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Review of Santa's Vacation  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I loved your poem. lol You gave me good imagery on the Santa in shorts etc. lol I did wonder how Santa would lose the 'love handles. You rhymed it well. That was very creative!

The last verse- Seemed and beam...beam just made me cringe, too predictable? The rest was just delightful.
Thanks for sharing
Merry Christmas
Love, LinnAnn
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I really enjoyed your posting today. I am so glad you were not the start of those fires! lol

You sure do have a busy schedule. Does all that driving from state or city to another one get exhausting?

I am so glad you included a photo. I hope you put in a few (or lots)of the NYC Christmas lights.

Take care as you drive.
I love your posts even if I can't get to town to see them often enough. And thanks for the trinkets you put in them. lol
love, LinnAnn
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Never completed--just a thought what if you took off the 'ed'? Just seems to maybe fit better.

When I think of discordance, I think music, but so far you've just mentioned drumming.

liquefaction -if I had a dictionary with me, I'd look that up. I've never heard of it before.

thirsty dead? if someone or something is dead, they won't be thirsty.

The third verse -eagle tied with chains I didn't get but the rest was great.

red organ sounded like a heart, but I'm not sure.

I'm not sure if I got the poem, but it was very interesting.
Thanks for sharing
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Ellipses Eclipsed  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I'm sitting in the library for the internet, and the cracking up laughing gets stares from other patrons. lol

I use ellipses...as a place to pause. lol

I love your poem. It is humorous and inventive. I love your creativity. Plot is supposed to go in where you have ellipses? I always used it, like I said...for a pause. ha ha ha
love, LinnAnn
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I had the review done and it disappeared. I hope to be able to remember all that I put in.

You caught my attention and held it, and made me smile. This was a very intimate poem. I felt a bit like a voyeur, standing there watching you sleep, with a smile on your face.

I liked the last three lines the best.
Thanks for sharing.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Darkness Creeps  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I have to admit, that was some vivid and explosive imagery. You did some great story telling techniques there. You drew me in, held my attention and even made me lean forward in expectation of the light winning.

Then you pull one of those cliff hanger moves and have the dark still there creeping. lol

Thanks for sharing.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Travel Pictures  
Rated: E | (5.0)
If ti weren't NANOWRIMO, I'd be reviewing a lot more. But I always love the pictures. Tahnks so much for all your photos.
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Review of Snow day  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I suggest maybe putting a blank line in between verses. It would make it easier to read and comment on.

I love the 'dorky friend Jed' lol I was wondering if you knew what a dork was? If not find a dictionary. I use that word too, but once someone told me what it meant, it now causes me to laugh.

I laughed at the last two lines. You are clever.

Your rhyme and rhythm were spot on and it read easy and smoothly.

Thanks so much for sharing.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Warm in the Snow  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Your first line is in bold, but I don't know if it's the title or the first line. If both, you may want to leave it bold but put a double space between it and the actual poem. Then put it in again as the first line.

The poem itself is a delightful mental picture of two friends building the snowman. The last two lines is so sweet. I'd never thought of the fun of putting a snowman together quite like that,
Thanks for sharing.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Winter's Foe  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I really enjoyed most of this. I loved the second line, I love snow. We rarely get it. Your third line I absolutely love!

I'm not too keen on the last line of that verse. Exhaust makes me think of smoggy LA.

First line of second verse makes me think of rain, not just covering the sun.

What do you mean by 'blustered slide'? I love the last line for that verse. Great mental picture.

Third verse is a great transition verse for spring. I love the last verse a lot. "Awakened spring bursts into bloom.'

All in all, a great poem.
Thanks so much for sharing.
Love, LinnAnn
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Review of Silent Witness  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
What a combination of wretched grief and remorse. You really pulled me in and held my attention. Over and over with the 'hang my head and weep' you punched a hole in my heart.

You made it sound so real, and so devastating. I will have to go read something perky to restore my mood. You really did get to me.
Thanks for sharing...even though it was so sad.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Time's Deceit  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
That is something amazing the picture you put in with the poem. Your poem was really thought provoking. The style was great, easy to read, rhythm was easy and cadence worked great.

Your first word really set the stage, and the last line really said it all. Age does creep up on us, and it seems so quickly too.

Thanks so much for sharing this with us.
love, LinnAnn
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Rated: E | (4.5)
just a thought, but I'd take out 'the' in the second line.
I'd put a ' in front of round since you're taking out the a in front.
I'd take out the 'flying' in flying bat, it's already clean

'until the time to go' you could leave off 'the'

I really enjoyed your poem! What a fun piece of work. You caught and held my attention very well. The Warlocks wine, was funny. I'll have to borrow that for my punch if I have a party this year.
Thanks so much for sharing.
Love, LinnAnn
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I loved it. Your poem gave me a warm feeling and reminded me when I used to teach water color to a 6th grade class on Fridays so the teacher could have prep time.

