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Rated: E | (4.5)
I had a great review and then my screen shot up and it disappeared.
You caught and held my attention with 'bacon'. I haven't had breakfast, so I departed long enough to chop corned beef and potatoes and get them frying. lol See how inspiring you are? The mark of a great writer.

'room with light that (is) not that much different'

'lives as the bottom'-did you mean lives 'at' the bottom?

I am a singer. I sang at Carnegie Hall. However I am not a piano player and didn't get all the references. I appreciate your putting so much thought into this short story. It made me think. I did enjoy the piece even in my ignorance.

Are you also a musician? Thank you so much for sharing this with us. Ruwth sent me a link to it. Keep writing.
love, LinnAnn

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Review of Pants on Fire  
for entry "Setting Priorities" 
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
You cracked me up, you really did, then of course I added to that crack up. roflol

I must have a touch of OCD.

You did well, rhythm was fine and the rhyming was fine until the last line. You had the 'look' of rhyming with the iss ending, HOWEVER, giggle, my brain was not going to accept the iss look like it rhymes. My brain would not, absolutely would not say re miss. It kept saying -re -my -sis.

I know that is totally stupid, but my brain has a micro mini me in it. The mini me brain threw a conniption fit and kept saying remises.

I hope you get a laugh out of this. It cracked me up. *Rolling*

Thanks for sharing with us.
love, LinnAnn

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Review of Unexpected Grace  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This was very moving and I can identify with it, and the emotions it tells about.

I have forgotten the smaller details of the poetry form. Yours is not consistent throughout.

I love the first verse by the way. The first three lines rhyme with the last not. I get it. Your second verse follows the form.

Then the third and fourth verses do not. The first two lines rhyme and the next two rhyme together.

I do not think that is the pattern I was taught here at writing.com or college. I can't even remember the name of the type of poetry.

I really do like this and am so glad you shared it.
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Review of LIFE AND DEATH  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I'm not sure I agree with yours opinion but it does seem to go by faster at times. lol Fifty or sixty years at a job is a long time; they can add up fast.

Death...well, it can be close but then it can be at a distance. When you're young it seems far off.

I understand the wanting to cut it short at times. Life can be very difficult and hard to bear. If you need to talk, I'm here.

I wasn't sure if your last line was referring to the writer or what. Is it hinting that the writer is suffering of drug overdose, or overdose of lifes' difficulties?

Thanks for sharing this.
love, LinnAnn

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Review of Magic Mirror  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I love the 'magic mirror' aspect. It's so cute and cool. It helped to draw me in and held my attention

You're first answer intrigued me. An angel ornament? A baby?

The answer about the various sounds she heard sort of threw me. I'm in the north, so hearing birds and bees out at Christmas isn't what I hear at that time of year. lol I've never heard singing flowers, not even the solar moving ones. lol

Then back to what type of Angel is under the tree? A real one, an ornament, a gift, a child? This was intriguing and thought provoking.
Thanks so much for sharing it with us.
Love, LinnAnn

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Review of Love You  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I really can empathize with your first two lines. It's so much nicer when you can get suggestions instead of criticism.

The next two lines of your poem definitely sounds like a woman who is insecure. It drew me in and made me feel. It also made me want to read more.

The next two lines gave a hint and the next to the last line makes the reader anxious for the writer and her needs.

Then the last line seems to have the happy ending we were all waiting for. I take it the writer was reassured of their love. Did I get it right?
Thanks so much for sharing this with us.

Love, LinnAnn
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Review of Cloaked Desires  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
If the passion is unbridled, then it's not concealed. Just thought I would mention that.
You smallest opening, then paired with 'burst through' was well done. To have the two opposites in the same line, sort of a yin yang (not sure if I said that right) kind of thing.

Flickering appears is a tantalizing line, short and powerful.

Then you break our hearts with the torn apart.

Mourning from the /a distance. There is a subtle difference and I wasn't sure if 'the' is what you wanted. Mourning the distance, or mourning the person at a distance.

Thank you so much for sharing this with us.
love, LinnAnn

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Your first verse didn't rhyme but your second verse did, three in a row. Was that on purpose? You got me to thinking about the light v/s dark and not give you both. I wouldn't want only darkness. It would be so heartbreaking.

Poetry is known best to the writer, we the readers can only interpret through out own minds and hearts. Just in case this is a real feeling, I hope you only have light then.

This was a very thought provoking poem. You drew me in and made me pause to think and feel.

Thanks for sharing this with us.
Love, LinnAnn

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Review of The Morning After  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Okay, I liked your 'twist'. ROFLOL Now, if you were an assassin wouldn't you wash your hands before going to sleep? Or were you sleep walking/murdering? This could be a great story. I love it. Made me laugh big time. Okay, critique time. (giggle)
It was short, to the point, held my attention and pulled me in. I loved the laughter.

Thanks so much for sharing your short poem. If I knew how to award something I would. (still laughing)
love, LinnAnn

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Rated: E | (5.0)
I really enjoyed reading this article. It was very informative and actually humorous, in a ridiculous manner with the 'how not to'. I shall save this article so I have it to refer to later.

My goal this month is to search for an agent and to learn to write a query letter. Thanks so much for all the effort you put into helping us along.
love, LinnAnn

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Rated: E | (4.5)
You need to come to my house the next time your cupboard is bare. roflol I have a lot of food. What can you make with seven bell peppers?

You gave good detail and so I had good imagery. I didn't smell it but with the Italian seasoning did it taste like French bread? lol

You need to have some canned goods on hand. lol Come on over for hot cross buns.
Thanks for sharing.
love, LinnAnn
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I have to tell you. I read this while at the library and it took extra effort to not bust up laughing in the quiet zone. This was so funny!

