out to be as like "WHOA, what a good poem". I don't feel like it was very original. Like for instence anyone who can type can probably right this exact same poem. I'm not impressed with this poem. I mean dont get me wrong its adorable and all but its not a 10.
I get this poem that you are heading into the woods to get away from things, but you cannot break free from your past ever. I dont understand that why you are so upset but i guess it doesnt matter because its just a poem but, this poem was very clear and foggy at the same time. Also i dont get why you wanna go into the woods? is it a happy place? Why would you wanna run away to a place cold as ice? i guess i just dont get the point of this poem. You should use some vocabulary to improve it also.
This is a really cute poem. Its just oh so sweet. It looks like you put a lot of thought into it, and just wrote down what you really felt. I'd like to hear love poems like this. Keep it up yo!
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Mickey Mouse and Walt Disney movies. And I just love how like you put like old cartoons and stuff in here. I can relate which really caught my attention. Btw i love A Christmas story! And this guy named Jean that had the Saturday night show. Are you referring to Saturday night live?