It is rewarding to wake a mind and to instill a love of anything new.

You might want to think about the form. It would have been easier to read the rhythm.

I love your last line the best. lol I'd have put 'teach' in instead of preach, just because some people get really negative about that word.
Thanks for sharing this with us.
love, LinnAnn
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I realize you had to use certain words and you used them very well. The usage was very effective. Startling but effective. lol

The sad part is, our world is more full of ignorance than ever in the last fifty years.

I loved your 'crushing weight of adulthood'

I hope you do someday get that dead faced boy, or girl, to come up and thank you. I have maintained contact with one student, who works at WalMart. It's nice to be appreciated and see your hard work pay off in someone.
Thanks for sharing your heartfelt poem.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of My new students  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Okay, you can't leave me hanging...what quirky thing did you learn about yourself?

I was a teacher, so I can identify with your nerves. Were you an English as a Second Language teacher? I was with Spanish and the Croatians.

I'm not sure how the silence was corrosive.

You had good rhythm and I didn't have to say any of the lines twice to make them fit! lol

You gave good imagery and a good feel of your emotions and the students as well.
Thanks for the walk down memory lane.
Thanks for sharing with us.
love, LinnAnn

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Loved the line in the fourth verse about 'a boy contrary'.

Dog gone it. You made me cry when you told of Willy crying. So obviously you drew me in and held my attention.

'as if in a fetter'...I'll have to look that one up when I get home. lol

I'm at the library, and you are making me cry my head off.

I used to be a teacher. I have one student that has kept in touch.
Thank you for sharing this poem with me.
love, LinnAnn

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Review of The Storm  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Oh my goodness. I am sitting here stunned. lol What horrible event inspired this all too impacting poem? Seriously, you were either in the depths of depression or wanted to inflict pain on someone?

This was well done. You drew me in, made my chest tighten and held my attention. What a dreadful, but well written poem. lol
thanks? for sharing. lol
Love, LinnAnn
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Review of Darkness Falls  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I just couldn't get the rhythm or cadence of the verses. I counted the syllables to make sure it wasn't just me. Maybe it's a style I'm not used to?

It took me till the end to 'get it' lol At first I just couldn't figure out the thing that was having a 'rebirth' and pushing up out of the ground. The last verse got through to my brain.

Very interesting way to tell of the ghosts and the building. Thanks for sharing.

Love, LinnAnn
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Rated: E | (4.5)
What a lovely picture. I'm not crazy about desert, you know that, but this is cool. Good depth showing in the color changes as the eye is pulled forward.

Good movement with the river. I also like the different plants, and the long spindly ones, add good texture. The red rock in forefront is also good contrast.
Thanks for sharing.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Two Family Haiku  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Your first haiku gave me great imagery. That is the kind of 'grandma' mental picture I like. lol Is this based on your grandmothers home?

Your second Haiku got me to chuckling. You ask 'Where am I from now?' and I saw the date was ten years ago. So yes, where are you now? I'd love an answer.

Thanks so much for sharing.
love, LinnAnn

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Rated: E | (4.5)
What a happy way to spend with the family. Such joy in this poem. Good imagery too. It's nice to have happy and joyous poems here.

You did a good job in moving the 'Festival of lights, Good triumps' throughout the poem and keeping the format.

I like the second to last line. I give treats to neighbors and those that help me as a way of saying thank you.
Thanks for sharing.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Final Warning  
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Some of the lines weren't as smooth or matching syllables.

Cute topics on the verses.

I really liked the stick verse lol.

The whole poem reminds me of me and my kids, well, except the spitting part and drinking. lol

The last verse really reminds me of my kids. They used to get into so much trouble when they were little and now are so uptight.

I hope you are the one rooting for the grandma.
Thanks for sharing.
love, LinnAnn

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Review of I'm Older!  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
It means you get to get arthritis first while little sis gets to still climb mountains, surf and all sorts of fun stuff. lol

Cute poem as far as it goes. roflol I think Mother should have mentioned some of those things big sister didn't think of. Sorry, I'm cracking up here just thinking about it...First to get wrinkles!

Thanks for sharing. I enjoyed the laugh.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Building Castles  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is the third time I've tried to write this. It keeps disappearing. I keep hitting the wrong key or something.

I love the poem. You did great with the imagery, the clouds, you even named the type of cloud! The storyline goes through time, love that.

I love the great detail in describing the sounds, even smells of the beach.

Thanks so much for sharing.
love, LinnAnn

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