I didn't get the point about the 'clearer than mud' and the 'dents' but I figured it was the poor mans chances of getting hurt by women? It seems he came out okay. Happy ending, right?
Thanks so much for sharing.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Summer Storm  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Your first verse is shorter in line length, and second verse would be easy to match to it.

Take out the first word-'above'
Take out 'distant'

Mind, these are just suggestions.

Love the third verse. I could feel the goose bumps.

Maybe 'as dust and debris fly by'?

Sleep while storm is raging? You are a heavy sleeper. lol The apple tree branches scraping my walls wake me up.
Thanks for sharing this with us.
love, LinnAnn
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Right off I love the way you did the wrap around sentence, but so the rhyme part is right on. Good going.

This poem is so absolutely great. I don't give fives very often, but this one deserves it.

You drew me in and held my rapt attention. You used great word choices, great imagery and made me fall in love in you short four verses.

Thanks so much for sharing this with us.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Always  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This poem was so full of pain it made my heart ache. I read line after line of hurt, aching and sadness. If that is a spouse, sorry, I'd boot him/her out. Who wants to live with that agony day after day?

It got happier at the end but I was confused because the sadness was still intermingled in with the hope.

You drew me in, held my attention and made me feel for the pov of write.
Thanks for sharing.
love, LinnAnn

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Rated: E | (4.5)
I'm so glad you added the explanation at the end. lol My head wasn't thinking dog and playing fetch. My head was driving up in the car at a stadium. Picturing kids waiting for permission to get out of the car to go in.

Crowds cheering when the ball flies up. I'm picturing a great catch in the outfield or a home run. lol The family all proud and happy their team won. Sooooo different than what you meant. giggle
Thanks for sharing. Great imagery both ways. lol
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Never Again...  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Oh wow! This was brilliantly done. I got to the 'hands tied', and was thinking figuratively and then I kept reading. WoW. The 'body removed from the scene' was a clue I missed until I reread it. I thought she'd moved away or he had, then that clue.

The hand washing made it hit home. So creepy- scary done so well.
Thanks for sharing.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of To the one I love  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Very nicely done! I learned something new with this style. I hope I can remember it. lol The repetition was great, not over done, and your rhyming at the end of the lines was also well done.

I love the last line the best. "You are my shore." How many people can say that anymore?
Thank you so much for sharing this with us.
love, LinnAnn
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Rated: E | (4.5)
You wrote a poem, so yes, you ARE a poet now. lol

It might read a little bit easier if there were a couple of blank lines in there, or even one such as separating the way he treats you and where you describe what she did to him. It's just something to think about after all YOU are the poet. (giggle)

Thought provoking and held my interest.

Nicely done and I like the question at the end.
Thanks so much for sharing.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Flame  
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
you really hit the 'red head' on the head. roflol

I loved this poem, it made me smile and almost burst out laughing here at Taco Bell. I'm still grinning.

It's hard to come up with a two hundred fifty character review for a seventeen character poem especially when I summed it up in the first sentence. I would have given this a five star rating, but I guess I can't.

I'm still grinning. I knew a few redheads and this poem fits them so well.

Thanks so much for sharing this. I'm still grinning.
love, LinnAnn

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Wow, you had a fun family. Your beach trips sound wonderful.

You may want to add a possessive apostrophe to show dad's ownership in the first verse.

'Motor wipers', is that the same as windshield wipers?

Holes in the floor...I don't think I'd be dumping out the sweets, but it does rhyme. lol

'Chalk and cheese' was that the color of your hair? White and yellow. Was 'fringe' your hair?

I was a dainty tomboy, so understood that verse. roflol

Your 'shooting drivers' I'm not sure I got that. Did you have a BB gun and actually shoot peoples rear ends? If that is what you meant, you might want to consider 'drivers behinds' and make it plural.

I didn't get the pinches and pokes making drivers have eyes?

I think you meant 'sweat stained' instead of 'sweet stained'.

I loved how you used 'snaps' to rhyme. Good job.

Were 'Sooty and Sweep' teddy bears you owned or were they characters from a book?

What is a 'sarnie'? What is 'salt and shake'?

I loved the 'fly with those dragons'. I have a couple of dragon books I'm working on, and comparing them works so well.

You did well on your rhyming.

I do hope you take the time to answer my questions. Where in the UK are you from?
Thanks for sharing.
love, LinnAnn

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Review of Bonsai  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Your syllable count was right on, and I'm not sure if I've ever seen a two stanza Haiku.

You sure are clever to get the format to also fit the other format of first letters spelling the type of tree. Good for you.

You were even able to put in about how to make the Bonsai tree. I loved it.
Thanks for sharing
love, LinnAnn
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Review of A Dark December  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I'd say you did quite well in conveying a creepy, sinister atmosphere. lol That is hard to do in such a teeny, tiny format.

I liked the 'silent' whispering. Great intro and attention getter.

The 'Darkness closing in' is also good for invoking creepy and mystery.

The 'ice wind' helps to complete the creepy feeling, however, it made me really think about the mental issues that would make someone feel icy cold. Very puzzling and again, held my attention.
Thanks for sharing.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Old Leafy Lane  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This was so sad. You caught my attention and drew me in. His tears and sorrow touched my heart.

I liked the part about her forever young face, even though she must have been elderly when she passed.

Your rhyming was spot on and done well. The imagery was also done well and I could see the graveyard.

My heart reached out to him as he walked home alone.

Thanks for sharing.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Swan (Octelle)  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I don't think I've read this style before. Thanks for the introduction! lol

I think you did very well with the rhyming at the end of each line, very well indeed. I didn't read one line that had the obvious, expected rhyming couples, like 'love/above'. You did great.

Thanks you so much for sharing with us.
love, LinnAnn
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