What an awesome story? I enjoyed reading it. Love found. Love lost. Love revisited? Hopefully it has worked out for you both. Well written and told. I found a few mistakes nothing too bad. Third time is a charm maybe? I look forward to reading more of your writing
Heartfelt, great work. I love it. words hit it right on. I can relate I went through that before my husband and I got married. He moved to the islands while I lived in new york. The distance was awful. I didn't find any mistakes. Wouldn't change a thing.
Very nice, well written. I didn't find any errors. Enjoyed it. I think most of us have wanted to help Santa Claus. Can I help too? lol. I believe there will always be a little boy or girl inside us. I still watch Disney with my daughter and she just turned 18. Keep up the good work
😆 awesome. I too love to be happy. we should all stride to be happy. It's wonderful how nature makes us happy. I love to sit on my porch and watch the trees and animals co exist with each other. I lay on my hammock and watch the stare and moon think of all the things I am happy for. Wouldn't change a thing.
Awesome story. I love the twist in the end. I kind of expected the troll to jump out at the boy. My daughter would love your story. I felt as if I was standing there next to Joey as the troll took him under the bridge. It was almost like a would-be story from twilight zone. No errors found. Looking forward to reading more of your work
Awesome story. Found a few mistakes and a few words that are missing. But all in all. I love it. Makes me wonder if or how long our planet will survive with us living on it. If we can ever go to space. I know I will never make it there in my lifetime but it's so fun to fantasize.
First of all, hello dan. Nice to meet you. So glad you found us. Don't worry we have some odd ones here too. Me for once. Not into dungeon and dragon but I do like to watch my two children play. I too, am not fond of most people. My only close friends live in NY I live in Tampa. Happy to say I didn't notice any mistakes. I look forward to reading more of your work. Welcome aboard.
What an amazing story and testament of a mother's everlasting love and devotion. So happy and glad for you all. All your trials and tribulations will keep you strong. And my heart and prayers goes out to you and your family. I would not change a thing. Stay blessed
Oh no. What a nightmare. Those pens are the worst. I can not say how many times that has happened to me. And it is always the whites. Lol. I enjoyed this piece. Would not change a word. Poor whites. Bad lens. I look forward to reading more of your work
It's an awesome piece. Powerful words, well versed. I would not change it. It reminds me of when I lived in Staten Island, NY. I travelled to the city and started talking to a man everyday. He was a vet wearing a tatered coat, I felt ashamed, no one else gave him the time of day. I gave him a long jacket which he wore with joy. He had family but they turned their backs on him because he fought in Vietnam. I won't ever forget, my friend Joe. We need to remember we are all people and help each other out. Even just a little means a lot to someone especially our soldiers and their families
Hahaha. It's an awesome piece Bob. I enjoyed it very much.
I saw a few things I wasn't sure if it was mistake or not. There are some people less tax or taxes of people. who knows donalds trump, instead of hopes just for kicks, victory instead of victor'y. But of course you don't have to change anything at all. But great job. I love it
How sweet. I can see how much the man love and cherish her. It almost hurt me when you spoke about the two having to leave each other. How beautiful she is to him. I enjoyed reading your piece. I wouldn't change anything. Keep up your great work. Look forward to reading more of your work.
What a wonderful story. Both the families and puppies sounds very happy with their new family. So happy to see that even though the puppies were separated. They can still grow up together. So sweet. Question 1: is it a true story? 2:how old are they now?
Beautifully done. Wouldn't change a thing. Couldn't have said it any better. Thank you for sharing. We all need to thank HIM at some point. I always love to look up in the sky day or night. Hope to read more from your profile
Beautifully said. Though my life was not complicated as yours. I understand that first hesitation you feel when you first arrived. I work in nursing homes working with Alzheimer's patients. Never knowing if one or another would remember me day to day.
Always seeking to find glimpse of the real person inside them.
Aw. They are just as much work as kids. Lol. Enjoyed your story very much. It reminds me of my daughter's cat before he ram away. I still say he ran away to be with the girl cat in our neighborhood. One day when we moved to our place now. We tried to get him to go in the car, but he refused. It wasn't until our third trip that he finally jumped in the car. All scared and shaking. I hid under the front seat. Lol
aw. what a nice and sweet story. yeah that sounds about right. I remember when we had my sister in laws surprise baby shower. my brother had a very hard time keeping her away from the house. she was tired and cranky to say the most. surprisingly we got away with it. especially considering all the cars parked in the driveway. thank goodness our next door neighbor always used our driveway when they had parties and vice versa. so she was surprised. tired but happy. look forward to reading more of your pieces
One can only imagine what the Japanese people thought and saw when it hit them. Very deepand dark. Wouldn't change a thing. I can still remember the day I witnessed the towers go down. It's a sight I will never forget. Leaving new york, my home was the hardest things I ever had to do
I love the story. I like reading it in the mind of the animals. It makes you wonder if animals could work together without any hesitation and get along why can't we as humans get along just as easy. Didn't notice any mistakes. Keep up the good work
oh my goodness. I know I was supposed to be scared but I had to laugh at the end. It reminds me of work I go in at night at a school. I clean the gym and you can only imagine the sounds and thoughts that go through my mind at times. with the water fountains and air-conditioning. lol. there is a few things. I believe you meant to put mop instead of moo. also I believe you are missing a part. you may want to double check. but please resubmit it. I truly enjoyed it and look forward to reading the rest. good luck
I really enjoyed your piece. I got wrapped up in your character. I could see and hear him reciting his poem to his beloved standing behind the wall. no corrections needed. look forward to reading more
awesome piece. I love the flow and I think we all know at least one of those "I" people. wording is nicely done. I wouldn't change anything, I look forward to reading more of your work.
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